Re: [OPSAWG] I-D Action: draft-ietf-opsawg-l2nm-07.txt

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Hi Moti,

Thank you for catching these nits. Fixed at: https://github.com/IETF-OPSAWG-WG/lxnm/commit/7e6a2389a7bd4672a6b70935ea1c38ea8ed75acd

Cheers,
Med

De : Moti Morgenstern <[e-mail]>
Envoyé : dimanche 3 octobre 2021 12:01
À : BOUCADAIR Mohamed INNOV/NET <[e-mail]>; [e-mail]
Cc : [e-mail]
Objet : RE: I-D Action: draft-ietf-opsawg-l2nm-07.txt

Hi all,

Typos I noticed in revision -07:
·         Caption of Figure 34 - correct the word "Auto-Assignement"
·         Last paragraph of 6.6.2.1 - correct the word "Nighbour" to "Neighbor"
·         Chapter 6.7 'global-parameters-profile' - correct "overriden" to "overridden"
·         Just before Figure 21 - correct "take precendence over the one inlcudes"
·         identity lacp-active - Description clause - correct the word "establishement"
·         identity lacp-passive - Description clause - correct the word "endopoint"

Regards,
Moti

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Hi all,

This version integrates the WGLC comments we received so far, mainly:
* add ES members as suggested by Moti
* fix the redundant evpn-type as catched by Julian.

Also, we made other changes to echo the IESG comments received against vpn-common and L3VPN, mainly:
* update the security section to cover profile and ES related considerations.
* add some subsections + position trees before the description text for better readability

We also fixed some nits, add more references when we thought it was missing, fix LACP container, and some examples.

If you have already started to review -06 but didn't manage to finish it, please just proceed with that version and circulate these comments. You don't to bother yourself to check whether these comments were addressed in -07. We will be doing that check for you.

Cheers,
Med

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> This draft is a work item of the Operations and Management Area
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>         Title           : A Layer 2 VPN Network YANG Model
>         Authors         : Samier Barguil
>                           Oscar Gonzalez de Dios
>                           Mohamed Boucadair
>                           Luis Angel Munoz
>        Filename        : draft-ietf-opsawg-l2nm-07.txt
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>        Date            : 2021-10-01
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