Re: [Pals] Routing Directorate review of draft-ietf-pals-rfc4447bis
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Subject: Re: [Pals] Routing Directorate review of draft-ietf-pals-rfc4447bis
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Adrian, Thanks for the review! Cheers, Andy On Sun, Feb 21, 2016 at 10:16 AM, Adrian Farrel <adrian@olddog.co.uk> wrote: > Hello, > > I have been selected as the Routing Directorate reviewer for this draft. > The Routing Directorate seeks to review all routing or routing-related > drafts as they pass through IETF last call and IESG review. The purpose of > the review is to provide assistance to the Routing ADs. For more > information about the Routing Directorate, please see > http://trac.tools.ietf.org/area/rtg/trac/wiki/RtgDir > > Although these comments are primarily for the use of the Routing ADs, it > would be helpful if you could consider them as the draft advances, and > strive to resolve them through discussion or by updating the draft. > > Thanks, > Adrian > > === > > Document: draft-ietf-pals-rfc4447bis-03.txt > Reviewer: Adrian Farrel > Review Date: 21 February 2016 > IETF LC End Date: Not yet started > Intended Status: Internet Standard > > = Summary = > > I have some minor concerns about this document that I think should be > resolved before publication. > > = Comments = > > I'm OK to see 4447 being advanced to full standard, although I'm also a > little surprised that there was energy to do it. > > The work is largely mechanical. My comments are a mix of minor process > concerns (that your AD should be able to resolve), minor text > clarifications, and nits. > > It's been a while since I was concerned with LDP, but I have no reason to > doubt the integrity of this document. > > = Major Issues = > > No major issues found. > > = Minor Issues = > > I believe that this document should be marked as obsoleting 4447 and > 6723. It will result in a new RFC with a new number, so 4447 will no > longer be relevant. And, as Section 1 says: a new section (6.3) on > control-word renegotiation by label request message has been added, > obsoleting RFC 6723. > > By the way, it is section 7.3 (not 6.3) that you have added! > > [NB: Q16 of the Shepherd write-up seems a bit garbled on this front. > Especially "Will publication of this document change the status of any > existing RFCs?" seems to need a much clearer answer!] > > --- > > I'm not up to speed on the new process for advancing a specification to > Internet-Standard when it has normative references that are not > similarly advanced/advancing. I do know that the process changed > recently and I am sure that your AD can look it up. > > --- > > It might be a reasonable question to ask why some of the > (informatively) referenced related PW RFCs (such as encapsulations) > are not being advanced at the same time, especially those that are > described as "companion documents". > > --- > > It seems unnecessary petty-fogging process, but the inclusion of > section 7.3 seems to me to defeat the stability requirement for > advancement to Internet Standard unless your claim here is that you > are advancing 4447 and 6723 together in this single document. That > might be fine. > > --- > > The Errata that have been deliberately disregarded need to be marked as > Rejected. I think the ones that have been actioned could usefully be > marked as Verified or have a note added saying "fixed in RFCabcd". > > As far as I can tell: > > 3554 was not actioned > 938 was done > 86 was done > 3555 was done > 3115 no longer applies > 3114 was done > 3112 was done > 1530 was done > > --- > > Because you (incorrectly) said that section 6.3 was new text, I gave it > careful review. I think the text is in rather poor state: > > For example, in 6.3.1... > > Using the procedures > outlined in this section, a simple label withdraw method MAY also be > supported as a legacy means of signaling PW status and AC status. > > ...Since this is *the* specification now, what does "legacy" mean? > > Indeed, you end 6.3.1 with... > The PW status > signaling procedures described in this section MUST be fully > implemented. > ...which kind of implies ... hmm. > > I think you could rework 6.3.1 to handle this more gracefully and avoid > the "clunk" of the 2nd para... > > Once the PW status negotiation procedures are completed and if they > > ...where we are surprised to hear about status negotiation. > > For example: > > OLD > The PEs MUST send Label Mapping Messages to their peers as soon as > the PW is configured and administratively enabled, regardless of the > attachment circuit state. The PW label should not be withdrawn > unless the operator administratively configures the pseudowire down > (or the PW configuration is deleted entirely). Using the procedures > outlined in this section, a simple label withdraw method MAY also be > supported as a legacy means of signaling PW status and AC status. In > any case, if the label-to-PW binding is not available the PW MUST be > considered in the down state. > > Once the PW status negotiation procedures are completed and if they > result in the use of the label withdraw method for PW status > communication, and this method is not supported by one of the PEs, > then that PE must send a Label Release Message to its peer with the > following error: > > "Label Withdraw PW Status Method Not Supported" > > If the label withdraw method for PW status communication is selected > for the PW, it will result in the Label Mapping Message being > advertised only if the attachment circuit is active. The PW status > signaling procedures described in this section MUST be fully > implemented. > NEW > The PEs MUST send Label Mapping Messages to their peers as soon as > the PW is configured and administratively enabled, regardless of the > attachment circuit state. The PW label should not be withdrawn > unless the operator administratively configures the pseudowire down > (or the PW configuration is deleted entirely). > > Section 6.3.2 describes a mechanism for signaling the status of the > PW and AC. Additionally, a simple label withdraw method MAY be used > to signal the PW status and AC status. In any case, if the label-to- > PW binding is not available the PW MUST be considered to be in the > down state. > > The PEs negotiate which PW and AC status signaling mechanism to use > by following the procedures in Section 6.3.3. If the PW negotiation > procedures are completed and if they result in the use of the simple > label withdraw method for PW status communication, and if this method > is not supported by one of the PEs then that PE must send a Label > Release Message to its peer with the following error: > > "Label Withdraw PW Status Method Not Supported" > > If the label withdraw method for PW status communication is selected > for the PW, it will result in the Label Mapping Message being > advertised only if the AC is active. > > The PW status signaling procedures described in Section 6.3.2 MUST be > fully implemented. > END > > --- > > Section 6.3.2 achieves ambiguity by stating... > The general format of the Notification Message is: > ...and then showing the specific case of "PW status". > > You can fix this by re-ordering and tweaking slightly, as follows. > > Note that the old text says: > Since this notification does not > refer to any particular message, the Message Id and Message Type > fields are set to 0. > ...but I think the Message Type is set to 0x0001 :-) > > > OLD > The Status TLV is transported to the remote PW peer via the LDP > Notification message. The general format of the Notification Message > is: > > 0 1 2 3 > 0 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 0 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 0 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 0 1 > +-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+ > |0| Notification (0x0001) | Message Length | > +-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+ > | Message ID | > +-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+ > | Status (TLV) | > +-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+ > | PW Status TLV | > +-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+ > | PWId FEC TLV or Generalized ID FEC TLV | > +-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+ > | PW Grouping ID TLV (Optional) | > +-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+ > > > > The Status TLV status code is set to 0x00000028, "PW status", to > indicate that PW status follows. Since this notification does not > refer to any particular message, the Message Id and Message Type > fields are set to 0. > NEW > The Status TLV is transported to the remote PW peer via the LDP > Notification message as described in [RFC5036]. > > The Status TLV status code is set to 0x00000028, "PW status", to > indicate that PW status follows. The format of the Notification > Message for carrying the PW Status is as follows: > > > 0 1 2 3 > 0 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 0 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 0 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 0 1 > +-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+ > |0| Notification (0x0001) | Message Length | > +-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+ > | Message ID | > +-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+ > | Status (TLV) | > +-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+ > | PW Status TLV | > +-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+ > | PWId FEC TLV or Generalized ID FEC TLV | > +-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+ > | PW Grouping ID TLV (Optional) | > +-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+ > > > Since this notification does not refer to any particular message, > the Message Id field is set to 0. > END > > --- > > Section 8 could be tidied a little. > > The use of "in general" gives the IANA no way to know whether they > should or should not update a reference. > > Are you sure that you want to remove the nice, concise listing of code > points that are present in RFC 4447? > > 8.1, 8.2, and 8.3 all say "new". I suggest deleting that word. > > And lastly, "IANA needs to..." is not what we say :-) "IANA is requested > to..." is nicer. > > [NB: The Shepherd write-up seems to report all this wrongly at Q17] > > --- > > Shouldn't the whole of Section 10 be moved to an interop report > somewhere? It's presence within the document seems somewhat temporally > unstable. I understand that you want to write it down and record it > somewhere, also that you probably developed it in the I-D as a useful > place for working text. For advice about how and where to do this you > can look at RFC 5657. > > You seem to have answered the four points from 6410, but may be missing > a little corroboration. > > > The pseudowire technology was first deployed in 2001 and has been > > widely deployed by many carriers. [RFC7079] documents the results of > > a survey of PW implementations, with specific emphasis on Control > > Word usage. [EANTC] documents a public multi-vendor interoperability > > test of MPLS and Carrier Ethernet equipment, which included testing > > of Ethernet, ATM and TDM pseudowires. > > 7079 is a slightly related piece of survey work, but the only mention of > LDP (which is the subject of *this* document) is to point out an issue > with non-implementation. > > The EANTC reference really needs something that helps us find the report > of the interop event. Possibly this is > > http://www.eantc.de/fileadmin/eantc/downloads/events/2007-2010/MPLSEWC09/EANTC-MPLSEWC2009-WhitePaper-v1.0.pdf > Looking at that paper, it definitely supports the claim of multiple > interoperating implementations of 4447. > > We lack, however, any statements about "widespread deployment and > successful operational experience." > > > The errata against [RFC4447] are all editorial in nature and have > > been addressed in this document. > > Good (except for those not addressed as above, and except that some of > those errata are incorrectly marked as "Technical"). > > > All features in this specification have been implemented by multiple > > vendors. > > How do we know this? > Further, are all the features used? One point of this step in the > process is to prune out features that are unnecessary (and so complicate > implementation and operation, and cost money). > > > There is no IPR filed against this document or its predecessor. > > This may be overly vague (you probably mean "No IPR disclosures have > been made to the IETF related to this document, to RFC 4447 or RFC 6723, > or to the Internet-Drafts that resulted in RFC 4447 and RFC 6723."). > > --- > > = Nits = > > In the Abstract, probably... > > OLD > This document has been written to address errata in a previous > version of this standard. > NEW > This document has been written to address errata in a previous > version of this specification. > END > > But, actually, I think you are missing the main purpose which is to > advance the spec to full standard. > > On reflection, I think that this paragraph probably served well in the > draft as it was being processed, but can be removed now. The equivalent > text obviously needs to be in the shepherd write-up. > > [ditto the paragraph in the introduction] > > --- > > Thank you for including Section 1. It's important and helpful. > > Three tiny points: > > Second para should probably s/However/Additionally/ > > The RFC Editor requires that section 1 is the Introduction. A simple > solution is to swap sections 1 and 2, or to move the current section 2 > to be the new section 1 and the current section 1 to be section 1.1. > > The text says "A note was added to clarify that the C-bit is part of > the FEC." I think you should s/was/has been/ and you could also usefully > give a little hint as to where the note was added. > > --- > > Shouldn't you mention the inclusion of text referencing 7358? This is > clearly a change to the original text. I wonder, however, whether what > really want to do is take that part of 7358 that updated 4447 and simply > write it here so that this spec has no need of that reference. > > Either way, you also need to take care about the stability requirement > for advancement. > > --- > > In 6.2.2.1 > please note that IANA has "PW Interface Parameters TLV" not "Interface > Parameters TLV". > > The is a good chance to make this consistent. > > --- > > In 6.2.2.2 and the rest of the document, please note that the IANA has > "PW Group ID TLV" not "PW Grouping ID TLV". > > The is a good chance to make this consistent. > > --- > > 6.3.2 has a figure which claims to include a "PWId FEC TLV" or a > "Generalized ID FEC TLV". However, 6.1 and 6.2 describe these as > "elements" not TLVs and they show up in the Forwarding Equivalence Class > (FEC) Type Name Space. > > I think you can clarify 6.3.2 by explaining that what is included here > is "a FEC TLV containing either a PWId FEC element or a Generalized FEC > element. > > Then, just after the figure you have "The PW FEC TLV" but it is just a > "FEC TLV" > > --- > > In 7.3 you have "re-provisioned". I wonder whether you mean > "re-configured". "Provisioning" has a context initial set-up, so re- > provisioning suggests (to me?) re-initialization. > > --- > > In the first para of 7.3 you have "PW C-bit negotiation procedure" and > "Control-Word negotiation procedures". > > Could you decide on a single name, and on whether it is singular or > plural. > > --- > > 7.3 > OLD > -i. If local PE has previously sent a Label Mapping message, it > MUST send a Label Withdraw message to remote PE and wait > NEW > -i. If the local PE has previously sent a Label Mapping message, it > MUST send a Label Withdraw message to the remote PE and wait > END > > --- > > 7.3 > OLD > -ii. the local PE MUST send a label release message to the remote > NEW > -ii. The local PE MUST send a Label Release message to the remote > END > > --- > > 7.3 > s/negotaiation/negotiation/ > s/renegotation/renegotiation/ > > --- > > 7.3 > > The above C-bit renegotiation process SHOULD NOT be interrupted until > it is completed, or unpredictable results might occur. > > This is a bit odd. Normally the "or" that follows a "SHOULD" or "SHOULD > NOT" explains the conditions under which you might want to vary the > "SHOULD". > > But I'm struggling: interrupted by whom and by doing what? > > --- > > Some of the formatting in the references seems to have been hit with a > global change of /. /. / You might want to polish. > > --- > > The latest version of G.707 is dated January 2007. Is there any reason > to not update the reference? > > --- > > Have a look at Section 8 of RFC 5036 for an example of a nice way to > handle "legacy authors" and credits for past work. > > In any case, the RFC Editor will require that Section 15 is renamed > "Contributors". > > --- > > There are two trivial nits from idnits. > >
- [Pals] Routing Directorate review of draft-ietf-p… Adrian Farrel
- Re: [Pals] Routing Directorate review of draft-ie… Andrew G. Malis
- [Pals] Re:[RTG-DIR] Routing Directorate review of… Lizhong Jin