[Pals] Opsdir telechat review of draft-ietf-pals-p2mp-pw-lsp-ping-03
Tianran Zhou <zhoutianran@huawei.com> Fri, 02 June 2017 08:06 UTC
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Subject: [Pals] Opsdir telechat review of draft-ietf-pals-p2mp-pw-lsp-ping-03
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Reviewer: Tianran Zhou
Review result: Has Nits
I have reviewed this document as part of the Operational directorate's ongoing effort to review all IETF documents being processed by the IESG. These comments were written with the intent of improving the operational aspects of the IETF drafts. Comments that are not addressed in last call may be included in AD reviews during the IESG review. Document editors and WG chairs should treat these comments just like any other last call comments.
Document reviewed: draft-ietf-pals-p2mp-pw-lsp-ping-03
Summary:
No issue found. This document is well written, and is ready for publication.
Only a couple of nits, for the authors consideration:
1. in section 1, "Multipoint LDP (mDLP)"
Is the acronym "mLDP"?
2. in section 1,
"Multi-segment Pseudowires support is out of scope of this document at
present and may be included in future."
At this stage, the I-D is stable. I think you can just say "Multi-segment Pseudowires support is out of scope of this document".
3. in section 6,
"MLDP" should align with the previous acronym in section 1, i.e. "mLDP".
And there is auto check result from the system:
== Unused Reference: 'RFC5085' is defined on line 325, but no explicit
reference was found in the text
** Obsolete normative reference: RFC 4379
Summary: 1 error (**), 0 flaws (~~), 1 warning (==), 1 comment (--).
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the items above.
Regards,
Tianran
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