[Pals] Ben Campbell's No Objection on draft-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree-10: (with COMMENT)

["Ben Campbell" <[e-mail]>]

Ben Campbell has entered the following ballot position for
draft-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree-10: No Objection

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COMMENT:
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- Section 3, first paragaph:
This seems to use 2119 keywords to describe existing requirements from
the referenced specification. Please avoid 2119 keywords for that (unless
in the form of direct quotes).

-9:
Can you elaborate on how the prevention of leaf-to-leaf communication
enhances security? As written, this seems to leave the actual enhancement
for the reader to infer.

- 4, last sentence:
s/are/is