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Re: [pim] Last Call: <draft-ietf-pim-igmp-mld-proxy-yang-07.txt> (A Yang Data Model for IGMP/MLD Proxy) to Proposed Standard

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Subject: Re: [pim] Last Call: <draft-ietf-pim-igmp-mld-proxy-yang-07.txt> (A Yang Data Model for IGMP/MLD Proxy) to Proposed Standard
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On 25/10/2022 20:27, The IESG wrote:
>
> The IESG has received a request from the Protocols for IP Multicast WG (pim)
> to consider the following document: - 'A Yang Data Model for IGMP/MLD Proxy'
>    <draft-ietf-pim-igmp-mld-proxy-yang-07.txt> as Proposed Standard
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> The IESG plans to make a decision in the next few weeks, and solicits final
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Last time I got this wrong but I believe that 225.0 is not appropriate 
for documentation use.  It should be 233.252.0/24 as per RFC5771.

In places, the spacing is double line spaced (which has appeared in 
other recent I-Ds).    I see this in parts of s.5 and s.6.1 and in thee 
YANG Editors.

Simplified BSD should now be Revised BSD.

YANG has a 'should not' but no reference to RFC8174.

'membership report or leave' would be clearer to me with another word or 
two, such as 'message'


Tom Petch

> Abstract
>
>
>     This document defines a YANG data model that can be used to
> configure and manage Internet Group Management Protocol (IGMP) or
> Multicast Listener Discovery (MLD) proxy devices. The YANG module in
> this document conforms to Network Management Datastore Architecture
> (NMDA).
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> The file can be obtained via
> https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-pim-igmp-mld-proxy-yang/
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