Re: [pim] AD review of draft-ietf-pim-pop-count
Stig Venaas <stig@venaas.com> Tue, 10 April 2012 18:32 UTC
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Hi I've been editing the document and hopefully resolved most of your concerns. Please see my comments below. Unless you see any obvious issues based on my comments, I can go ahead and submit a new version. Note that these changes are fairly big, I made a few additional ones, so I feel we also need to give the WG some time to review them. And of course also for you and the other authors to review them. Thanks a lot, I think this improved the document significantly. I also found some issues myself that I tried to take care of. On 4/9/2012 10:58 AM, Stig Venaas wrote: > On 4/3/2012 1:38 PM, Adrian Farrel wrote: >> Hi, >> >> Sorry I sat on this I-D a while doing my review. The review is my >> usual pass over the document to iron out nits that I think might >> show up in IETF last call, Directorate reviews, or during IESG >> evaluation. By catching the issues at this stage we can save the >> effort of multiple reviewers, and achieve a smoother passage >> through the publication process. >> >> All of my comments can be discussed. > > Thanks for the detailed review. Your comments look good. I will start > working on an update. > > Stig > >> >> As it stands, I think a new revision would help address these point >> so I will move the I-D into "New Revision Required" state, and when >> I see an update I will advance the document to IETF last call. Please >> be sure that the new revision passes idnits. >> >> Thanks, >> Adrian >> >> --- >> >> Please update Yiqun's email address to yiqunc@microsoft.com and his >> coordinates to Microsoft. Done >> --- >> >> The RFC Editor likes the document to begin with an Introduction, so >> you could move Section 1 into 2.1 and renumber. Done >> --- >> >> I think that the RFC Editor likes all figures to be captioned and given >> a number (e.g. Figure 1 : A Sample Foobar). Further, they like all >> figures to be explicitly referenced form the text. >> >> That sounds a bore to do, but if you have the energy it might be worth >> it. Sorry, I didn't have the energy. I don't really think it is needed. And it can be done later if it really seems to be needed. >> --- >> >> Can you s/this draft/this document/ throughout since, on publication, >> this will not be a draft any more. Done >> --- >> >> We will get push-back from the IESG to "describe the experiment". >> >> I think this can be handled relatively easily in the Introduction with >> some text such as: >> >> This is a new proposal for an extension to PIM, and it is not >> completely understood what impact collecting information using PIM >> would have on the operation of PIM. Many PIM features (including the >> core protocol) were first introduced as Experimental RFCs, and it >> seems appropriate to advance this work as Experimental. Reports of >> implementation and deployment across whole distribution trees or >> within sub-trees (see Section 7) will enable an assessment of the >> desirability and stability of this feature. The PIM working group >> will then consider whether to move this work to the Standards Track. >> >> I am only showing example text here. I am not attached to the content, >> but I am trying to cover the bases in a way that the IESG is likely to >> request. Please feel free to use other text if it works better for you. I pretty much used your text here, and acknowledged you. >> --- >> >> I think you need to expand "oif-list" on first use. Done >> --- >> >> Section 3 >> >> If a PIM router supports this draft, it must send the Pop- >> Count-Supported TLV. >> >> I think this might be better written as: >> >> A PIM router indicates that it supports this document by sending the >> Pop-Count-Supported TLV in a PIM Hello message. Yes. I'm also calling it option instead of TLV as that is the terminology usually used in the docs. >> --- >> >> Section 3 >> >> The format of the TLV is defined to be: >> >> >> 0 1 2 3 >> 0 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 0 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 0 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 0 1 >> +-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+ >> | OptionType | OptionLength | >> +-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+ >> | OptionValue | >> +-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+ >> >> OptionType = 29, OptionLength = 4, there is no OptionValue semantics >> defined at this time but will be included for expandability and be >> defined in future revisions of this draft. The format will look >> like: >> >> >> 0 1 2 3 >> 0 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 0 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 0 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 0 1 >> +-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+ >> | 29 | 4 | >> +-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+ >> | Unallocated Flags | >> +-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+ >> >> Unallocated Flags: for now should be sent as 0 and ignored on >> receipt. >> >> >> I am ambivalent about defining the flags field. Does PIM require that >> an options TLV is always the same length? If so, you are doing the >> right thing, but if not, you could equally come back later and define >> that, if the length is non-zero, the first four bytes are flags. But >> this is Experimental, so I don't object. Mainly I am curious :-) I've added some text where I define it without the options, but also say that implementations MUST accept an Hello with non-zero length and ignore the contents. This way we should be able to add flags later if needed. >> But anyway, I don't think you need the TLV format twice, and you need >> to allow IANA to make the allocation (although you can suggest a >> value in the IANA section). So you could rewrite as: >> >> The format follows the format of all Hello Option TLVs [RFC4601]: >> >> 0 1 2 3 >> 0 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 0 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 0 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 0 1 >> +-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+ >> | OptionType = TBD1 | OptionLength = 4 | >> +-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+ >> | Unallocated Flags | >> +-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+ >> >> Unallocated Flags: Unused flags SHOULD be sent as 0 and ignored on >> receipt. This document defines no flags. >> >> Then, in Section 8... >> >> OLD >> A new PIM Hello Option type, 29, has been assigned. See [HELLO] for >> details. >> NEW >> IANA is requested to define a new PIM Hello Option type in the >> registry at [HELLO]. >> >> Pop-Count Support TBD1 >> >> A value of 29 is suggested. I did something like this. But note that 29 has already been temporarily assigned for this purpose. I'm noting that in the new text. >> END >> >> >> --- >> >> Section 4 >> >> Suggest >> >> s/Pop-Count attribute/Pop-Count Join Attribute/ >> s/to process PIM Join Attribute/to process a PIM Join Attribute/ Done >> --- >> >> Section 4 >> >> Again, to leave this to IANA... >> >> OLD >> Attr Type: 2. >> NEW >> Attr Type: TBD2 >> END Done >> And then, in Section 8 >> >> OLD >> A new PIM Join Attribute type needs to be assigned. 2 is proposed in >> this draft. >> NEW >> IANA is requested to allocate a new PIM Join Attribute type. >> >> Pop-Count Join Attribute TBD2 >> >> A value of 2 is suggested. Done >> --- >> >> Section 4 >> >> Unallocated Flags: The flags which are currently not defined. >> If a new flag is defined and sent by a new implementation, an >> old implementation should preserve the bit settings. This >> means that if a bit was set in a PIM Join message from any of >> the downstream routers, then it MUST also be set in any PIM >> Join sent upstream. >> >> Am I being too pedantic? Presumably clear bits MUST also be kept clear. >> How about: >> This means that a router MUST preserve the settings of all Unallocated >> Flags in PIM Join messages received from downstream routers in any PIM >> Join sent upstream. You're absolutely right. Done. >> --- >> >> Section 4 >> >> P flag: This flag remains set if all downstream routers support >> this specification. That is, they are PIM pop-count capable. >> This allows one to tell if the entire sub-tree is completely >> accounting capable. >> >> I'm not clear about this. Is the assumption that a router will clear >> this flag if it knows that a downstream router is not PIM pop-count >> capable? (I presume that the downstream router would not clear the >> flag because it doesn't know about this I-D.) Can you clarify by saying >> who has the responsibility to clear the flag? Tried to make this clearer. >> --- >> >> Section 4.2 has some ugly XML bleedthrough >> >> <figure> >> <preamble></preamble> >> <artwork><![CDATA[ Done >> --- >> >> Section 5 has some lower case 2119-type words. Can you check to see >> whether you mean upper case. Done. Some changes. >> --- >> >> Section 6 is good. It might be nice to note at the top that the >> section is >> non-normative. Done >> However, the final paragraph (with its recommendation and use of "should >> not") seems to be important enough to promote to Section 5 and to use >> 2119 language. Done >> --- >> >> Section 9 >> >> I wonder... >> >> Does collecting this information put any additional burden on the >> routers and the network? If so, might it be something that a router >> should rate limit to prevent DoS? >> >> Does access to the information provide assistance to an attacker or >> even just violate an operator's confidentiality? If so, there should >> be a warning against sniffing attackers if the information is considered >> sensitive (I presume encrypting it is not possible). >> >> Now, you may say "so what?" but I think we should make a habit of >> raising flags so that operators are aware and thoughtful. I rewrote the security considerations, trying to discuss this. Stig >> _______________________________________________ >> pim mailing list >> pim@ietf.org >> https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/pim > > _______________________________________________ > pim mailing list > pim@ietf.org > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/pim
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- Re: [pim] AD review of draft-ietf-pim-pop-count Stig Venaas
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- Re: [pim] AD review of draft-ietf-pim-pop-count Stig Venaas
- Re: [pim] AD review of draft-ietf-pim-pop-count Adrian Farrel
- Re: [pim] AD review of draft-ietf-pim-pop-count Stig Venaas
- Re: [pim] AD review of draft-ietf-pim-pop-count Stig Venaas
- Re: [pim] AD review of draft-ietf-pim-pop-count Mike McBride
- Re: [pim] AD review of draft-ietf-pim-pop-count Greg Shepherd
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