Re: [ppsp] Fw: New Version Notification for draft-ietf-ppsp-problem-statement-06.txt
Wesley Eddy <wes@mti-systems.com> Fri, 04 November 2011 01:00 UTC
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Subject: Re: [ppsp] Fw: New Version Notification for draft-ietf-ppsp-problem-statement-06.txt
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On 10/30/2011 9:13 AM, zhangyunfei@chinamobile.com wrote: > Hi folks, > We've updated the new version of PPSP problem statement draft replying all the comments in Wes' AD review.The main changes besides editorial problems are: > 1)The definition update on chunk in section2; > 2) Update of the description of how peers find the head node and how they find each other in push and hybrid mode compared to how they find the tracker in a pull-based mode in section 4; > 3)Update of the description of section 5.1 and 5.5. > Please let me know your comments and suggestions.Thanks. Hi; this is a big improvement and you pretty much addressed all my comments, but there are still a few very minor clean-ups that I think should be made before going to IETF Last Call and IESG Review. I know these seem petty and annoying since they're now just editorial comments and not at all technical, but as this is going to be the first PPSP document to go forward for publication, I think we should strive to make it as high-quality as possible. The directorate reviews and IESG reviews will be much easier to handle if we leave them less of these kinds of things to find. I hope you'll agree. The few items I noted in this version are: - I probably wasn't clear when I commented about this before, but section 9 (References) should be specifically named "Informative References". - There are two "Authors' Addresses" sections. The second one should be deleted; it looks like it's just a template. - In references, URLs should begin with "http://" - If you check idnits: http://tools.ietf.org/idnits?url=http://tools.ietf.org/id/draft-ietf-ppsp-problem-statement-06.txt It would be good to fix the 2 "weird spacing" warnings. - I think the "missing reference" idnits comments are really just due to the lack of spaces between the reference labels and surrounding text (e.g. "foo[bar]" or "[foo]bar" is found in some places instead of "foo [bar] baz". These should be corrected by adding spaces. I'm sorry for sending this back a second time, but do think we're very close now! -- Wes Eddy MTI Systems
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