Re: [PWE3] Advancing MIB documents
"Thomas D. Nadeau" <tom.nadeau@bt.com> Tue, 18 November 2008 20:24 UTC
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From: "Thomas D. Nadeau" <tom.nadeau@bt.com>
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Hi, We will put the comments (or new draft updates) together this week and get them to you/IESG ASAP. --Tom > The following documents have all been to the IESG for balloting, and > each have outstanding DISCUSS or COMMENT positions from ADs (mostly from > our MIB expert, Dan Romascanu) that need to be addressed before the > documents can advance. In order for me to help advancing these > documents, I need new documents or RFC Editor Note text that address > these review comments - In particular those marked as "Discuss." > > 1. draft-ietf-pwe3-cep-mib (Proposed Standard) > 2. draft-ietf-pwe3-pw-atm-mib (Proposed Standard) > 3. draft-ietf-pwe3-tdm-mib-11.txt (Proposed Standard) > > Details follow.... (all of this can be found in the IESG datatracker) > > 1. draft-ietf-pwe3-cep-mib (Proposed Standard) > > This went on the IESG telechat last July, and needs either an update or > RFC Editor text to address Dan's comments below: >> >> Dan Romascanu: >> Discuss: >> [2008-07-02] (modified DISCUSSED, I dropped the previous issue #3) >> >> 1. I find the DESCRIPTION clause of the pwCepConfigError insufficient. >> Adding a description of the significance of setting each of the bits >> in the BITS construct would clarify the issue. >> >> 2. I have a hard time understanding the functionality of the >> pwCepConformanceCfgTable and I may no tbe alone. I suggest more >> clarification text about the following: >> >> 2a. What does 'CEP PW statistics objects are supported (conformed to) >> or not' mean? What is the behavior of the agent wrt. the respective >> objects if an object is not supported? What is returned on a Get >> operation on a 'not supported' object? >> >> 2b. What type of information is entered by an agent in the >> 'description' object? An example would be highly useful and also an >> indication about what is the manager supposed to do with this information. >> >> Comment: >> [2008-07-01] >> 1. I cannot understand why PwCepCfgIndexTC is a Textual Convention. It >> appears exactly once and has a very trivial syntax of runing index. >> >> 2. Introduction - mentioning the PWE3 WG and mailong list for comments >> does not seem appropriate as the WG and the list may not be permanent. >> >> 3. The following phrase in section 5 is confusing, I suggest to fix it >> because it describes an important issue: >> >> '- The MIB module is designed to be work with the PW-STD-MIB [PWMIB] >> module.' >> >> Probably s/to be work with/to work in conjunction with/ >> >> 4. DESCRIPTION clause of PwCepFracAsyncMap - the following phrase is >> confusing and must be clarified: >> >> The value of 'other' MUST >> be used if the Use of this object is not applicable >> >> 5. The indices pwCepTableIndex and pwCepFracIndex are defined as >> 'primary' in the DESCRIPTION clauses. It is not clear to me what this >> means because they are both the only indices in their respective tables. >> >> 6. There is a large number of counter objects in this MIB module which >> can benefit from having optional UNITS clauses added to the definition >> of the objects. > > > 2. draft-ietf-pwe3-pw-atm-mib (Proposed Standard) > > A new version has been posted recently, but does not seem to address the > IESG comments below: > >> Discusses and Comments >> Ron Bonica: >> Comment: >> [2008-07-02] support Dan's discuss >> >> Pasi Eronen: >> Comment: >> [2008-07-02] Jeffrey Hutzelman's SecDir review had some suggestions for >> clarifications and editorial improvements; they're not blocking, >> but should be considered in AUTH48 (if not earlier). >> >> Tim Polk: >> Discuss: >> [2008-07-01] The security considerations section refers to pwTDMTable >> when listing the readable tables and >> objects that are security sensitive. This table is specified in >> pwe3-tdm-mib, so I believe this >> is a cut and paste error. From the susequent text, I infer that the >> tables that specify the >> connectivity topology are the missing link. I wonder if the correct >> reference is pwATMCfgTable? >> >> Comment: >> [2008-07-01] I support Dan's discuss regarding the formatting in the >> security considerations section. The text >> is much more readable using the usual parentheses instead of the >> double quotes. >> >> Dan Romascanu: >> Discuss: >> [2008-07-02] >> The Security Considerations section is departing from the text at >> http://www.ops.ietf.org/mib-security.html, by replacing in a few >> places brackets by double quotes. These changes which are >> non-conformant with RFC4181 are making the texts confusing, which was >> also remarked in the SECDIR Review. I suggest to stick to the >> guidelines and to use the standard text. >> >> Comment: >> [2008-07-02] The introduction section mentions the PWE3 WG and mail >> list for further comments. I believe that this is inapropriate, as the >> future RFC may be longer lived than the WG. > - draft-ietf-pwe3-tdm-mib-11.txt (Proposed Standard) > > Again, there has been a document update, but it does not seem to address > the comments from the IESG below: > >> Ron Bonica: >> Comment: >> [2008-07-02] support Dan's discuss >> >> Pasi Eronen: >> Comment: >> [2008-07-01] Editorial suggestions from Scott Kelly's SecDir review: >> - I would suggest adding a sentence to the introduction which >> articulates the background the reader is assumed to have, for >> example, what RFCs they are expected to be conversant with, >> in order to understand the content of this document. >> - TDM should be expanded with first use >> >> Tim Polk: >> Comment: >> [2008-07-01] As noted in Scott Kelly's secdir review and Dan's >> preliminary discuss, the replacement of >> parentheses with double quotes is somewhat confusing. Since Dan is >> already holding a discuss, >> I am balloting NoObj but would like to note that I support Dan's position. >> >> Dan Romascanu: >> Discuss: >> [2008-07-02] 1. The Security Considerations section is departing from >> the text at http://www.ops.ietf.org/mib-security.html, by replacing in >> a few places brackets by double quotes. These changes which are >> non-conformant with RFC4181 are making the texts confusing, which was >> also remarked in the Security Review. I suggest to stick to the >> guidelines and to use the standard text. >> >> 2. >> pwTDMCfgEntry OBJECT-TYPE >> SYNTAX PwTDMCfgEntry >> MAX-ACCESS not-accessible >> STATUS current >> DESCRIPTION >> "These parameters define the characteristics of a >> TDM PW. They are grouped here to ease NMS burden. >> Once an entry is created here it may be re-used >> by many PWs. >> Unless otherwise specified, all objects in this table >> MUST NOT be changed after row activation (see [PWMIB]) >> if the row index is in use by an entry in pwTDMTable. >> Rows must persist after reboot." >> >> >> The last sentence contradicts the fact that this table has a >> StorageType object. >> >> Comment: >> [2008-07-02] >> 1. The introduction has text about comments to be made to the WG and >> the WG list. I believe that this text needs to be dropped, as the >> future RFC may be longer lived than the WG >> >> 2. In Section 3, s/[SATOP] draft/[SATOP] >> >> 3. Last paragraph in Section 3 uses RFC2119 keywords. I wonder whether >> this is appropriate, as the text describes terminology and >> functionality defined someplace else and not in this document, >> >> 4. The procedure described in Section 7 ends with verifying that >> pwTDMConfigError returns no error. What actions are being taken by a >> manager and by the agent if there are errors reported in this object? >> Is the procedure repeated from start, from some place within the >> algorithm, do any entries need to be cleared and configured again? >> >> 5. The document makes a non-consistent use of the UNITS clause - it is >> defined for some objects it is not for other. >> >> 6. The DESCRIPTION clause of pwTDMValidDayIntervals defines the >> minimal value as 1. Why is then the syntax allowing for 0, is there >> any special significance? > > > > > > > _______________________________________________ > pwe3 mailing list > pwe3@ietf.org > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/pwe3 _______________________________________________ pwe3 mailing list pwe3@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/pwe3
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