Re: [regext] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-regext-unhandled-namespaces-07
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From: "Gould, James" <jgould@verisign.com>
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Peter, Thank you for your review and feedback. I provide responses to your feedback embedded below. The updates based on your feedback and other feedback received will be included in draft-ietf-regext-unhandled-namespaces-08. -- JG James Gould Fellow Engineer jgould@Verisign.com <applewebdata://13890C55-AAE8-4BF3-A6CE-B4BA42740803/jgould@Verisign.com> 703-948-3271 12061 Bluemont Way Reston, VA 20190 Verisign.com <http://verisigninc.com/> On 2/9/21, 11:49 PM, "Peter Yee via Datatracker" <noreply@ietf.org> wrote: Reviewer: Peter Yee Review result: Ready with Nits I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments. For more information, please see the FAQ at <https://secure-web.cisco.com/18XJ21QUB_6pM8xC9AxgAF1lQGdVTQGVD3ttr64Abh4xtYEHewGl5EW-GJTbRbKJMuPV8KyCHx1maHQo1jcsWHiNDDCjzavgOvt7VfmB_DlWdSxxhJXOvjbAwge8wZIjdMPCAq5-if9dJdaBbleGZzdSxIhW0jK8ZHx78azgsy9giuHdjzxHH2_RuqllFCneH9ssvSaqyoF-hnGcZykWhn56qLfTatUWQEhL4KRkUvw0jSIB3S5LnrX7UcsJWrlEd/https%3A%2F%2Ftrac.ietf.org%2Ftrac%2Fgen%2Fwiki%2FGenArtfaq>. Document: draft-ietf-regext-unhandled-namespaces-07 Reviewer: Peter Yee Review Date: 2021-02-09 IETF LC End Date: 2021-02-09 IESG Telechat date: 2021-02-18 Summary: This EPP draft specifies a means to send information about unhandled namespace (a service that the client or server isn't prepared to handle) by means of reusing <extValue>. To the extent of my limited knowledge of EPP, this draft is ready with nits. Major issues: None Minor issues: None Nits/editorial comments: General: I'm not totally taken with the term "template" for XML examples that aren't wholly templates. On the other hand, I'd like to think that any implementers of EPP would recognize which parts were truly template-like and which parts are borrowed from the various EPP RFCs for example. JG - Correct, those that are aware of EPP should be able to pick-up on the use of the placeholder content variables. In the section 1.1 "Conventions Used in This Document", we did define the placeholder content variables used in the template XML for clarity. A few of the XML examples do not indent the urn in the <reason> block. While that shouldn't matter for the meaning or parsing, the indentation is done inconsistently. If this was intentional (e.g., to prevent wrapping of long lines), then leave it as is. While I don't think of the lines were longer than allowed even if two spaces were inserted before "urn", the easier visual parsing would be appreciated. JG - The instances that you're referring to are located in section 6, where adding a space for the "urn:ietf:params:xml:ns:changePoll-1.0" unhandled namespace results in "Warning: Artwork too wide, reducing indentation from 3 to 2". The "urn:ietf:params:xml:ns:domain-1.0" unhandled namespace can have two spaces added, but that would be inconsistent with the "urn:ietf:params:xml:ns:changePoll-1.0" unhandled namespace in the same example. I'll go ahead and add the two spaces to the "urn:ietf:params:xml:ns:domain-1.0" unhandled namespace. Specific: Page 6, 1st paragraph following XML, 1st phrase: append "for an" after "Template". JG - Done Page 6, 1st paragraph following second block of XML, 2nd sentence: insert "an" before "example of". JG - Done Page 7, 1st phrase: change the period to a colon to be similar to RFC 5730's style for examples. JG - Done Page 7, section 3.2, 1st paragraph, 2nd sentence: change "a" to "an" before "[RFC5730] <extValue>". JG - Done Page 9, 1st phrase: change the period to a colon to be similar to RFC 5730's style for examples. JG - Done Page 10, section 4, 1st sentence: insert "a" before "new". Insert "rather specifies" before "an operational". Or something similar. JG - Done. I used the "rather specifies". Page 16, item 3, 1st sentence: consider deleting the comma after "EPP responses". JG - Done
- [regext] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-re… Peter Yee via Datatracker
- Re: [regext] Genart last call review of draft-iet… Gould, James
- Re: [regext] [Gen-art] Genart last call review of… Alissa Cooper