Re: [RTG-DIR] RtgDir review: draft-ietf-isis-node-admin-tag-08.txt
Pushpasis Sarkar <pushpasis.ietf@gmail.com> Wed, 20 April 2016 19:17 UTC
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Subject: Re: [RTG-DIR] RtgDir review: draft-ietf-isis-node-admin-tag-08.txt
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Hi Andy, Thanks a lot for review. I am in agreement with all the points made below. So I will address them soon and upload the next version. Also the AD has also suggested that much of the Usecase sections is a duplicate of the same section in RFC 7777 and hence should be shortened to just list the usecases without detailing them and refering to RFC7777 instead. I will take care both sets of comments and come up with a version early next week. Thanks once again and Regards, -Pushpasis On 4/20/16 11:00 PM, Andrew G. Malis wrote: > Hello, > > I have been selected as the Routing Directorate reviewer for this > draft. The Routing Directorate seeks to review all routing or > routing-related drafts as they pass through IETF last call and IESG > review, and sometimes on special request. The purpose of the review is > to provide assistance to the Routing ADs. For more information about > the Routing Directorate, please see > http://trac.tools.ietf.org/area/rtg/trac/wiki/RtgDir > > Although these comments are primarily for the use of the Routing ADs, > it would be helpful if you could consider them along with any other > IETF Last Call comments that you receive, and strive to resolve them > through discussion or by updating the draft. > > Document: draft-ietf-isis-node-admin-tag-08.txt > Reviewer: Andy Malis > Review Date: April 20, 2016 > IETF LC End Date: April 29, 2016 > Intended Status: Standards Track > > Summary: > > I have some minor concerns about this document that I think should be > resolved before publication, if the AD agrees (see below for details). > > Comments and minor concerns: > > I have no technical concerns with this draft. > > I have noted the two comments in the AD review of this draft, and > agree with them. > > Given the similarity in functionality to RFC 7777 and the overlap in > authorship, I expected the draft to be more or less identical to the > RFC, except for the technical differences between OSPF and ISIS. > However, there are parts of the RFC that are editorially better > (easier to read or understand) than the equivalent text in the draft, > starting with the title, Abstract, and Introduction. In particular, > the Introduction in the RFC looks like the result of cleanup by the > RFC Editor, but which still needs to be done in the draft. Why not > take advantage of the work already done by the RFC Editor? Also, the > Introduction in the draft doesn't include the usual reference to RFC > 2119 terms, which is in the RFC. The Abstract in the RFC also includes > more useful detail than the Abstract in the draft. > > As another example, these differences are also true in Section 4.1 of > the draft, when compared to the mostly equivalent Section 2.2.1 of the > RFC. For example, from an editorial standpoint there is a missing > "The" in the first line of the section, and there are other > improvements as well. I also see editorial corrections in Section 3 of > the RFC when compared to Section 5 in the draft. > > I would recommend an editorial pass where the text is compared with > the RFC, and when obvious, editorially improved to take advantage of > work already done. This will make the RFC Editor's job easier. > Alternatively, the AD could choose to include a note to the RFC > Editor, noting the similarity and asking the RFC Editor to take > advantage of the work that they already did for the RFC. However, > having this done by the document editor would take advantage of the > editor's knowledge of when differences between the two are deliberate. > > Thanks, > Andy >
- [RTG-DIR] RtgDir review: draft-ietf-isis-node-adm… Andrew G. Malis
- Re: [RTG-DIR] RtgDir review: draft-ietf-isis-node… Pushpasis Sarkar
- Re: [RTG-DIR] RtgDir review: draft-ietf-isis-node… Pushpasis Sarkar
- Re: [RTG-DIR] RtgDir review: draft-ietf-isis-node… Andrew G. Malis