Re: [secdir] Review of draft-arkko-ipv6-transition-guidelines-08

[Jari Arkko <[e-mail]>]

Thanks for your review, Shawn!

I have adopted your editorial suggestions in a new version (to be 
published soon).

Jari

Shawn Emery kirjoitti:
> I have reviewed this document as part of the security directorate's
> ongoing effort to review all IETF documents being processed by the
> IESG.  These comments were written primarily for the benefit of the
> security area directors. Document editors and WG chairs should treat
> these comments just like any other last call comments.
>
> This is an informational draft that provides guidance for deploying
> IPv6 addresses.
>
> The security considerations section does exist and states that the
> draft does not change the security properties of the different models
> outlined in the draft.  Reading the individual model RFCs provides
> sufficient information for the possible security implications.
>
> General comments:
>
> None.
>
> Editorial comments:
>
> s/connectivity not available/connectivity is not available/
> s/and are have/and have/
> s/IPv6 networks, notably NRENS like Internet II/IPv6 networks; notably 
> NRENS, Internet II/
> Expand NRENS.
> s/easy with to/easy to/
> s/establishment native connectivity is not possible/native 
> connectivity can not be established/
> s/more like to/more likely to/
>
> Shawn.
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