[lamps] Robert Wilton's No Objection on draft-ietf-lamps-rfc7030est-clarify-09: (with COMMENT)

[Robert Wilton via Datatracker <[e-mail]>]

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draft-ietf-lamps-rfc7030est-clarify-09: No Objection

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COMMENT:
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Thanks for this document, I found it easy to read.

No concerns, just some minor nits:

1.  Introduction

   This document deals with errata numbers [errata4384], [errata5107],
   [errata5108], and [errata5904].

   This document deals explicitely with [errata5107] and [errata5904] in
   Section 3. [errata5108] is dealt with in section Section 5.

   [errata4384] is closed by correcting the ASN.1 Module in Section 4.

Typo on explicitly, but I would propose merge these three paragraphs into one:

E.g.
   This document deals with [errata5107] and [errata5904] in
   Section 3. [errata5108] is dealt with in Section 5.  [errata4384] is
   closed by correcting the ASN.1 Module in Section 4.

There are also some paragraph indentation issues that could be tweaked in
sections 3.2.3 & 3.2.4, or if the tooling is tricky to fix this then you could
leave a note to flag it for the RFC editor.

7.  Security Considerations

applies also => also apply