Re: [spring] Barry Leiba's No Objection on draft-ietf-spring-srv6-network-programming-19: (with COMMENT)
"Joel M. Halpern" <jmh@joelhalpern.com> Mon, 21 September 2020 17:45 UTC
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Subject: Re: [spring] Barry Leiba's No Objection on draft-ietf-spring-srv6-network-programming-19: (with COMMENT)
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Actually Barry, I would liek to leave the article choice to the RPC. In my experience, one does pronounce SID and FIB as words, but RIR as the letters. Yours, Joel On 9/21/2020 1:17 PM, Barry Leiba via Datatracker wrote: > Barry Leiba has entered the following ballot position for > draft-ietf-spring-srv6-network-programming-19: No Objection > > When responding, please keep the subject line intact and reply to all > email addresses included in the To and CC lines. (Feel free to cut this > introductory paragraph, however.) > > > Please refer to https://www.ietf.org/iesg/statement/discuss-criteria.html > for more information about IESG DISCUSS and COMMENT positions. > > > The document, along with other ballot positions, can be found here: > https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-spring-srv6-network-programming/ > > > > ---------------------------------------------------------------------- > COMMENT: > ---------------------------------------------------------------------- > > Throughout the document: > It should be “an SID”, “an FIB”, “an RIR”, and some others, not “a”, because > one reads these as “ess-eye-dee” and “eff-eye-bee”, not as the expansions > thereof. > > — Section 3.1 — > > An SRv6 endpoint behavior MAY require additional information > > I think this is a statement of fact, so “may” (or “might”), not “MAY”. > > — Section 3.2 — > Nit: The plural of “SID” is “SIDs”, without an apostrophe. > > The provider historically deployed IPv6 and assigned > infrastructure address from a portion of the fc00::/7 prefix > > Nit: “addresses”. > > In another example, a large mobile and fixed line service provider > > Nit: hyphenate “fixed-line”. > > IPv6 address consumption in both these examples is minimum, > > Nit: “minimal” (also, put a comma before “respectively”). > > A remote node uses the IANA behavior codepoint to map the received > SID (B:N:FUNCT) to a behavior. > > I don’t know what “IANA behavior codepoint” means. As the rest of the sentence > makes it clear that this is mapping to “a behavior”, maybe it’s better to say > “registered codepoint”, or some such? Or, as you say a couple of paragraphs > down, “Endpoint Behavior codepoint”? In any case, please be consistent about > “IANA behavior”, “IANA Behavior”, and “IANA Endpoint Behavior”. My preference > would be to avoid saying “IANA” in these, but use your judgment on what’s most > understandable and clear. > > o Assign an SRv6 Locator 2001:db8:bbbb:3::/64 to the Router 3 in > their SR Domain > > What is “the Router 3” (and router 4)? There’s no introduction nor diagram > that says. Also, please be consistent in capitalization of these. > > — Section 3.3 — > > routing protocol specific aspects that are outside the scope of this > > Nit: “routing-protocol-specific” needs to be hyphenated. As that’s awkward, > you might want to reword to avoid it, “are specific to the routing protocol and > are outside the scope....” > > — Section 4 — > > The pseudocode describing these behaviors detail local processing > > Nit: “details”, singular, to match “pseudocode”. > > — Section 4.1 — > > The End behavior operates on the same FIB table (i.e. VRF, L3 relay > id) associated to the packet. > > Is “i.e.” really what you want here? How does “VRF, L3 relay” equate to “FIB > table”? > > — Section 4.16.1.3 — > > segments left to 0. The SDN controller knows that no-other node > > Nit: “no other” should not be hyphenated. For that matter, the word “other” > isn’t needed anyway, because you have “after” in there. > > -as part of the decapsulation process the egress PE is required to > terminates less bytes from the packet. > > I can’t figure this out. It looks like it should be “required to terminate”, > but I don’t know what it means to “terminate less bytes”. Can you reword this? > > to the lookup engine in the forwarding ASIC. > > “ASIC” needs to be expanded. As this is the only place you use it, I suggest > just using the expansion and not bothering with the abbreviation. > > — Section 7 — > > This document introduces SRv6 Endpoint and SR Policy Headend > behaviors for implementation on SRv6 capable nodes in the network. > As such, this document does not introduce any new security > considerations. > > I’m not convinced of this. It seems that misuse (such as injection or > alteration) of some of these Behaviors could, for example, result in packets > being forwarded to nodes they were not intended to go to. Is it not important > to discuss issues such as that: how these Behaviors might be attacked? Is that > really fully covered in 8754 and 8402? > > — Section 8.1 — > > The presence of SIDs in the IGP do not imply any routing semantics > > Nit: “does not”, to match the singular subject “the presence”. > > an IPv6 address is solely governed by the, non-SID-related, IGP > > Nit: remove both commas. > > not governed neither influenced in any way by a SID advertisement > > Nit: make it “neither governed nor influenced” > > build TI-LFA [I-D.ietf-rtgwg-segment-routing-ti-lfa] based FRR > solutions > > Nit: there needs to be a hyphen in there, but the citation gets in the way. > Make it, “build FRR solutions based on TI-LFA > [I-D.ietf-rtgwg-segment-routing-ti-lfa]”. > > — Section 8.4 — > > For example, a BGP-LS advertisement of H.Encaps behavior would > describe the capability of node N to perform a H.Encaps behavior, > specifically it would describe how many SIDs could be pushed by N > without significant performance degradation. > > This is a comma splice. Split the sentence before “specifically” (and put a > comma after “specifically”). > > > > _______________________________________________ > spring mailing list > spring@ietf.org > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/spring >
- [spring] Barry Leiba's No Objection on draft-ietf… Barry Leiba via Datatracker
- Re: [spring] Barry Leiba's No Objection on draft-… Joel M. Halpern
- Re: [spring] Barry Leiba's No Objection on draft-… Pablo Camarillo (pcamaril)
- Re: [spring] Barry Leiba's No Objection on draft-… Barry Leiba
- Re: [spring] Barry Leiba's No Objection on draft-… Pablo Camarillo (pcamaril)