[Supa] review for draft-ietf-supa-policy-based-management-framework-02

[Yangyang Wang <[e-mail]>]

I have reviewed  draft-ietf-supa-policy-based-management-framework. My
comments are as follows:

1) This draft contains many concepts that are very abstract. I suggest this
draft may briefly describe the contents and the goal  of this draft and its
significance. Some simple and concrete instances can be added in the
descriptions of the management framework to help clarify the abstract
concepts and framework in this draft.

2) "Traffic flow over increasingly complex enterprise and service provider
network becomes more and more important" may be change to "The management
of Traffic flow over increasingly complex enterprise and service provider
network becomes more and more important ?

3) "OSS:Operations/Operational Support System, are computer systems" should
be "OSS: Operations/Operational Support Systems, are computer systems".

4) "Imperative policy rules require additional management functions, which
are explained in section 2.2 below" may be  "Imperative policy rules
require additional management functions, which are explained in section 3.2
below"

5) "(1:1..n) in (1) and (2) below figure 3 shows one policy rule is able to
manages and can adjust one or multiple services/resources." may be
"(1:1..n) in (1) and (2) below figure 3 show one policy rule is able to
manage and adjust one or multiple services/resources." ?

6) "The Operator actor shown can interact with SUPA in other ways not shown
in Figure 1" may be "The Operator actor, shown in figure 1, can interact
with SUPA in other ways not shown in Figure 1"




Best regards,
Yangyang