[Teas] Re: AD review for draft-ietf-teas-5g-ns-ip-mpls

[Vishnu Pavan Kumar Beeram <[e-mail]>]

Jim, Hi!

Please see inline (prefixed VPB).

Regards,
-Pavan



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From: James Guichard <[e-mail]>
Date: Thursday, December 26, 2024 at 5:59 AM
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Subject: AD review for draft-ietf-teas-5g-ns-ip-mpls
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Dear Authors,

Thank you for this document. I have reviewed the latest version and have very few comments:

Please correct the following:

  == Outdated reference: A later version (-03) exists of
     draft-cbs-teas-5qi-to-dscp-mapping-02

  == Outdated reference: A later version (-14) exists of
     draft-ietf-opsawg-ntw-attachment-circuit-13

  == Outdated reference: A later version (-18) exists of
     draft-ietf-opsawg-teas-attachment-circuit-17

  == Outdated reference: A later version (-03) exists of
     draft-ietf-teas-ns-controller-models-02


Jim> I note that the document shepherd report is dated 4 July 2022. Please review the shepherd writeup and update accordingly as a gap of 2 years is a long time.

[VPB] The date you see at the top of the writeup is the template version date (https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/shepherdwriteup-template/individual) Please refer to the datatracker for the “Last changed” date for the shepherd write-up (2024-11-28).

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18             Slicing is a feature that was introduced by the 3rd Generation

Jim> s/Slicing/Network Slicing

355          modelling the Transport Network based on management perimeters

Jim> s/modelling/modeling

1049        slice-related policy enfocement in the Transport Network (e.g.,

Jim> s/enfocement/enforcement

1630            links (ACs) are dimensioned to fulfil the aggregate of slice CIRs.

Jim> s/fulfil/fulfill

2432        data plane traffic is currently travelling along each RSVP or SR-TE

Jim> s/travelling/traveling

Thanks!

Jim