[Teep] Murray Kucherawy's No Objection on draft-ietf-teep-architecture-18: (with COMMENT)

[Murray Kucherawy via Datatracker <[e-mail]>]

Murray Kucherawy has entered the following ballot position for
draft-ietf-teep-architecture-18: No Objection

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My colleagues already did a pretty thorough job.  I've only a few things to add.

The shepherd writeup is over a year old.  It lists Ben Kaduk as the responsible
AD.

In Section 4.1, it says "Figure 1 shows the main components in a typical device
with an REE and a TEE."  Where's the REE?  Is it the "Device"?

"SGX" should be expanded on first use (Section 4.1), but it's actually expanded
in Section 4.4.1.

Nits:

Use of capitalization is inconsistent.  For instance, "Device User" is
capitalized when defined, but never again; meanwhile, "Personalization Data" is
always capitalized.

Section 1:

* "TEEs use hardware enforcement combined with software protection to secure
TAs and its data." -- s/its/their/

Section 2:

* "Device User" is never used outside of the "Terminology" section; is it
needed?