[TICTOC]Roman Danyliw's Discuss on draft-ietf-tictoc-ptp-enterprise-profile-26: (with DISCUSS and COMMENT)

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DISCUSS:
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** Section 15.

             PTP Profile:
             Enterprise Profile
             Version: 1.0
             Profile identifier: 00-00-5E-00-01-00

             This PTP Profile was specified by the IETF

             A copy may be obtained at
             https://datatracker.ietf.org/wg/tictoc/documents

Per Figure 55 of Section 20.3.3 of [IEEE1588], it appears that a few things are
missing:

-- missing a profile number (which is distinct from the profile version, but
implicit in the profile identifier)

-- Using “https://datatracker.ietf.org/wg/tictoc/documents “ for
“sourceIdentification: This attribute shall be a URL, e-mail, or regular mail
address to which inquiries concerning the profile or requests for copies may be
sent.” Instead of the specific name.


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COMMENT:
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Thank you to Susan Hares for the GENART review.

** idnits reported the following:

  == The document seems to lack the recommended RFC 2119 boilerplate, even if
     it appears to use RFC 2119 keywords -- however, there's a paragraph with
     a matching beginning. Boilerplate error?

** Section 1.  Editorial. s/in stead/instead/

** Section 1.
   In PTP domains with a lot
   of nodes, devices had to throw away more than 99% of the received
   multicast messages because they carried information for some other
   node.

What constitutes “a lot of nodes”?

** Section 5.
The PTP system MAY include switches and routers.

What does this mean?  Aren’t switches and routers just computers?

** Section 6.
   The PTP primary IP address is
   224.0.1.129 for IPv4 and FF0X:0:0:0:0:0:0:181 for IPv6, where X can
   be a value between 0x0 and 0xF, see IEEE 1588 [IEEE1588] Annex D,
   Section D.3.

The IPv4 address is in Annex C of [IEEE1558].  Annex D is IPv6 only.