Re: [Drip] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-drip-reqs-13

["Card, Stu" <[e-mail]>]

Good points, I will address them w/minor edits & then Reply to All
w/pointer to new rev ASAP, thanks!

On Wed, Jun 23, 2021, 5:07 PM Suresh Krishnan via Datatracker <
[e-mail]> wrote:

> Reviewer: Suresh Krishnan
> Review result: Ready with Nits
>
> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area
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> Document: draft-ietf-drip-reqs-??
> Reviewer: Suresh Krishnan
> Review Date: 2021-06-22
> IETF LC End Date: 2021-06-07
> IESG Telechat date: 2021-07-01
>
> Summary:
>
> It is a very interesting problem space and this document provides a good
> overview along with the references.
>
> Major issues:
>
> Minor issues:
>
> * The term RID is used to mean slightly different things in different
> locations
> of the document. One very obvious example is in this sentence in Page 6
>
> "However, applications of RID beyond RID itself"
>
> probably need to be clarified a bit
>
> * Section 4.1.1.
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> -> The following sentence fragment in GEN-3 is confusing
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> "UAS ID is in a registry and identification of which one"
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> Suggest rewording to
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> "UAS ID is in a registry and identification of the registry"
>
> if my understanding of the intent is correct.
>
> -> GEN-6: Not sure if "Finger" is a obvious description of this
> requirement for
> somebody who has not read RFC742. Suggest rewording to something more
> broadly
> understandable (e.g. "User Information")
>
> -> It feels like Section 4.1.2. might be better placed before 4.1.1. as it
> addressed some of the questions I had on the GEN-* requirements. The other
> rationale sections were fine either way, but it may make sense to describe
> the
> rationale consistently before the requirement.s
>
> Nits/editorial comments:
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