[Tmrg-interest] [IRSG] IRSG Review: draft-irtf-tmrg-metrics-09

[sallyfloyd at mac.com (Sally Floyd)]

Tony -

Many thanks for the review for the IRSG.

> This is a review of draft-irtf-tmrg-metrics-09, in accordance with
> draft-irtf-rfcs-01, section 5.2.2.  This review raises two issues
> (see [Issue x] below) that should be resolved prior to proceeding
> with publication.
...
>      * There must be a paragraph near the beginning (for example, in
> the introduction) describing the level of support for publication.
> Example text might read: "this document represents the consensus of
> the FOOBAR RG" or "the views in this document were considered
> controversial by the FOOBAR RG but the RG reached a consensus that
> the document should still be published".
>
> 	[Issue 1] Present in the abstract.  This text should be replicated
> into the body of the document.  Replacing the last paragraph of the
> introduction with a copy of the last paragraph from the abstract
> should suffice.

Thanks, I will do that.

>      * There should be citations and references to relevant research
> publications.
>
> 	The references fill 4.5 pages and are frequently cited throughout
> the text.  Not being a subject matter expert, I am not prepared to
> judge their relevancy.  [Issue 2] It should be noted that as of the
> time of this review, several of the references are now outdated.
> These can easily be found through the idnits tool.  These should be
> updated before publication.

I will make sure that the references are updates.

- Sally
http://www.icir.org/floyd/