Re: [trill] Shepherd write-up for draft-ietf-trill-channel-tunnel-06.txt
Donald Eastlake <d3e3e3@gmail.com> Thu, 13 August 2015 21:04 UTC
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Subject: Re: [trill] Shepherd write-up for draft-ietf-trill-channel-tunnel-06.txt
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On Thu, Aug 13, 2015 at 4:40 PM, Susan Hares <shares@ndzh.com> wrote: > Donald: > > > > All the changes you suggest are fine. See comments inline below. Will > you be releasing a -07 to resolve these comments? > Sure, I'll post a new version this evening. Thanks, Donald ============================= Donald E. Eastlake 3rd +1-508-333-2270 (cell) 155 Beaver Street, Milford, MA 01757 USA d3e3e3@gmail.com > Sue > > > > *From:* trill [mailto:trill-bounces@ietf.org] *On Behalf Of *Donald > Eastlake > *Sent:* Thursday, August 13, 2015 4:14 PM > *To:* Susan Hares > *Cc:* draft-ietf-trill-channel-tunnel@ietf.org; Jon Hudson; trill@ietf.org > *Subject:* Re: [trill] Shepherd write-up for > draft-ietf-trill-channel-tunnel-06.txt > > > > Hi Sue, > > > > Thanks for the comments. See below. > > > > On Thu, Aug 13, 2015 at 9:18 AM, Susan Hares <shares@ndzh.com> wrote: > > Donald, Mohammed, Yizhou, and Trill-WG: > > > > <document shepherd hat on> > > > > I have completed my Shepherd review of > draft-ietf-trill-channel-tunnel-06.txt. Below is the shepherd write-up > for this draft. I will be uploading the Shepherd write-up today – so > please let me know if you have any questions regarding this write-up. > > > > Sue Hares > > <document shepherd hat off> > > > > ======== > > *Shepherd write-up: * > > > > Status of document: No major errors, minor technical, 3 minor editorial > issues > > Quality of text: Text provides clear description of additions. If you > are re-writing section, it would be useful to rephrase complex sentences in > groups of “less” complex sentences could help the general readability of > the drafts. > > > > *Minor technical issues * > > > > #1 – Bridge Channel Tunnel Protocol = TBD > > > > My understanding is there is just one RBridge Channel protocol which will > be used for the tunnels: > > > > An example assignment is in red: > > > > CSV > > *Range Registration Procedures Note * > > 0x002-0x0FF Standards Action > > 0x100-0xFF7 RFC Required allocation of a single > value > > 0x100-0xFF7 IESG Approval allocation of multiple > values > > > > *Protocol Description Reference * > > 0x000 Reserved [RFC7178] > > 0x001 RBridge Channel Error [RFC7178] > > 0x002 BFD Control [RFC7175] > > 0x003 BFD Echo [RFC7175] > > 0x004 Tunnel [This > RFC] > > 0x004-0xFF7 Unassigned > > 0xFF8-0xFFE Reserved for Private Use [RFC7178] > > 0xFFF Reserved [RFC7178] > > > > [Donald] I'm not sure what change, if any, you are suggesting immediately > above. In the IANA Considerations Section, the draft says: > > > > Protocol Description Reference > > -------- -------------- --------- > > > > TBD Tunnel Channel [this document] > > > > [Sue 2]: No changes – just indicating why I think the changes below are > necessary. > > > > p. 6 final paragraph reads: > > “The RBridge Tunnel Channel Protocol Specific Data Fields > are as follows: “ > > > > I believe based on figure 2.4 this should be: > > “The RBridge Channel Tunnel Protocol Specific Data Fields > are the following fields: “ > > > > Yes. > > > > p. 9 figure 3.1 – Do you want the text in the possible security > information to be changed from: > > > > from: > > > > RBridge-channel (0x8946) | CHV=0 | channel Protocol > > > > to: > > > > RBridge-channel (0x8946) | CHV=0 | Tunnel Protocol = TBD > > > > Yup, good catch. > > > > *#2 – Figure 3.3 is unclear* > > > > The text states > > > > A PType of 2 and an initial L2-IS-IS Ethertype indicates that the > > payload of the Tunnel protocol message is an encapsulated TRILL IS-IS > > PDU packet as shown in the figure below. > > > > Please change to > > A PType of 2 and an initial L2-IS-IS Ethertype indicates that the > > payload of the Tunnel protocol message is an encapsulated TRILL IS-IS > > PDU packet as shown in the figure 3.3. > > > > OK. > > > > The possible security information has a possible security information > with the following format > > > > 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 2 2 2 2 2 2 2 2 2 2 3 3 > > 0 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 0 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 0 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 0 1 > > +-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+ > > | RBridge-Channel (0x8946) | CHV=0 | Tunnel Protocol = TBD | > > +-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+ > > | Flags | ERR | SubERR| RESV4 | SType | 0x2 | > > +-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+ > > | Possible Security information > > +-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-... > > | L2-IS-IS (0x22F4) | > > +-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+ > > | 0x83 | rest of IS-IS PDU > > +-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-... > > > > IT is unclear how many bytes are between the [L2-IS-IS (0x22F4) and > > [0x83] > > > > The 0x83 occurs immediately after the 0x22F4. I guess it should be moved > to the end of the previous line although this make the beginning of the > "rest of IS-IS PDU" a bit ragged: > > > > ... > > +-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+ > > | Flags | ERR | SubERR| RESV4 | SType | 0x2 | > > +-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+ > > | Possible Security information > > +-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-... > > | L2-IS-IS (0x22F4) | 0x83 | > > +-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+ > > | rest of IS-IS PDU > > +-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-... > > > > [Sue]: This resolves my comment > > #3 – section 4.2 paragraph 1 > > > > The text in this sentence is technically correct, but the complex sentence > makes it difficult to understand: > > > > To be more precise, the covered area starts with the byte immediately > > after the TRILL Header ingress nickname unless the optional flag word > > [rfc7180bis] is present in which case it starts after the flag word, > > and extends to just before the TRILL Data packet link trailer, for > > example just before the FCS for Ethernet. > > > > How about: > > > > To be more precise, the covered area starts with the byte immediately > > after the TRILL Header ingress nickname unless the optional flag word > > [rfc7180bis] is present. If the optional flag word is present, > > then the covered area starts after the flag word, > > and extends to just before the TRILL Data packet link trailer. For > > example, for the Ethernet packet this would be just before the FCS. > > > > Sure but how about: > > > > To be more precise, the covered area starts with the byte > > immediately after the TRILL Header ingress nickname unless the > > optional flag word [rfc7180bis] is present. If the optional flag > > word is present, then the covered area starts after that flag > > word. In either case, it extends to just before the TRILL Data > > packet link trailer. For example, for an Ethernet packet it would > > extend to just before the FCS. > > > > [Sue 2]: This would be fine. > > > > Thanks, > > Donald > > ============================= > > Donald E. Eastlake 3rd +1-508-333-2270 (cell) > > 155 Beaver Street, Milford, MA 01757 USA > > d3e3e3@gmail.com > > >
- [trill] Shepherd write-up for draft-ietf-trill-ch… Susan Hares
- Re: [trill] Shepherd write-up for draft-ietf-tril… Donald Eastlake
- Re: [trill] Shepherd write-up for draft-ietf-tril… Susan Hares
- Re: [trill] Shepherd write-up for draft-ietf-tril… Donald Eastlake
- Re: [trill] Shepherd write-up for draft-ietf-tril… Donald Eastlake
- Re: [trill] Shepherd write-up for draft-ietf-tril… Susan Hares
- Re: [trill] Shepherd write-up for draft-ietf-tril… Susan Hares
- Re: [trill] Shepherd write-up for draft-ietf-tril… Donald Eastlake
- Re: [trill] Shepherd write-up for draft-ietf-tril… Susan Hares