[Tsv-art] Tsvart last call review of draft-ietf-bess-evpn-oam-req-frmwk-04

David Black via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org> Tue, 16 February 2021 15:46 UTC

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Reviewer: David Black
Review result: Ready with Nits

This document has been reviewed as part of the transport area review team's
ongoing effort to review key IETF documents. These comments were written
primarily for the transport area directors, but are copied to the document's
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I did not notice any transport-related issues, but found a few editorial nits
that could use some attention:

The draft covers only the F (fault) and P (performance) aspects of the
FCAPS set of management/maintenance domains.  It might be useful to
say something about where to look for requirements-related information
on the other three.

Please double-check whether the IEEE 802.1Q reference is up to date.

Please explain what P nodes are in Figures 1 and 2.

Figures 1 and 2 include four OAM layers, of which this draft is only
concerned with two, Service OAM and Network OAM.  Section 2.1
should indicate that these two layers are the focus of the draft.