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Re: [Tsv-art] [Teas] Tsvart early review of draft-ietf-teas-5g-ns-ip-mpls-02

Krzysztof Szarkowicz <kszarkowicz@gmail.com> Mon, 22 January 2024 14:56 UTC

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From: Krzysztof Szarkowicz <kszarkowicz@gmail.com>
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Date: Mon, 22 Jan 2024 15:56:14 +0100
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Subject: Re: [Tsv-art] [Teas] Tsvart early review of draft-ietf-teas-5g-ns-ip-mpls-02
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Yoshi,


Thank you for your comments.

We will address you concerns in the next revision of the document.

—
Krzysztof


> On Jan 8, 2024, at 08:13, Yoshifumi Nishida via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org> wrote:
> 
> Reviewer: Yoshifumi Nishida
> Review result: Almost Ready
> 
> This document has been reviewed as part of the transport area review team's
> ongoing effort to review key IETF documents. These comments were written
> primarily for the transport area directors, but are copied to the document's
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> Summary: I don't think there is any transport protocol related issues in
> this document. I think this document is almost ready for publication as an
> informational RFC, but it might be good to consider the following points.
> 
> This is a fairly long document that contains various information. I think
> it would be good if it describes which people should read it as well as
> how to utilize the information in the doc in the introduction. Also, it
> seems that some information described in the doc is not strongly related
> to others. Do we expect that the readers of the doc should read entire
> document or only part of it based on their interests? In the latter case,
> I think it would be good to describe who should read which sections.
> 
> Nits:
>  Section 7.1
>     what is transport controller? I think the term and its role should be
>     explained more clearly.
> 
> --
> Yoshi
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