[tsvwg] Request to update draft-ietf-tsvwg-rfc6040update-shim and publish a new revision
Gorry Fairhurst <gorry@erg.abdn.ac.uk> Wed, 13 September 2023 09:32 UTC
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Subject: [tsvwg] Request to update draft-ietf-tsvwg-rfc6040update-shim and publish a new revision
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Bob, I have been reviewing draft-ietf-tsvwg-rfc6040update-shim, to prepare a publication request as the new assigned document shepherd. I think this draft is nearly ready to proceed - but it now needs a new revision to update the references, and to address some concerns. Best wishes, Gorry Fairhurst (In-Coming Document Shepherd) === 1. Please update all references to cite the latest rev. === 2. Since the ID on intarea tunnels remains an item of pending work, it would be wiser to explain the term outer fragments before first used - citing intarea tunnels as a reference. The cited document is not the easiest to parse to find this definition "Section 5.3 of [RFC3168] specifies ECN requirements for reassembly of sets of outer fragments." I suggest something like: Section 5.3 of [RFC3168] specifies ECN requirements for reassembly of sets of outer fragments [I-D.ietf-intarea-tunnels] into packets. (In outer fragmentation, an outer header in each fragment indicates the fragmentation and the inner transit header occurs only in the first fragment, with the following inner (transit) data broken across multiple packets.) === 3. The document provides a list that it states is confined to standards track or widely deployed protocols. Some work appears to have stalled/failed to progress. Please be careful not to imply a projected status for this work-in-progress. "GUE (Generic UDP Encapsulation) [I-D.ietf-intarea-gue];" - This list includes GUE as work-in-progress. I am unsure we can confirm deployment or document status. Is it wiser to remove the ice, from the list, and simply discuss this alongside Geneva in the text. I understand anyway that no change is requested to this specification. ietf-nvo3-vxlan-gpe - Unsure if this ref is needed, and did not appear active in the WG, and it seems no specific recommendation included? ietf-sfc-nsh-ecn-support - appears active, current text appears OK, please update rev. === 4. The test says: The requirements in Section 4 update RFC 6040, and hence implicitly update the UDP usage guidelines in RFC 8085 to add the important but previously unstated requirement that, if the UDP tunnel egress does not, or might not, support ECN propagation, a UDP tunnel ingress has to clear the outer IP ECN field to 0b00, e.g. by configuration. - I have thought, and I think I am OK with this choice of action, but "implicitly update" is likely to attract attention from an IESG review. Could we avoid "update" explicitly say something, for example I suggest: NEW: The requirements in Section 4 update RFC 6040, and hence add to the UDP usage guidelines in RFC 8085 by addition of the important, but previously unstated requirement that, if the UDP tunnel egress does not, or might not, support ECN propagation, a UDP tunnel ingress has to clear the outer IP ECN field to 0b00, e.g. by configuration. === 5. In 6.1.1.1., Can you define LCCE in the first sentence before the quote so that the quote becomes readable? ADD: L2TP Control Connection Endpoint (LCCE) === 6. Please could you add a VERY SHORT definition of X and E in the caption of figure 1: Value Field for the LCCE Capability Attribute ... e.g.: (E is the ECN Capability flag, the value of X is reserved). ==== 7. Please rephrase this: "It is believed that current implementations do not support" ... I'd prefer for it to say Implementation might not support, or something other than the belief - when published by the IETF, the RFC-Ed will not hold these beliefs, please choose another word. === 8. Section 9 ought to be removed at this stage in the process: "9. Comments Solicited" ==== 9. Please confirm there is no known IPR relating to this ID, and that you are content with the Editor's name being presented when published. ==== 10. Please consider citing RFC 6169 as an information ref alongside the first citation of RFC 4380, as a note to indicate the IETFs position on current development of Teredo. ===
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