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Re: [yang-doctors] Yangdoctors last call review of draft-ietf-netconf-rfc6536bis-04

Andy Bierman <andy@yumaworks.com> Mon, 11 September 2017 21:05 UTC

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From: Andy Bierman <andy@yumaworks.com>
Date: Mon, 11 Sep 2017 14:05:53 -0700
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To: Radek Krejčí <rkrejci@cesnet.cz>
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Subject: Re: [yang-doctors] Yangdoctors last call review of draft-ietf-netconf-rfc6536bis-04
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On Mon, Sep 11, 2017 at 8:02 AM, Radek Krejčí <rkrejci@cesnet.cz> wrote:

> Reviewer: Radek Krejčí
> Review result: Ready with Nits
>
> Hi,
> I have been assigned to review draft-ietf-netconf-rfc6536bis as YANG
> Doctor.
> The document is almost ready to publish, I have just the following few
> comments:
>
> - section 1.1 Terminology - access control rule: s/protocol
> operation/access
> operation/
>
>
fixed



> - "NETCONF transport" is mentioned at several places within the draft and
> model
> in connection with information about the user. What about the RESTCONF
> transport, shouldn't it be also mentioned or (better) shouldn't it be
> changed
> to a general transport of the protocols accessing the datastore?
>
>

changed all NETCONF transport layer to just transport layer,
which was already used in several places



> - /nacm/rule-list/rule/rule-type in schema: I would consider to explicitely
> state into which case the action and notification defined in data subtree
> belong to. Especially the notification placement can be confusing at the
> first
> sight since there is the "notification" case.
>
>
not sure what text this is about.
Do you have section, para or page/para info?


Andy

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