[6tisch] Erik Kline's Yes on draft-ietf-6tisch-msf-17: (with COMMENT)

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Subject: [6tisch] Erik Kline's Yes on draft-ietf-6tisch-msf-17: (with COMMENT)
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COMMENT:
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[[ nits ]]

[ section 2 ]

* "to do at each time slots" -> "to do at each time slot"

* "there is a frame to sent" -> "there is a frame to be sent"

[ section 4.3 ]

* "the pledge continue listening" -> "the pledge continues listening"

[ section 4.4 ]

* "After selected a JP" ->
  "After selecting a JP" or "After having selected a JP"

[ section 4.8 ]

* "AutRxCell" -> "AutoRxCell"?

* "for new pledge" -> "for new pledges"?

[ section 5.1 ]

* "used to both type of" -> "used for both type of"?

[ section 8 ]

* "consequence of randomly cell selection" ->
  "consequence of random cell selection"?

[ section 9 ]

* "define din" -> "defined in"

[ section 16 ]

* "considrations" -> "considerations"

* "to hand that packet" -> "to handle that packet", maybe