Re: [Ace] John Scudder's No Objection on draft-ietf-ace-cmpv2-coap-transport-09: (with COMMENT)

[Mohit Sahni <[e-mail]>]

Hi John,
Many thanks for your review and comments. Please see my response for your
comments:

>Or at a minimum, just eliminate the paragraph break between the two
paragraphs (i.e., merge them into one, even if no other rewrite).
>
>I also wonder why the first alternative is given as a MAY but the second,
as a "may".

I will remove the line break and change the second "may" to "MAY".

Thanks
Mohit

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> # John Scudder, RTG AD, comments for draft-ietf-ace-cmpv2-coap-transport-09
> CC @jgscudder
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> Thanks for this document. I have one minor comment below, which I hope may
> be
> helpful.
>
> ## COMMENTS
>
> ### Section 2.6
>
> In the second paragraph below,
>
>    Alternatively, an EE MAY periodically poll for the current status of
>    the CA via the "PKI Information Request" message, see section 6.5 of
>    [RFC4210].  If supported, EEs may also use "Support Messages" defined
>    in section 4.3 of Lightweight CMP Profile
>    [I-D.ietf-lamps-lightweight-cmp-profile] to get information about the
>    CA status.
>
>    These mechanisms will help constrained devices, that are acting as
>    EEs, to conserve resources by eliminating the need to create an
>    endpoint for receiving notifications from RA or CA.  It will also
>    simplify the implementation of a CoAP-to-HTTP proxy.
>
> is it right that "these mechanisms" refers to the two mechanisms in the
> immediately-preceding paragraph? If so, this isn't clear from how you've
> structured the text. One possible rewrite is,
>
>    Two alternatives are first, an EE MAY periodically poll for the
>    current status of the CA via the "PKI Information Request" message,
>    see section 6.5 of [RFC4210], or second, if supported, EEs may also
>    use "Support Messages" defined in section 4.3 of Lightweight CMP
>    Profile [I-D.ietf-lamps-lightweight-cmp-profile] to get information
>    about the CA status. These mechanisms will help constrained devices,
>    that are acting as EEs, to conserve resources by eliminating the need
>    to create an endpoint for receiving notifications from RA or CA.  It
>    will also simplify the implementation of a CoAP-to-HTTP proxy.
>
> Or at a minimum, just eliminate the paragraph break between the two
> paragraphs
> (i.e., merge them into one, even if no other rewrite).
>
> I also wonder why the first alternative is given as a MAY but the second,
> as a
> "may".
>
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