Re: [Anima] Ben Campbell's No Objection on draft-ietf-anima-grasp-12: (with COMMENT)
Brian E Carpenter <brian.e.carpenter@gmail.com> Mon, 29 May 2017 04:16 UTC
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Subject: Re: [Anima] Ben Campbell's No Objection on draft-ietf-anima-grasp-12: (with COMMENT)
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Comments on some more of Ben's comments: On 23/05/2017 13:25, Ben Campbell wrote: ... > - 3.10.5: "SHOULD NOT be used in > unmanaged networks such as home networks." > Why not MUST? Yes, that is more logical. > > -5, Privacy and Confidentiality: Did people consider IP Addresses and > other potentially persistent identifiers as impacting privacy? Here we are dealing with the addresses of network elements, not user devices, so there don't seem to to be personal privacy issues. > -7, Grasp Message and Options table: Why "Standards Action"? Would you > expect some harm to be done if this were only Spec Required? I have asked the WG's opinion. > Editorial: > > - Is section 2 expected to be useful to implementers once this is > published as an RFC? Unless there's a reason otherwise, I would suggest > moving this to an appendix, or even removing it entirely. As it is, you > have to wade through an unusual amount of front material before you get > to the meat of the protocol. I have asked the WG's opinion. > - Along the lines of the previous comment, I found the organization a bit > hard to follow. I didn't find actual protocol details until around page > 21. Procedures are split (and sometimes repeated) between the procedure > sections and the message format sections. I think that will make this > more difficult and error prone than necessary for implementors to read > and reference. I fear readers will read one section and think they > understand the procedures, and miss a requirement in the other. I understand the problem but I don't have a solution; there is an attempt to give an overview before getting into message formats, but that leads to some repetition as well. > - 3.5.2.2: First bullet: > Please consider a "MUST NOT construction. "MUST only" can be ambiguous. > It would be helpful to explain why the loop count must not be more than > one. I can infer that from the later sections on relays, but it was not > obvious when reading this section. And unless I missed something, there's > no text that puts the two ideas together. OK > > - 3.5.4.5: This section seems redundant to the similar sections under > negotiation . Since those sections have more information, would it make > sense to consolidate them there? It makes sense to condense it. I think the forward reference is useful. Regards Brian
- [Anima] Ben Campbell's No Objection on draft-ietf… Ben Campbell
- Re: [Anima] Ben Campbell's No Objection on draft-… Brian E Carpenter
- Re: [Anima] Ben Campbell's No Objection on draft-… Ben Campbell
- [Anima] WG input needed: Ben Campbell's question … Brian E Carpenter
- [Anima] WG input needed: Ben Campbell's question … Brian E Carpenter
- Re: [Anima] Ben Campbell's No Objection on draft-… Brian E Carpenter
- Re: [Anima] WG input needed: Ben Campbell's quest… Michael Richardson
- Re: [Anima] WG input needed: Ben Campbell's quest… Ben Campbell
- Re: [Anima] Ben Campbell's No Objection on draft-… Ben Campbell
- Re: [Anima] WG input needed: Ben Campbell's quest… Ben Campbell
- Re: [Anima] Ben Campbell's No Objection on draft-… Brian E Carpenter
- Re: [Anima] WG input needed: Ben Campbell's quest… Brian E Carpenter
- Re: [Anima] WG input needed: Ben Campbell's quest… Brian E Carpenter