Re: [art] Artart last call review of draft-ietf-regext-epp-eai-12

Dear colleagues,

The sentences in question are removed.
Many thanks for your thoroughness and patience!

On Thu, Jul 28, 2022 at 11:46 PM Takahiro NEMOTO <nemo@go.tuat.ac.jp> wrote:

> Hi James,
>
> Sorry I couldn't reply sooner.
> I have checked the update in -14 and future changes.
> I agree to remove the sentence in section 5.3.2. This change will make
> Section 5.3.2 clear. I've also confirmed that the link in section 8 had
> been corrected to the link Marc suggested. I have also agreed to fix the
> typo.
>
> I'm concerned about John's comments (I saw them on the Gen-ART archive as
> well as here), but I'm sure you will reflect my feedback here in the next
> update for the time being.
>
> Regards,
> Nemo
>
> > 2022/07/28 22:19、Gould, James <jgould=40verisign.com@dmarc.ietf.org
> >のメール:
> >
> > Takahiro,
> >
> > I wanted to follow-up with the feedback that you’ve provided.  For the
> first minor issue, the proposal for “alternate ASCII address” in the
> message (
> https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/regext/ljIoGJtWaiLv8gw4SsSQVOs0xsM/
> ) is to remove the statements from section 5.3.2 since they are associated
> with registrar (client) policy.  For your second minor issue, Dimtry made
> an update to Section 8 “Security Considerations” in
> draft-ietf-regext-epp-eai-13 based on your feedback.  I do notice a
> “allow:ed” typo that will be addressed.
> >
> > Does this address your feedback, and do you have any additional
> feedback?
> >
> > --
> >
> > JG
> >
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> >
> > James Gould
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> > From: Dmitry Belyavsky <beldmit@gmail.com>
> > Date: Friday, June 10, 2022 at 3:49 PM
> > To: Takahiro Nemoto <nemo@go.tuat.ac.jp>
> > Cc: "art@ietf.org" <art@ietf.org>, "
> draft-ietf-regext-epp-eai.all@ietf.org" <
> draft-ietf-regext-epp-eai.all@ietf.org>, "last-call@ietf.org" <
> last-call@ietf.org>, regext <regext@ietf.org>
> > Subject: [EXTERNAL] Re: Artart last call review of
> draft-ietf-regext-epp-eai-12
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> > Resent-To: <galvin@elistx.com>, <beldmit@gmail.com>, <
> francesca.palombini@ericsson.com>, Jody Kolker <jkolker@godaddy.com>,
> James Gould <jgould@verisign.com>, <superuser@gmail.com>, <ietf@antoin.nl>
> > Resent-Date: Friday, June 10, 2022 at 3:49 PM
> >
> > Dear Takahiro,
> >
> > Many thanks for your review!
> >
> > I will update the draft in the middle of the next week according to your
> guidelines (with Marc's amendment)
> >
> > On Thu, Jun 9, 2022 at 10:32 PM Takahiro Nemoto via Datatracker <
> noreply@ietf.org> wrote:
> >> Reviewer: Takahiro Nemoto
> >> Review result: Ready with Issues
> >>
> >> I am the assigned ART-ART reviewer for this draft.
> >>
> >> Summary:
> >> I think this document is concise and generally good, but a few things
> are not
> >> explained well enough. Please consider revising the following points.
> >>
> >> Minor issues:
> >> - It is unclear how to provide "alternative ASCII addresses" in Section
> 5.3.2
> >> and how to distinguish between an EAI address and an alternative ASCII
> address,
> >> so it would be better to add an explanation.
> >>
> >> - It is unclear how to verify the code points of domain names in
> Section 8, so
> >> it would be better to add an explanation. RFC5892 describes how to
> determine
> >> the code points that can be used in IDNA2008 but does not describe how
> to
> >> validate domain name code points. So it would be easier to convey the
> intention
> >> to the reader to write "validate whether the domain name consists of
> the code
> >> points allowed by IDNA2008" rather than just writing "validate all code
> points
> >> in the domain name according to IDNA2008". Also, if the validation
> described in
> >> this section is intended to be compared to the code points listed in
> Appendix
> >> B.1. of RFC 5892, it would be better to refer to IDNA Rules and Derived
> >> Property Values
> >> <
> https://www.iana.org/assignments/idna-tables-12.0.0/idna-tables-12.0.0.xhtml
> >
> >> listing the latest IDNA Derived Property Values.
> >>
> >>
> >
> >
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> > SY, Dmitry Belyavsky
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