Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9354 <draft-ietf-6lo-plc-11> for your review

[Yong-Geun Hong <[e-mail]>]

Dears.

I agree with all the modifications and approve this RFC for publication.

Thanks for your efforts.

Yong-Geun.

2023년 1월 7일 (토) 오전 3:07, Lynne Bartholomew <[e-mail]>님이 작성:

> Hi, Derek.
>
> We have further updated this document per your notes below.
>
> The latest files are posted here (reminder that the erroneous "RFC
> Publisher" entries in the References sections are a known and reported bug
> that should be fixed shortly):
>
>    https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354.txt
>    https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354.pdf
>    https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354.html
>    https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354.xml
>    https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354-diff.html
>    https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354-rfcdiff.html
>    https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354-auth48diff.html
>    https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354-lastdiff.html
>    https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354-lastrfcdiff.html
>
>    https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354-xmldiff1.html
>    https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354-xmldiff2.html
>    https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354-alt-diff.html
>
> We have noted your approval (dated today) on the AUTH48 status page:
>
>    https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9354
>
> Thank you again for your help!
>
> RFC Editor/lb
>
>
> > On Jan 6, 2023, at 2:23 AM, Houjianqiang (Derek) <
> [e-mail]> wrote:
> >
> > Hi Lynne and editors,
> >
> > Thank you for taking my comments and updating the draft. And regarding
> your follow-up comments, please see my feedback as below:
> >
> > = = = = = = = == = = = = = = =
> >
> > Would you like to use alphanumeric order ("6lo" before "6LoWPAN" and
> "RA" before "RPL")?
> >
> > ///Derek: Yes, it's better to use alphanumeric order. Thanks!
> >
> > = = = = = = = =
> >
> > Would this text convey your intended meaning?
> >
> > IPv6 header compression in PLC is based on [RFC6282] (which updates
> [RFC4944]).  [RFC6282] specifies the compression format for IPv6 datagrams
> on top of IEEE 802.15.4; therefore, this format is used for compression of
> IPv6 datagrams within PLC MAC frames.
> >
> > ///Derek: Yes, this text looks good to me.
> >
> > = = = = = = = =
> >
> > We would like further clarification for this text, which we see twice in
> Section 4.5.  Does "the 16-bit short address to the IID mapping" intend to
> say "the mapping between the 16-bit short address and the IID", "the 16-bit
> short address to the IID mapping", or something else?  (We ask because we
> are not sure that "IID mapping" is the correct term here.)
> >
> > Possibly:
> > Any IID bits not covered by
> > context information are taken directly from their corresponding bits in
> the mapping between the 16-bit short address and the IID as provided by
> 0000:00ff:fe00:0XXX, where 0XXX are the 16 bits carried inline, in which
> the first 4 bits are zero.
> >
> > If the "Possibly" text is incorrect, we will update per the "Perhaps"
> text.  Please advise.
> >
> > ///Derek: the "Possibly" text is correct, thanks!
> >
> > = = = = = = = == = = = = = = =
> >
> > Thank you for your valuable comments and support!
> >
> > Kind regards,
> > Derek
> >
> > -----邮件原件-----
> > 发件人: Lynne Bartholomew [mailto:[e-mail]]
> > 发送时间: 2023年1月5日 7:13
> > 收件人: Houjianqiang (Derek) <[e-mail]>
> > 抄送: [e-mail]; Liubing (Remy) <[e-mail]>;
> [e-mail]; [e-mail]; [e-mail];
> [e-mail]; [e-mail]; [e-mail];
> [e-mail]; [e-mail]
> > 主题: Re: AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9354 <draft-ietf-6lo-plc-11> for your review
> >
> > Hi, Derek.  Happy New Year to you and your colleagues as well!
> >
> > Thank you for your reply.  We have updated this document per your notes
> below.
> >
> > Some follow-up questions for you:
> >
> > We see that the list of acronyms and terms in Section 2 is mostly in
> alphanumeric order.  Would you like to use alphanumeric order ("6lo" before
> "6LoWPAN" and "RA" before "RPL")?
> >
> > = = = = = = = =
> >
> > Regarding this question and your reply:
> >
> >>> 16) <!-- [rfced] Please clarify "refers to" in the first sentence
> >>> below. Is this sentence saying the same thing as the sentence that
> follows?
> >>>
> >>> Original:
> >>>  The compression of IPv6 datagrams within PLC MAC frames refers to
> >>>  [RFC6282], which updates [RFC4944].  Header compression as defined in
> >>>  [RFC6282] which specifies the compression format for IPv6 datagrams
> >>>  on top of IEEE 802.15.4, is the basis for IPv6 header compression in
> >>>  PLC.
> >>> -->
> >> ///Derek: Yes, this "refer to" sentence saying the same thing as the
> sentence that follows.
> >
> >
> > Would this text convey your intended meaning?
> >
> > IPv6 header compression in PLC is based on [RFC6282] (which updates
> [RFC4944]).  [RFC6282] specifies the compression format for IPv6 datagrams
> on top of IEEE 802.15.4; therefore, this format is used for compression of
> IPv6 datagrams within PLC MAC frames.
> >
> > = = = = = = = =
> >
> > Regarding this question and your reply:
> >
> >> 18) <!-- [rfced] Please review "in the 16-bit to IID mapping". Should
> >> this read "in the 16-bit short address to the IDD mapping" or something
> else?
> >>
> >> Original:
> >>   Any IID bits not covered by
> >>   context information are taken directly from their corresponding
> >>   bits in the 16-bit to IID mapping given by 0000:00ff:fe00:0XXX,
> >>   where 0XXX are the 16 bits carried in-line, in which the first
> >>   4 bits are zero.
> >>
> >> Perhaps:
> >>   Any IID bits not covered by
> >>   context information are taken directly from their corresponding
> >>   bits in the 16-bit short address to the IID mapping given by
> >>   0000:00ff:fe00:0XXX, where 0XXX are the 16 bits carried inline,
> >>   in which the first 4 bits are zero.
> >> -->
> >>> ///Derek: I am OK with this change. Thanks
> >
> >
> > We would like further clarification for this text, which we see twice in
> Section 4.5.  Does "the 16-bit short address to the IID mapping" intend to
> say "the mapping between the 16-bit short address and the IID", "the 16-bit
> short address to the IID mapping", or something else?  (We ask because we
> are not sure that "IID mapping" is the correct term here.)
> >
> > Possibly:
> > Any IID bits not covered by
> > context information are taken directly from their corresponding bits in
> the mapping between the 16-bit short address and the IID as provided by
> 0000:00ff:fe00:0XXX, where 0XXX are the 16 bits carried inline, in which
> the first 4 bits are zero.
> >
> > If the "Possibly" text is incorrect, we will update per the "Perhaps"
> text.  Please advise.
> >
> > = = = = = = = =
> >
> > The latest files are posted below (please refresh your browser).
> > *Please note* that we are aware of the erroneous "RFC Publisher" entries
> in the References sections; this bug has been reported.
> >
> >   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354.txt
> >   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354.pdf
> >   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354.html
> >   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354.xml
> >   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354-diff.html
> >   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354-rfcdiff.html
> >   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354-auth48diff.html
> >   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354-lastdiff.html
> >   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354-lastrfcdiff.html
> >
> >   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354-xmldiff1.html
> >   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354-xmldiff2.html
> >   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354-alt-diff.html
> >
> > Because we still have some pending questions for you, we will note your
> approval after the remaining questions are resolved.
> >
> > Thanks again!
> >
> > RFC Editor/lb
> >
> >
> >> On Jan 2, 2023, at 1:22 AM, Houjianqiang (Derek) <houjianqiang=
> [e-mail]> wrote:
> >>
> >> Hi Erik and editors,
> >>
> >> Happy new year!
> >> Thanks for your valuable comments and questions. The polished version
> looks good to me, and I give a "pass". For details please see my response
> in line.
> >>
> >> Kind regards,
> >> Derek
> >>
> >> -----邮件原件-----
> >> 发件人: [e-mail] [mailto:[e-mail]]
> >> 发送时间: 2022年12月24日 4:23
> >> 收件人: Houjianqiang (Derek) <[e-mail]>; Liubing (Remy)
> >> <[e-mail]>; [e-mail];
> >> [e-mail]; [e-mail]
> >> 抄送: [e-mail]; [e-mail]; [e-mail];
> >> [e-mail]; [e-mail];
> >> [e-mail]
> >> 主题: [AD] Re: AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9354 <draft-ietf-6lo-plc-11> for your
> >> review
> >>
> >> Authors and *AD,
> >>
> >> *AD, please see question #1 below.
> >>
> >> Authors, while reviewing this document during AUTH48, please resolve
> (as necessary) the following questions, which are also in the XML file.
> >>
> >>
> >> 1) <!-- [rfced] *AD, please review and approve the text added to the
> >> end of the Acknowledgements section (it was added after the document
> >> was approved for publication). This added text is best viewed in this
> >> diff
> >> file: https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354-alt-diff.html.
> >> -->
> >> ///Derek: I am OK with the acknowledgements addition. And I agree with
> Erik and change "delegating the presentation" to "delivering the
> presentation".
> >>
> >> 2) <!-- [rfced] Please note that the title of the document has been
> updated as follows. Abbreviations have been expanded per Section 3.6 of RFC
> 7322 (“RFC Style Guide”). Please review.
> >>
> >> Original:
> >>  Transmission of IPv6 Packets over PLC Networks
> >>
> >> Current:
> >>  Transmission of IPv6 Packets over Power Line Communication (PLC)
> >> Networks
> >> -->
> >> ///Derek: I am OK with this change.
> >>
> >> 3) <!-- [rfced] Please insert any keywords (beyond those that appear in
> the title) for use on https://www.rfc-editor.org/search.
> >> -->
> >> ///Derek: "6lo", "6lowpan", "6lo-plc", "6loplc", "plc"
> >>
> >> 4) <!-- [rfced] Please review "such as ITU-T G.9903, IEEE 1901.1 and
> >> IEEE 1901.2". How may we update for clarity?
> >>
> >> Original:
> >>  This document describes how IPv6 packets are
> >>  transported over constrained PLC networks, such as ITU-T G.9903, IEEE
> >>  1901.1 and IEEE 1901.2.
> >>
> >> Perhaps:
> >>  This document describes how IPv6 packets are
> >>  transported over constrained PLC networks, such as those
> >>  described in ITU-T G.9903, IEEE 1901.1, and IEEE 1901.2.
> >>
> >> ///Derek: I am OK with this change. Thanks
> >>
> >> Or:
> >>  This document describes how IPv6 packets are
> >>  transported over constrained PLC networks, which are
> >>  described in ITU-T G.9903, IEEE 1901.1, and IEEE 1901.2.
> >> -->
> >> ///Derek: "such as those" is preferred (I'm referring to the sentence
> >> below "Perhaps:")
> >>
> >> 5) <!-- [rfced] Will it be clear to readers what "large quantity" is
> >> referring to here? Should this read "large capacity", "large quantity
> >> of nodes", or something else?
> >>
> >> Original:
> >>  The data acquisition devices in these scenarios share
> >>  common features such as fixed position, large quantity, low data rate
> >>  and low power consumption.
> >> -->
> >> ///Derek: I am OK with this change. "large quantity of nodes" is
> >> preferred
> >>
> >> 6) <!-- [rfced] Please confirm that "electric plugged devices" is
> correct here.
> >>
> >> Original:
> >>  PLC technology enables convenient two-way communications for home
> >>  users and utility companies to monitor and control electric plugged
> >>  devices such as electricity meters and street lights.
> >> -->
> >> ///Derek: I suggest to use "electrically connected devices" instead of
> "electric plugged devices ".
> >>
> >> 7) <!-- [rfced] We have several questions about the sentence below.
> >>
> >> - Should "have been addressed on the MAC and PHY layers for this
> >> communication technology" be revised as shown below?
> >>
> >> - Would updating the text starting with "e.g." as follows to improve
> readability?
> >>
> >> Original:
> >>  Various standards have been addressed on the MAC and PHY layers for
> >>  this communication technology, e.g., BBPLC (1.8-250 MHz) including
> >>  IEEE 1901 and ITU-T G.hn, and NBPLC (3-500 kHz) including ITU-T
> >>  G.9902 (G.hnem), ITU-T G.9903 (G3-PLC) [ITU-T_G.9903], ITU-T G.9904
> >>  (PRIME), IEEE 1901.2 [IEEE_1901.2] (a combination of G3-PLC and PRIME
> >>  PLC) and IEEE 1901.2a [IEEE_1901.2a] (an amendment to IEEE 1901.2).
> >>
> >> Perhaps:
> >>  Various standards address this communication technology on the MAC and
> Physical (PHY)
> >>  layers. For example, standards for BBPLC (1.8-250 MHz)
> >>  include IEEE 1901 and ITU-T G.hn, and standards for NBPLC (3-500 kHz)
> include
> >>  ITU-T G.9902 (G.hnem), ITU-T G.9903 (G3-PLC) [ITU-T_G.9903], ITU-T
> >>  G.9904 (PRIME), IEEE 1901.2 (a combination of G3-PLC
> >>  and PRIME PLC) [IEEE_1901.2], and IEEE 1901.2a (an amendment to IEEE
> >>  1901.2) [IEEE_1901.2a].
> >> -->
> >> Derek: I am OK with this change. Thanks
> >>
> >> 8) <!-- [rfced] Since the "PLC MAC Layer" and "PLC PHY Layer" are two
> >> different layers in Figure 1, we updated "PLC MAC/PHY layer" to read
> >> "PLC MAC and PLC PHY
> >> layers") in this sentence. Also, please review "corresponds to IEEE
> >> 1901.1, IEEE 1901.2, or ITU-T G.9903" and let us know if updates are
> needed for clarity.
> >>
> >> Original:
> >>  The PLC MAC/PHY layer corresponds to IEEE 1901.1, IEEE 1901.2 or ITU-T
> >>  G.9903.
> >>
> >> Perhaps:
> >>  The PLC MAC and PLC PHY layers correspond to the layers described
> >>  in IEEE 1901.1, IEEE 1901.2, or ITU-T G.9903.
> >> -->
> >> ///Derek: I am OK with this change. Thanks
> >>
> >> 9) <!-- [rfced] We see that "mesh-under" is mentioned in Section 3.4,
> >> but "route-over" is not. We see "route-over" in Section 4.4. Are any
> >> updates needed?
> >>
> >> Original:
> >>  The routes can be built in mesh-under
> >>  mode at layer 2 or in route-over mode at layer-3, as explained in
> >>  Section 3.4.
> >> -->
> >> ///Derek: Thanks for your comments. I suggest changing the above
> sentence to "... as explained in Section 3.4 and Section 4.4."
> >>
> >> 10) <!-- [rfced] In Figure 1, should "IPv6" be "IPv6 Layer"? The other
> >> fields include "Layer".
> >> -->
> >> ///Derek: I am fine with "IPv6 Layer".
> >>
> >> 11) <!-- [rfced] We are having trouble parsing this sentence,
> >> specifically "besides [RFC4291]". Also, will it be clear to readers
> >> what "reliable indicators for their original meanings" means? Please
> >> let us know how we may update for clarity.
> >>
> >> Original:
> >>  As investigated in [RFC7136], besides [RFC4291], some other IID
> >>  generation methods defined in IETF do not imply any semantics for the
> >>  "Universal/Local" (U/L) bit (bit 6) and the Individual/Group bit (bit
> >>  7), so that these two bits are not reliable indicators for their
> >>  original meanings.
> >>
> >> Perhaps:
> >>  As investigated in [RFC7136], aside from the method discussed in
> [RFC4291],
> >>  other IID-generation methods defined by the IETF do not imply any
> >>  additional semantics for the Universal/Local (U/L) bit (bit 6) and the
> >>  Individual/Group bit (bit 7). Therefore, these two bits are not
> reliable
> >>  indicators.
> >> -->
> >> ///Derek: I am OK with this change. Thanks
> >>
> >> 12) <!-- [rfced] Will readers understand "If so" (second sentence
> >> below) and "If not" (third sentence below)?  We included the first
> sentence for context.
> >>
> >> Original:
> >>  Thus when using an IID derived by a short
> >>  address, the operators of the PLC network can choose to comply with
> >>  the original meaning of these two bits or not.  If so, since the IID
> >>  derived from the short address is not global, these two bits MUST
> >>  both be set to zero.
> >>  ...
> >>  If not, the operator must be aware that these two bits are not
> >>  reliable indicators, and the IID cannot be transformed back into a
> >>  short link layer address via a reverse operation of the mechanism
> >>  presented above.
> >>
> >> Perhaps:
> >>  Thus, when using an IID derived by a short
> >>  address, the operators of the PLC network can choose whether or not
> >>  to comply with the original meaning of these two bits.  If they choose
> to
> >>  comply with the original meaning, these two bits
> >>  MUST both be set to zero, since
> >>  the IID derived from the short address is not global.
> >>  ...
> >>  If they choose not to comply with the original meaning, the operator
> must
> >>  be aware that these two bits
> >>  are not reliable indicators, and the IID cannot be transformed back
> >>  into a short link-layer address via a reverse operation of the
> >>  mechanism presented above.
> >> -->
> >> ///Derek: I am OK with this change. Thanks
> >>
> >> 13) <!-- [rfced] Please clarify “by default of the implementations”.
> >>
> >> Original:
> >>  The hash algorithm by default
> >>  of the implementations SHOULD be SHA256, using the version number,
> >>  the PANID/NID and the short address as the input arguments, and the
> >>  256-bits hash output is truncated into the IID by taking the high 64
> >>  bits.
> >>
> >> Perhaps:
> >>  By default, the hash algorithm SHOULD be SHA256, using the version
> number,
> >>  the PAN ID or NID, and the short address as the input arguments, and
> >>  the 256-bit hash output is truncated into the IID by taking
> >>  the high 64 bits.
> >> -->
> >> ///Derek: I am OK with this change. Thanks
> >>
> >> 14) <!-- [rfced] Please review "NCEs (neighbor cache entry)". Should
> >> this be singular or plural?
> >>
> >> Original:
> >>  The resolution is realized by the
> >>  NCEs (neighbor cache entry) created during the address registration
> >>  at the routers.
> >>
> >> Perhaps (singular):
> >>  The resolution is realized by the
> >>  NCE (neighbor cache entry) created during the address registration
> >>  at the routers.
> >>
> >> Or (plural):
> >>  The resolution is realized by the
> >>  NCEs (neighbor cache entries) created during the address registration
> >>  at the routers.
> >> -->
> >> ///Derek: I suggest to use plural
> >>
> >> 15) <!-- [rfced] How may we recast this sentence to avoid hyphenation
> >> of "RFC6775-only" and "RFC8505-updated"? See the "RFCs as Compounds"
> >> section of the online style guide (
> https://www.rfc-editor.org/styleguide/part2/).
> >>
> >> Original:
> >>  The section 6 of [RFC8505] how
> >>  RFC6775-only devices work with RFC8505-updated devices.
> >>
> >> Perhaps:
> >>  Section 6 of [RFC8505] shows how
> >>  devices that only behave as specified in [RFC6775] can work with
> devices
> >>  that have been updated per [RFC8505].
> >> -->
> >> ///Derek: I am OK with this change. Thanks
> >>
> >> 16) <!-- [rfced] Please clarify "refers to" in the first sentence
> >> below. Is this sentence saying the same thing as the sentence that
> follows?
> >>
> >> Original:
> >>  The compression of IPv6 datagrams within PLC MAC frames refers to
> >>  [RFC6282], which updates [RFC4944].  Header compression as defined in
> >>  [RFC6282] which specifies the compression format for IPv6 datagrams
> >>  on top of IEEE 802.15.4, is the basis for IPv6 header compression in
> >>  PLC.
> >> -->
> >> ///Derek: Yes, this "refer to" sentence saying the same thing as the
> sentence that follows.
> >>
> >> 17) <!-- [rfced] We believe that this sentence is correct, but please
> >> confirm. We ask because we do not see "compression residu" in RFC 6282
> >> (though we think this refers to Figure 1 in Section 3 of RFC 6282).
> >>
> >> Original:
> >>  For situations when PLC MAC MTU cannot support the 1280-octet
> >>  IPv6 packet, headers MUST be compressed according to [RFC6282]
> >>  encoding formats, including the Dispatch Header, the LOWPAN_IPHC and
> >>  the compression residu carried in-line.
> >> -->
> >> ///Derek: Yes, this sentence is correct.
> >>
> >> 18) <!-- [rfced] Please review "in the 16-bit to IID mapping". Should
> >> this read "in the 16-bit short address to the IDD mapping" or something
> else?
> >>
> >> Original:
> >>   Any IID bits not covered by
> >>   context information are taken directly from their corresponding
> >>   bits in the 16-bit to IID mapping given by 0000:00ff:fe00:0XXX,
> >>   where 0XXX are the 16 bits carried in-line, in which the first
> >>   4 bits are zero.
> >>
> >> Perhaps:
> >>   Any IID bits not covered by
> >>   context information are taken directly from their corresponding
> >>   bits in the 16-bit short address to the IID mapping given by
> >>   0000:00ff:fe00:0XXX, where 0XXX are the 16 bits carried inline,
> >>   in which the first 4 bits are zero.
> >> -->
> >> ///Derek: I am OK with this change. Thanks
> >>
> >> 19) <!-- [rfced] Please review "of great potential applications".
> >> Should this be updated to one of the following suggestions?
> >>
> >> Original:
> >>  Mesh networking in PLC is of great potential applications and has
> >>  been studied for several years.
> >>
> >> Perhaps:
> >> a)
> >>  Mesh networking in PLC has many potential applications and has
> >>  been studied for several years.
> >>
> >> b)
> >>  Mesh networking in PLC has great potential for many applications
> >>  and has been studied for several years.
> >> -->
> >> ///Derek: option (a) is preferred, thanks
> >>
> >> 20) <!-- [rfced] Would it be helpful to include the names of the
> >> protocols here rather than just the citations?
> >>
> >> Original:
> >>  Methods include protocols such as [RFC7925] (exchanging pre-
> >>  installed certificates over DTLS), [I-D.ietf-6tisch-minimal-security]
> >>  (which uses pre-shared keys), and
> >>  [I-D.ietf-6tisch-dtsecurity-zerotouch-join] (a IoT version of BRSKI,
> >>  which uses IDevID and MASA service to facilitate authentication).
> >>
> >> Perhaps:
> >>  Methods include protocols such as the TLS/DTLS Profile [RFC7925]
> >>  (exchanging pre-installed certificates over DTLS), the Constrained
> >>  Join Protocol (CoJP) [RFC9031] (which
> >>  uses pre-shared keys), and Zero-Touch Secure Join [ZEROTOUCH] (an IoT
> version of the
> >>  Bootstrapping Remote Secure Key Infrastructure (BRSKI), which uses an
> >>  Initial Device Identifier (IDevID) and a Manufacturer Authorized
> >>  Signing Authority (MASA) service to facilitate authentication).
> >> -->
> >> ///Derek: I am OK with this change. Thanks
> >>
> >> 21) <!-- [rfced] Should “interface identifiers (IID)” here read either
> >> “IIDs” or
> >> “IPv6 Interface Identifiers (IIDs)”?
> >>
> >> Original:
> >>  [RFC8065] discusses the privacy
> >>  threats when interface identifiers (IID) are generated without
> >>  sufficient entropy, including correlation of activities over time,
> >>  location tracking, device-specific vulnerability exploitation, and
> >>  address scanning.
> >> -->
> >> ///Derek: IID refers to interface identifier
> >>
> >> 22) <!-- [rfced] FYI - We updated the URLs for the two references
> >> below because the original URLs returned 404 Errors (Page not found).
> >>
> >> Original:
> >>  [IEEE_1901.2]
> >>             IEEE-SA Standards Board, "IEEE Standard for Low-Frequency
> >>             (less than 500 kHz) Narrowband Power Line Communications
> >>             for Smart Grid Applications", IEEE 1901.2, October 2013,
> >>             <https://standards.ieee.org/findstds/
> >>             standard/1901.2-2013.html>.
> >>  ...
> >>  [IEEE_1901.2a]
> >>             IEEE-SA Standards Board, "IEEE Standard for Low-Frequency
> >>             (less than 500 kHz) Narrowband Power Line Communications
> >>             for Smart Grid Applications - Amendment 1", IEEE 1901.2a,
> >>             September 2015, <https://standards.ieee.org/findstds/
> >>             standard/1901.2a-2015.html>.
> >>
> >> Current:
> >>  [IEEE_1901.2]
> >>             IEEE, "IEEE Standard for Low-Frequency
> >>             (less than 500 kHz) Narrowband Power Line Communications
> >>             for Smart Grid Applications",
> >>     DOI 10.1109/IEEESTD.2013.6679210,
> >>     IEEE Std. 1901.2, December 2013,
> >>             <https://ieeexplore.ieee.org/document/6679210>.
> >>  ...
> >>  [IEEE_1901.2a]
> >>             IEEE, "IEEE Standard for Low-Frequency
> >>             (less than 500 kHz) Narrowband Power Line Communications
> >>             for Smart Grid Applications - Amendment 1",
> >>     DOI 10.1109/IEEESTD.2015.7286946, IEEE Std. 1901.2a,
> >>     October 2015, <https://ieeexplore.ieee.org/document/7286946>.
> >> -->
> >> ///Derek: I am OK with this change. Thanks
> >>
> >> 23) <!-- [rfced] The URL provided in this reference redirects to a
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> >> May we update the title, date, and URL of this reference entry
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> >>  [EUI-64]   IEEE-SA Standards Board, "Guidelines for 64-bit Global
> >>             Identifier (EUI-64) Registration Authority", IEEE EUI-64,
> >>             March 1997, <https://standards.ieee.org/content/dam/ieee-
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> (OUI),
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> https://standards.ieee.org/wp-content/uploads/import/documents/
> >>             tutorials/eui.pdf>.
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> >> ///Derek: I am OK with this change. Thanks
> >>
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> >>
> >> IID:  IPv6 Interface Identifier
> >> RPL:  IPv6 Routing Protocol for Low-Power and Lossy Networks
> >>
> >> ///Derek: thanks for pointing out. "IPv6" is not needed here
> >>
> >> b) Please review instances of "Interface ID”. Should any of these read
> “IID”
> >> or “IPv6 Interface Identifier”?
> >> ///Derek: The abbreviation of IID has been used in other 6lo RFCs (e.g.
> RFC8065, RFC8015, RFC9159). I recommend keeping the abbreviation "IID".
> >>
> >> c) How should the acronym MAC be expanded in this document? We believe
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> >> include the
> >> following:
> >>
> >> Media Access Control (MAC)
> >> Medium Access Control (MAC)
> >> Message Authentication Code (MAC)
> >> Mandatory Access Control (MAC)
> >>
> >> ///Derek: I agree acronym "Media Access Control (MAC)" should be
> >> expanded. Thanks
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> >> ///Derek: "PLC device" is preferred
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> >> RFC9354 (draft-ietf-6lo-plc-11)
> >>
> >> Title            : Transmission of IPv6 Packets over PLC Networks
> >> Author(s)        : J. Hou, B. Liu, Y. Hong, X. Tang, C. Perkins
> >> WG Chair(s)      : Shwetha Bhandari, Carles Gomez
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