Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9354 <draft-ietf-6lo-plc-11> for your review
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Subject: Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9354 <draft-ietf-6lo-plc-11> for your review
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Hi Xiaojun and other authors, Xiaojun - thank you for the reply! We have noted your approval on the AUTH48 status page for this document (see https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9354). All authors - we now have all needed approvals. We will begin to prepare this document for publication at this time. Sincerely, RFC Editor/rv > On Jan 10, 2023, at 10:37 PM, 汤效军 <itc@sgepri.sgcc.com.cn> wrote: > > Dear all, > I agree with all the modification. > Thanks for your efforts! > Xiaojun > > ---------------- > > > > ---------- Origin message ---------- > >From:"Lynne Bartholomew" <lbartholomew@amsl.com> > >To:"Houjianqiang (Derek)" <houjianqiang@huawei.com> > >Subject:Re: AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9354 <draft-ietf-6lo-plc-11> for your review > >Date:2023-01-07 02:07:16 > Hi, Derek. > > We have further updated this document per your notes below. > > The latest files are posted here (reminder that the erroneous "RFC Publisher" entries in the References sections are a known and reported bug that should be fixed shortly): > > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354.txt > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354.pdf > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354.html > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354.xml > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354-diff.html > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354-rfcdiff.html > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354-auth48diff.html > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354-lastdiff.html > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354-lastrfcdiff.html > > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354-xmldiff1.html > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354-xmldiff2.html > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354-alt-diff.html > > We have noted your approval (dated today) on the AUTH48 status page: > > https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9354 > > Thank you again for your help! > > RFC Editor/lb > > > > On Jan 6, 2023, at 2:23 AM, Houjianqiang (Derek) <houjianqiang@huawei.com> wrote: > > > > Hi Lynne and editors, > > > > Thank you for taking my comments and updating the draft. And regarding your follow-up comments, please see my feedback as below: > > > > = = = = = = = == = = = = = = = > > > > Would you like to use alphanumeric order ("6lo" before "6LoWPAN" and "RA" before "RPL")? > > > > ///Derek: Yes, it's better to use alphanumeric order. Thanks! > > > > = = = = = = = = > > > > Would this text convey your intended meaning? > > > > IPv6 header compression in PLC is based on [RFC6282] (which updates [RFC4944]). [RFC6282] specifies the compression format for IPv6 datagrams on top of IEEE 802.15.4; therefore, this format is used for compression of IPv6 datagrams within PLC MAC frames. > > > > ///Derek: Yes, this text looks good to me. > > > > = = = = = = = = > > > > We would like further clarification for this text, which we see twice in Section 4.5. Does "the 16-bit short address to the IID mapping" intend to say "the mapping between the 16-bit short address and the IID", "the 16-bit short address to the IID mapping", or something else? (We ask because we are not sure that "IID mapping" is the correct term here.) > > > > Possibly: > > Any IID bits not covered by > > context information are taken directly from their corresponding bits in the mapping between the 16-bit short address and the IID as provided by 0000:00ff:fe00:0XXX, where 0XXX are the 16 bits carried inline, in which the first 4 bits are zero. > > > > If the "Possibly" text is incorrect, we will update per the "Perhaps" text. Please advise. > > > > ///Derek: the "Possibly" text is correct, thanks! > > > > = = = = = = = == = = = = = = = > > > > Thank you for your valuable comments and support! > > > > Kind regards, > > Derek > > > > -----邮件原件----- > > 发件人: Lynne Bartholomew [mailto:lbartholomew@amsl.com] > > 发送时间: 2023年1月5日 7:13 > > 收件人: Houjianqiang (Derek) <houjianqiang@huawei.com> > > 抄送: rfc-editor@rfc-editor.org; Liubing (Remy) <remy.liubing@huawei.com>; yonggeun.hong@gmail.com; itc@sgepri.sgcc.com.cn; charliep@computer.org; 6lo-ads@ietf.org; 6lo-chairs@ietf.org; carlesgo@entel.upc.edu; ek.ietf@gmail.com; auth48archive@rfc-editor.org > > 主题: Re: AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9354 <draft-ietf-6lo-plc-11> for your review > > > > Hi, Derek. Happy New Year to you and your colleagues as well! > > > > Thank you for your reply. We have updated this document per your notes below. > > > > Some follow-up questions for you: > > > > We see that the list of acronyms and terms in Section 2 is mostly in alphanumeric order. Would you like to use alphanumeric order ("6lo" before "6LoWPAN" and "RA" before "RPL")? > > > > = = = = = = = = > > > > Regarding this question and your reply: > > > >>> 16) <!-- [rfced] Please clarify "refers to" in the first sentence > >>> below. Is this sentence saying the same thing as the sentence that follows? > >>> > >>> Original: > >>> The compression of IPv6 datagrams within PLC MAC frames refers to > >>> [RFC6282], which updates [RFC4944]. Header compression as defined in > >>> [RFC6282] which specifies the compression format for IPv6 datagrams > >>> on top of IEEE 802.15.4, is the basis for IPv6 header compression in > >>> PLC. > >>> --> > >> ///Derek: Yes, this "refer to" sentence saying the same thing as the sentence that follows. > > > > > > Would this text convey your intended meaning? > > > > IPv6 header compression in PLC is based on [RFC6282] (which updates [RFC4944]). [RFC6282] specifies the compression format for IPv6 datagrams on top of IEEE 802.15.4; therefore, this format is used for compression of IPv6 datagrams within PLC MAC frames. > > > > = = = = = = = = > > > > Regarding this question and your reply: > > > >> 18) <!-- [rfced] Please review "in the 16-bit to IID mapping". Should > >> this read "in the 16-bit short address to the IDD mapping" or something else? > >> > >> Original: > >> Any IID bits not covered by > >> context information are taken directly from their corresponding > >> bits in the 16-bit to IID mapping given by 0000:00ff:fe00:0XXX, > >> where 0XXX are the 16 bits carried in-line, in which the first > >> 4 bits are zero. > >> > >> Perhaps: > >> Any IID bits not covered by > >> context information are taken directly from their corresponding > >> bits in the 16-bit short address to the IID mapping given by > >> 0000:00ff:fe00:0XXX, where 0XXX are the 16 bits carried inline, > >> in which the first 4 bits are zero. > >> --> > >>> ///Derek: I am OK with this change. Thanks > > > > > > We would like further clarification for this text, which we see twice in Section 4.5. Does "the 16-bit short address to the IID mapping" intend to say "the mapping between the 16-bit short address and the IID", "the 16-bit short address to the IID mapping", or something else? (We ask because we are not sure that "IID mapping" is the correct term here.) > > > > Possibly: > > Any IID bits not covered by > > context information are taken directly from their corresponding bits in the mapping between the 16-bit short address and the IID as provided by 0000:00ff:fe00:0XXX, where 0XXX are the 16 bits carried inline, in which the first 4 bits are zero. > > > > If the "Possibly" text is incorrect, we will update per the "Perhaps" text. Please advise. > > > > = = = = = = = = > > > > The latest files are posted below (please refresh your browser). > > *Please note* that we are aware of the erroneous "RFC Publisher" entries in the References sections; this bug has been reported. > > > > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354.txt > > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354.pdf > > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354.html > > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354.xml > > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354-diff.html > > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354-rfcdiff.html > > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354-auth48diff.html > > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354-lastdiff.html > > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354-lastrfcdiff.html > > > > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354-xmldiff1.html > > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354-xmldiff2.html > > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354-alt-diff.html > > > > Because we still have some pending questions for you, we will note your approval after the remaining questions are resolved. > > > > Thanks again! > > > > RFC Editor/lb > > > > > >> On Jan 2, 2023, at 1:22 AM, Houjianqiang (Derek) <houjianqiang=40huawei.com@dmarc.ietf.org> wrote: > >> > >> Hi Erik and editors, > >> > >> Happy new year! > >> Thanks for your valuable comments and questions. The polished version looks good to me, and I give a "pass". For details please see my response in line. > >> > >> Kind regards, > >> Derek > >> > >> -----邮件原件----- > >> 发件人: rfc-editor@rfc-editor.org [mailto:rfc-editor@rfc-editor.org] > >> 发送时间: 2022年12月24日 4:23 > >> 收件人: Houjianqiang (Derek) <houjianqiang@huawei.com>; Liubing (Remy) > >> <remy.liubing@huawei.com>; yonggeun.hong@gmail.com; > >> itc@sgepri.sgcc.com.cn; charliep@computer.org > >> 抄送: rfc-editor@rfc-editor.org; 6lo-ads@ietf.org; 6lo-chairs@ietf.org; > >> carlesgo@entel.upc.edu; ek.ietf@gmail.com; > >> auth48archive@rfc-editor.org > >> 主题: [AD] Re: AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9354 <draft-ietf-6lo-plc-11> for your > >> review > >> > >> Authors and *AD, > >> > >> *AD, please see question #1 below. > >> > >> Authors, while reviewing this document during AUTH48, please resolve (as necessary) the following questions, which are also in the XML file. > >> > >> > >> 1) <!-- [rfced] *AD, please review and approve the text added to the > >> end of the Acknowledgements section (it was added after the document > >> was approved for publication). This added text is best viewed in this > >> diff > >> file: https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9354-alt-diff.html. > >> --> > >> ///Derek: I am OK with the acknowledgements addition. And I agree with Erik and change "delegating the presentation" to "delivering the presentation". > >> > >> 2) <!-- [rfced] Please note that the title of the document has been updated as follows. Abbreviations have been expanded per Section 3.6 of RFC 7322 (“RFC Style Guide”). Please review. > >> > >> Original: > >> Transmission of IPv6 Packets over PLC Networks > >> > >> Current: > >> Transmission of IPv6 Packets over Power Line Communication (PLC) > >> Networks > >> --> > >> ///Derek: I am OK with this change. > >> > >> 3) <!-- [rfced] Please insert any keywords (beyond those that appear in the title) for use on https://www.rfc-editor.org/search. > >> --> > >> ///Derek: "6lo", "6lowpan", "6lo-plc", "6loplc", "plc" > >> > >> 4) <!-- [rfced] Please review "such as ITU-T G.9903, IEEE 1901.1 and > >> IEEE 1901.2". How may we update for clarity? > >> > >> Original: > >> This document describes how IPv6 packets are > >> transported over constrained PLC networks, such as ITU-T G.9903, IEEE > >> 1901.1 and IEEE 1901.2. > >> > >> Perhaps: > >> This document describes how IPv6 packets are > >> transported over constrained PLC networks, such as those > >> described in ITU-T G.9903, IEEE 1901.1, and IEEE 1901.2. > >> > >> ///Derek: I am OK with this change. Thanks > >> > >> Or: > >> This document describes how IPv6 packets are > >> transported over constrained PLC networks, which are > >> described in ITU-T G.9903, IEEE 1901.1, and IEEE 1901.2. > >> --> > >> ///Derek: "such as those" is preferred (I'm referring to the sentence > >> below "Perhaps:") > >> > >> 5) <!-- [rfced] Will it be clear to readers what "large quantity" is > >> referring to here? Should this read "large capacity", "large quantity > >> of nodes", or something else? > >> > >> Original: > >> The data acquisition devices in these scenarios share > >> common features such as fixed position, large quantity, low data rate > >> and low power consumption. > >> --> > >> ///Derek: I am OK with this change. "large quantity of nodes" is > >> preferred > >> > >> 6) <!-- [rfced] Please confirm that "electric plugged devices" is correct here. > >> > >> Original: > >> PLC technology enables convenient two-way communications for home > >> users and utility companies to monitor and control electric plugged > >> devices such as electricity meters and street lights. > >> --> > >> ///Derek: I suggest to use "electrically connected devices" instead of "electric plugged devices ". > >> > >> 7) <!-- [rfced] We have several questions about the sentence below. > >> > >> - Should "have been addressed on the MAC and PHY layers for this > >> communication technology" be revised as shown below? > >> > >> - Would updating the text starting with "e.g." as follows to improve readability? > >> > >> Original: > >> Various standards have been addressed on the MAC and PHY layers for > >> this communication technology, e.g., BBPLC (1.8-250 MHz) including > >> IEEE 1901 and ITU-T G.hn, and NBPLC (3-500 kHz) including ITU-T > >> G.9902 (G.hnem), ITU-T G.9903 (G3-PLC) [ITU-T_G.9903], ITU-T G.9904 > >> (PRIME), IEEE 1901.2 [IEEE_1901.2] (a combination of G3-PLC and PRIME > >> PLC) and IEEE 1901.2a [IEEE_1901.2a] (an amendment to IEEE 1901.2). > >> > >> Perhaps: > >> Various standards address this communication technology on the MAC and Physical (PHY) > >> layers. For example, standards for BBPLC (1.8-250 MHz) > >> include IEEE 1901 and ITU-T G.hn, and standards for NBPLC (3-500 kHz) include > >> ITU-T G.9902 (G.hnem), ITU-T G.9903 (G3-PLC) [ITU-T_G.9903], ITU-T > >> G.9904 (PRIME), IEEE 1901.2 (a combination of G3-PLC > >> and PRIME PLC) [IEEE_1901.2], and IEEE 1901.2a (an amendment to IEEE > >> 1901.2) [IEEE_1901.2a]. > >> --> > >> Derek: I am OK with this change. Thanks > >> > >> 8) <!-- [rfced] Since the "PLC MAC Layer" and "PLC PHY Layer" are two > >> different layers in Figure 1, we updated "PLC MAC/PHY layer" to read > >> "PLC MAC and PLC PHY > >> layers") in this sentence. Also, please review "corresponds to IEEE > >> 1901.1, IEEE 1901.2, or ITU-T G.9903" and let us know if updates are needed for clarity. > >> > >> Original: > >> The PLC MAC/PHY layer corresponds to IEEE 1901.1, IEEE 1901.2 or ITU-T > >> G.9903. > >> > >> Perhaps: > >> The PLC MAC and PLC PHY layers correspond to the layers described > >> in IEEE 1901.1, IEEE 1901.2, or ITU-T G.9903. > >> --> > >> ///Derek: I am OK with this change. Thanks > >> > >> 9) <!-- [rfced] We see that "mesh-under" is mentioned in Section 3.4, > >> but "route-over" is not. We see "route-over" in Section 4.4. Are any > >> updates needed? > >> > >> Original: > >> The routes can be built in mesh-under > >> mode at layer 2 or in route-over mode at layer-3, as explained in > >> Section 3.4. > >> --> > >> ///Derek: Thanks for your comments. I suggest changing the above sentence to "... as explained in Section 3.4 and Section 4.4." > >> > >> 10) <!-- [rfced] In Figure 1, should "IPv6" be "IPv6 Layer"? The other > >> fields include "Layer". > >> --> > >> ///Derek: I am fine with "IPv6 Layer". > >> > >> 11) <!-- [rfced] We are having trouble parsing this sentence, > >> specifically "besides [RFC4291]". Also, will it be clear to readers > >> what "reliable indicators for their original meanings" means? Please > >> let us know how we may update for clarity. > >> > >> Original: > >> As investigated in [RFC7136], besides [RFC4291], some other IID > >> generation methods defined in IETF do not imply any semantics for the > >> "Universal/Local" (U/L) bit (bit 6) and the Individual/Group bit (bit > >> 7), so that these two bits are not reliable indicators for their > >> original meanings. > >> > >> Perhaps: > >> As investigated in [RFC7136], aside from the method discussed in [RFC4291], > >> other IID-generation methods defined by the IETF do not imply any > >> additional semantics for the Universal/Local (U/L) bit (bit 6) and the > >> Individual/Group bit (bit 7). Therefore, these two bits are not reliable > >> indicators. > >> --> > >> ///Derek: I am OK with this change. Thanks > >> > >> 12) <!-- [rfced] Will readers understand "If so" (second sentence > >> below) and "If not" (third sentence below)? We included the first sentence for context. > >> > >> Original: > >> Thus when using an IID derived by a short > >> address, the operators of the PLC network can choose to comply with > >> the original meaning of these two bits or not. If so, since the IID > >> derived from the short address is not global, these two bits MUST > >> both be set to zero. > >> ... > >> If not, the operator must be aware that these two bits are not > >> reliable indicators, and the IID cannot be transformed back into a > >> short link layer address via a reverse operation of the mechanism > >> presented above. > >> > >> Perhaps: > >> Thus, when using an IID derived by a short > >> address, the operators of the PLC network can choose whether or not > >> to comply with the original meaning of these two bits. If they choose to > >> comply with the original meaning, these two bits > >> MUST both be set to zero, since > >> the IID derived from the short address is not global. > >> ... > >> If they choose not to comply with the original meaning, the operator must > >> be aware that these two bits > >> are not reliable indicators, and the IID cannot be transformed back > >> into a short link-layer address via a reverse operation of the > >> mechanism presented above. > >> --> > >> ///Derek: I am OK with this change. Thanks > >> > >> 13) <!-- [rfced] Please clarify “by default of the implementations”. > >> > >> Original: > >> The hash algorithm by default > >> of the implementations SHOULD be SHA256, using the version number, > >> the PANID/NID and the short address as the input arguments, and the > >> 256-bits hash output is truncated into the IID by taking the high 64 > >> bits. > >> > >> Perhaps: > >> By default, the hash algorithm SHOULD be SHA256, using the version number, > >> the PAN ID or NID, and the short address as the input arguments, and > >> the 256-bit hash output is truncated into the IID by taking > >> the high 64 bits. > >> --> > >> ///Derek: I am OK with this change. Thanks > >> > >> 14) <!-- [rfced] Please review "NCEs (neighbor cache entry)". Should > >> this be singular or plural? > >> > >> Original: > >> The resolution is realized by the > >> NCEs (neighbor cache entry) created during the address registration > >> at the routers. > >> > >> Perhaps (singular): > >> The resolution is realized by the > >> NCE (neighbor cache entry) created during the address registration > >> at the routers. > >> > >> Or (plural): > >> The resolution is realized by the > >> NCEs (neighbor cache entries) created during the address registration > >> at the routers. > >> --> > >> ///Derek: I suggest to use plural > >> > >> 15) <!-- [rfced] How may we recast this sentence to avoid hyphenation > >> of "RFC6775-only" and "RFC8505-updated"? See the "RFCs as Compounds" > >> section of the online style guide (https://www.rfc-editor.org/styleguide/part2/). > >> > >> Original: > >> The section 6 of [RFC8505] how > >> RFC6775-only devices work with RFC8505-updated devices. > >> > >> Perhaps: > >> Section 6 of [RFC8505] shows how > >> devices that only behave as specified in [RFC6775] can work with devices > >> that have been updated per [RFC8505]. > >> --> > >> ///Derek: I am OK with this change. Thanks > >> > >> 16) <!-- [rfced] Please clarify "refers to" in the first sentence > >> below. Is this sentence saying the same thing as the sentence that follows? > >> > >> Original: > >> The compression of IPv6 datagrams within PLC MAC frames refers to > >> [RFC6282], which updates [RFC4944]. Header compression as defined in > >> [RFC6282] which specifies the compression format for IPv6 datagrams > >> on top of IEEE 802.15.4, is the basis for IPv6 header compression in > >> PLC. > >> --> > >> ///Derek: Yes, this "refer to" sentence saying the same thing as the sentence that follows. > >> > >> 17) <!-- [rfced] We believe that this sentence is correct, but please > >> confirm. We ask because we do not see "compression residu" in RFC 6282 > >> (though we think this refers to Figure 1 in Section 3 of RFC 6282). > >> > >> Original: > >> For situations when PLC MAC MTU cannot support the 1280-octet > >> IPv6 packet, headers MUST be compressed according to [RFC6282] > >> encoding formats, including the Dispatch Header, the LOWPAN_IPHC and > >> the compression residu carried in-line. > >> --> > >> ///Derek: Yes, this sentence is correct. > >> > >> 18) <!-- [rfced] Please review "in the 16-bit to IID mapping". Should > >> this read "in the 16-bit short address to the IDD mapping" or something else? > >> > >> Original: > >> Any IID bits not covered by > >> context information are taken directly from their corresponding > >> bits in the 16-bit to IID mapping given by 0000:00ff:fe00:0XXX, > >> where 0XXX are the 16 bits carried in-line, in which the first > >> 4 bits are zero. > >> > >> Perhaps: > >> Any IID bits not covered by > >> context information are taken directly from their corresponding > >> bits in the 16-bit short address to the IID mapping given by > >> 0000:00ff:fe00:0XXX, where 0XXX are the 16 bits carried inline, > >> in which the first 4 bits are zero. > >> --> > >> ///Derek: I am OK with this change. Thanks > >> > >> 19) <!-- [rfced] Please review "of great potential applications". > >> Should this be updated to one of the following suggestions? > >> > >> Original: > >> Mesh networking in PLC is of great potential applications and has > >> been studied for several years. > >> > >> Perhaps: > >> a) > >> Mesh networking in PLC has many potential applications and has > >> been studied for several years. > >> > >> b) > >> Mesh networking in PLC has great potential for many applications > >> and has been studied for several years. > >> --> > >> ///Derek: option (a) is preferred, thanks > >> > >> 20) <!-- [rfced] Would it be helpful to include the names of the > >> protocols here rather than just the citations? > >> > >> Original: > >> Methods include protocols such as [RFC7925] (exchanging pre- > >> installed certificates over DTLS), [I-D.ietf-6tisch-minimal-security] > >> (which uses pre-shared keys), and > >> [I-D.ietf-6tisch-dtsecurity-zerotouch-join] (a IoT version of BRSKI, > >> which uses IDevID and MASA service to facilitate authentication). > >> > >> Perhaps: > >> Methods include protocols such as the TLS/DTLS Profile [RFC7925] > >> (exchanging pre-installed certificates over DTLS), the Constrained > >> Join Protocol (CoJP) [RFC9031] (which > >> uses pre-shared keys), and Zero-Touch Secure Join [ZEROTOUCH] (an IoT version of the > >> Bootstrapping Remote Secure Key Infrastructure (BRSKI), which uses an > >> Initial Device Identifier (IDevID) and a Manufacturer Authorized > >> Signing Authority (MASA) service to facilitate authentication). > >> --> > >> ///Derek: I am OK with this change. Thanks > >> > >> 21) <!-- [rfced] Should “interface identifiers (IID)” here read either > >> “IIDs” or > >> “IPv6 Interface Identifiers (IIDs)”? > >> > >> Original: > >> [RFC8065] discusses the privacy > >> threats when interface identifiers (IID) are generated without > >> sufficient entropy, including correlation of activities over time, > >> location tracking, device-specific vulnerability exploitation, and > >> address scanning. > >> --> > >> ///Derek: IID refers to interface identifier > >> > >> 22) <!-- [rfced] FYI - We updated the URLs for the two references > >> below because the original URLs returned 404 Errors (Page not found). > >> > >> Original: > >> [IEEE_1901.2] > >> IEEE-SA Standards Board, "IEEE Standard for Low-Frequency > >> (less than 500 kHz) Narrowband Power Line Communications > >> for Smart Grid Applications", IEEE 1901.2, October 2013, > >> <https://standards.ieee.org/findstds/ > >> standard/1901.2-2013.html>. > >> ... > >> [IEEE_1901.2a] > >> IEEE-SA Standards Board, "IEEE Standard for Low-Frequency > >> (less than 500 kHz) Narrowband Power Line Communications > >> for Smart Grid Applications - Amendment 1", IEEE 1901.2a, > >> September 2015, <https://standards.ieee.org/findstds/ > >> standard/1901.2a-2015.html>. > >> > >> Current: > >> [IEEE_1901.2] > >> IEEE, "IEEE Standard for Low-Frequency > >> (less than 500 kHz) Narrowband Power Line Communications > >> for Smart Grid Applications", > >> DOI 10.1109/IEEESTD.2013.6679210, > >> IEEE Std. 1901.2, December 2013, > >> <https://ieeexplore.ieee.org/document/6679210>. > >> ... > >> [IEEE_1901.2a] > >> IEEE, "IEEE Standard for Low-Frequency > >> (less than 500 kHz) Narrowband Power Line Communications > >> for Smart Grid Applications - Amendment 1", > >> DOI 10.1109/IEEESTD.2015.7286946, IEEE Std. 1901.2a, > >> October 2015, <https://ieeexplore.ieee.org/document/7286946>. > >> --> > >> ///Derek: I am OK with this change. Thanks > >> > >> 23) <!-- [rfced] The URL provided in this reference redirects to a > >> document titled "Guidelines for Use of Extended Unique Identifier > >> (EUI), Organizationally Unique Identifier (OUI), and Company ID (CID)” > >> with a date of August 2017. > >> > >> May we update the title, date, and URL of this reference entry accordingly? > >> > >> Original: > >> [EUI-64] IEEE-SA Standards Board, "Guidelines for 64-bit Global > >> Identifier (EUI-64) Registration Authority", IEEE EUI-64, > >> March 1997, <https://standards.ieee.org/content/dam/ieee- > >> standards/standards/web/documents/tutorials/eui.pdf>. > >> Suggested: > >> [EUI-64] IEEE, "Guidelines for Use of Extended > >> Unique Idenfier (EUI), Organizationally Unique Identifier (OUI), > >> and Company ID (CID)", August 2017, > >> <https://standards.ieee.org/wp-content/uploads/import/documents/ > >> tutorials/eui.pdf>. > >> --> > >> ///Derek: I am OK with this change. Thanks > >> > >> 24) <!-- [rfced] Terminology > >> > >> a) The following definitions in Section 2 include "IPv6". Is "IPv6" > >> needed here? We ask because it's not part of the expansion. > >> > >> IID: IPv6 Interface Identifier > >> RPL: IPv6 Routing Protocol for Low-Power and Lossy Networks > >> > >> ///Derek: thanks for pointing out. "IPv6" is not needed here > >> > >> b) Please review instances of "Interface ID”. Should any of these read “IID” > >> or “IPv6 Interface Identifier”? > >> ///Derek: The abbreviation of IID has been used in other 6lo RFCs (e.g. RFC8065, RFC8015, RFC9159). I recommend keeping the abbreviation "IID". > >> > >> c) How should the acronym MAC be expanded in this document? We believe > >> that "Media Access Control" may be correct, but the possibilities > >> include the > >> following: > >> > >> Media Access Control (MAC) > >> Medium Access Control (MAC) > >> Message Authentication Code (MAC) > >> Mandatory Access Control (MAC) > >> > >> ///Derek: I agree acronym "Media Access Control (MAC)" should be > >> expanded. Thanks > >> > >> d) We see both "PLC Device" and "PLC device" used in the document. > >> Should these be uniform? If so, please let us know which form is preferred. > >> > >> ///Derek: "PLC device" is preferred > >> > >> e) We note inconsistencies in the terms listed below. We chose the > >> form on the right. 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