[auth48] Re: Document intake questions about draft-ietf-teas-ietf-network-slice-nbi-yang

["Wubo (lana)" <[e-mail]>]

Dear RPC team,

Thank you for adding our draft to the RFC Editor queue. 
On behalf of the authors, please find our response inline to the questions.
We have reviewed the current version (–25) and confirm some references need updates to RFC publication and some minor nits (e.g. stale copyright ) need to be fixed. Should we update now or later in the further stage?

Thanks,
Bo (On behalf of the authors)

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Subject: Document intake questions about draft-ietf-teas-ietf-network-slice-nbi-yang

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1) As there may have been multiple updates made to the document during Last Call, please review the current version of the document: 

* Is the text in the Abstract still accurate?
* Are the Authors' Addresses, Contributors, and Acknowledgments sections current?
[Bo Wu] The Abstract remains correct and consistent with the document body. The draft defines the ietf-network-slice-service YANG module, which is a customer-service model for the RFC 9543 Network Slice Service interface, as intended.
And I confirmed Authors' Addresses, Contributors, and Acknowledgments sections current and complete.


2) Please share any style information that could help us with editing your 
document. For example:

* Is your document's format or its terminology based on another document, 
WG style guide, etc.? If so, please provide a pointer to that information 
(e.g., "This document's terminology should match DNS terminology in 
RFC 9499." or "This document uses the style info at 
<https://httpwg.org/admin/editors/style-guide>.").
* Is there a general pattern of capitalization or formatting of terms that 
editors can follow (e.g., "Field names should have initial capitalization." 
or  "Parameter names should be in double quotes." or "<tt/> should be used 
for token names." etc.)?
[Bo Wu] This document's terminology should match Network Slice terminology in 
RFC 9543. Specifically, terms such as Network Slice Service, Service Demarcation Point (SDP), Connectivity Construct (CC), Service Level Objective (SLO), and Service Level Expectation (SLE) are defined in Section 3.2 and Section 5.1 of RFC 9543. This document uses "Network Slice Service" (without the "IETF" prefix) for brevity, as noted in Section 1.

3) Please carefully review the entries and their URLs in the
References section with the following in mind. Note that we will 
update as follows unless we hear otherwise at this time:

* References to obsoleted RFCs will be updated to point to the current 
RFC on the topic in accordance with Section 4.8.6 of RFC 7322 
(RFC Style Guide).

* References to I-Ds that have been replaced by another I-D will be 
updated to point to the replacement I-D.
[Bo Wu] RFC 6991 is obsolete and has been replaced by: RFCRFC9911. We will update.
* References to documents from other organizations that have been 
superseded will be updated to their superseding version.

Note: To check for outdated RFC and I-D references, you can use 
idnits <https://author-tools.ietf.org/idnits>. You can also help the
IETF Tools Team by testing idnits3 <https://author-tools.ietf.org/idnits3/>
with your document and reporting any issues to them.
[Bo Wu] We have carefully reviewed the References section and confirm the following:
The draft reference draft-ietf-opsawg-teas-attachment-circuit (version 20) is stale. It was replaced by rfc9834 (version rfc9834).
The draft reference draft-ietf-opsawg-teas-common-ac (version 15) is stale. It was replaced by rfc9833 (version rfc9833).
The draft reference draft-ietf-netmod-rfc8407bis (version 24) is stale. It was replaced by draft-ietf-netmod-rfc8407bis (version 28) and rfc9907 (version rfc9907).
The copyright year in the IETF Trust and authors Copyright Line does not match the current year
The YANG module contains a stale license declaration.
Domain "foo.com" is not an allowed reserved domain. Use ".example.(com|org|net)" instead.
BCP14->BCP 14

4) Is there any text that requires special handling? For example:
* Are there any sections that were contentious when the document was drafted?
[Bo Wu] There are no contentious sections remaining. The document has completed WG Last Call, multiple directorate reviews (rtgdir, opsdir, secdir, tsvdir, genart), and IESG review without outstanding objections. All previous issues were resolved during the review process.
* Are any sections that need to be removed before publication marked as such 
(e.g., Implementation Status sections (per RFC 7942)).
[Bo Wu] Section 1 (Introduction) contains an "Editorial Note: (To be removed by RFC Editor)" that explicitly lists the placeholder substitutions (AAAA → RFC number, BBBB → RFC number, etc.) and the YANG module revision date update. This section must be removed before publication.
There is no Implementation Status section in this document. Per RFC 7942, this is not required.

* Are there any instances of repeated text/sections that should be edited 
the same way?
[Bo Wu] Except the Security Consideration, YANG module header, Placeholder patterns, we confirm that no other special handling is required.

5) This document contains sourcecode: 

* Does the sourcecode validate?
[Bo Wu] Yes, the YANG module validates successfully.
The document contains one primary YANG module: [e-mail]. 
This module has been validated using standard YANG validation tools (e.g., pyang, yanglint) during WG Last Call and directorate reviews and no validation errors are present in the final version.

* Some sourcecode types (e.g., YANG) require certain references and/or text 
in the Security Considerations section. Is this information correct?
[Bo Wu] The module uses placeholder values (AAAA, BBBB, CCCC, DDDD) for RFC numbers of documents that are part of the same cluster or completed publication. 
These are addressed in the Editorial Note. Can we resolve this now or later during AUTH48? 
 AAAA --> the assigned RFC value for this draft both in this draft
      and in the YANG models under the revision statement
 BBBB --> the assigned RFC value for
      [I-D.ietf-opsawg-teas-common-ac] -> Published as RFC 9833
 CCCC --> the assigned RFC value for
      [I-D.ietf-opsawg-teas-attachment-circuit] -> Published as RFC 9834
 DDDD --> the assigned RFC value for [I-D.ietf-teas-rfc8776-update]

For YANG-specific Security Considerations references, we confirmed correct and complete.
But we need to update draft-ietf-netmod-rfc8407bis to published RFC 9907.

* Is the sourcecode type indicated in the XML? (See information about 
types: https://www.rfc-editor.org/rpc/wiki/doku.php?id=sourcecode-types.)
[Bo Wu] Yes. The YANG module is properly enclosed in <CODE BEGINS> and <CODE ENDS>.


6) This document is part of Cluster 517:
https://queue.rfc-editor.org/clusters/517/ 

* To help the reader understand the content of the cluster, is there a 
document in the cluster that should be read first? Next? If so, please provide 
the order and we will provide RFC numbers for the documents accordingly. 
If order is not important, please let us know. 

[Bo Wu] We recommend the following sequence for readers to understand the cluster:
First: draft-ietf-opsawg-teas-common-ac (A Common YANG Data Model for Attachment Circuits) - RFC 9833
This provides the foundational common AC types and groupings used by all other documents in the cluster.
Second: draft-ietf-opsawg-teas-attachment-circuit (YANG Data Models for Bearers and 'Attachment Circuits'-as-a-Service) - RFC 9834
This defines the AC service model, which is referenced by the Network Slice Service model for SDP attachment circuit bindings.
Third: draft-ietf-teas-rfc8776-update (Common YANG Data Types for Traffic Engineering)
This provides updated TE common types used by this document (e.g., te-types:te-path-disjointness for path diversity constraints).
Fourth: draft-ietf-teas-ietf-network-slice-nbi-yang (this document)
This document builds upon the models above and defines the Network Slice Service YANG model.


* Is there any text that has been repeated within the cluster document that 
should be edited in the same way (for instance, parallel introductory text or 
Security Considerations)?
[Bo Wu] Yes, there are parallel structures that should be edited consistently:
Security Considerations boilerplate: RFC 9907 (Guidelines for Authors and Reviewers of Documents Containing YANG Data Models)
YANG module header/footer: All modules in the cluster contain similar copyright notices, revision statements, and RFC Editor notes as guided also by RFC 9907.
Editorial Notes: These should be removed consistently at publication time.

* For more information about clusters, see: 
https://authors.ietf.org/en/rfc-publication-process#clusters
* For a list of all current clusters, see: 
https://queue.rfc-editor.org/clusters/


7) Is there anything else that the RPC should be aware of while editing this 
document?
[Bo Wu] 
a)This document uses four placeholder patterns that must be replaced consistently:
AAAA → RFC number assigned to this document
BBBB → RFC number for draft-ietf-opsawg-teas-common-ac -> published as RFC 9833
CCCC → RFC number for draft-ietf-opsawg-teas-attachment-circuit -> published as RFC 9834
DDDD → RFC number for draft-ietf-teas-rfc8776-update
The YANG module's revision statement date (2025-05-09) and the reference text in the module description must also be updated to the final publication date
b)And also I-D.ietf-netmod-rfc8407bis we referenced is published as RFC9907.
YANG module filename:
c)The <CODE BEGINS> tag includes the revision date in the filename ([e-mail]) If the publication date differs significantly, the filename in the code tag should be updated to match the final revision date in the module.
d) JSON examples:Appendix B contains multiple JSON examples that use RFC 8792 line wrapping (indicated by \ line continuation). These are properly formatted and should render correctly in the final RFC