Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9428 <draft-ietf-6lo-nfc-22> for your review
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Subject: Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9428 <draft-ietf-6lo-nfc-22> for your review
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Hi authors, This is a friendly reminder that we await answers to the questions below and your review of the document before continuing with the publication process. Thank you, RFC Editor/mc > On Jun 12, 2023, at 10:27 PM, rfc-editor@rfc-editor.org wrote: > > Authors, > > While reviewing this document during AUTH48, please resolve (as necessary) > the following questions, which are also in the XML file. > > 1) <!-- [rfced] Please insert any keywords (beyond those that appear in the > title) for use on https://www.rfc-editor.org/search. --> > > > 2) <!-- [rfced] We are having trouble parsing this sentence. Please > consider whether the suggested update clarifies the text. > > Original: > In order to benefit from Internet connectivity, it is desirable for > NFC-enabled devices to support IPv6, considering its large address > space, along with tools for unattended operation, among other > advantages. > > Perhaps: > In order to benefit from Internet connectivity, it is desirable for > NFC-enabled devices to support IPv6 because of its large address space > and the availability of tools for unattended operation, along with other > advantages. > --> > > > 3) <!-- [rfced] May we rephrase the following text to form a complete > sentence? Please consider whether the suggested update conveys the > intended meaning. > > Original: > An IPv6 datagram is transmitted by the Logical Link Control Protocol > (LLCP) with guaranteed delivery, two-way transmission of information > between the peer devices. > > Perhaps: > An IPv6 datagram is transmitted by the LLCP with guaranteed delivery > and two-way transmission of information between the peer devices. --> > > > 4) <!-- [rfced] We have a few questions regarding expansions. > > a) Is "RF" the expansion of "radio frequency" in this context? > > Original: > The MAC Mapping integrates an existing RF protocol into the LLCP > architecture. > > Perhaps: > The MAC Mapping integrates an existing radio frequency (RF) protocol > into the LLCP architecture. > > b) Please confirm that I PDU expands to Information Field in an LLCP > Protocol Data Unit. > > Original (from Section 3.2): > In order to send an IPv6 packet over NFC, the packet MUST be passed > down to the LLCP layer of NFC and carried by an Information Field in > an LLCP Protocol Data Unit (I PDU). > > If this is correct, should "information field" be removed from this > sentence in section 3.4 because it's redundant with "I"? > > Original: > The information field of an I PDU contains a single service data > unit. > > Perhaps: > The I PDU contains a single service data > unit. > > c) FYI - We have added expansions for abbreviations upon first use > per Section 3.6 of RFC 7322 ("RFC Style Guide"). Please review each > expansion in the document carefully to ensure correctness. --> > > > 5) <!-- [rfced] Should "value" be plural? Is there a value for the Source > Service Access Point (SSAP) and another for the Destination Service Access > Point (DSAP)? > > Original: > The LLCP to IPv6 protocol > binding MUST transfer the Source Service Access Point (SSAP) and > Destination Service Access Point (DSAP) value to the IPv6 over NFC > adaptation layer. > --> > > > 6) <!-- [rfced] May we rephrase the following sentence to limit the use of > "over"? > > Original: > The latter can still be supported over IPv6 over NFC, albeit without > the performance optimization of header compression. > > Perhaps: > The latter can still be supported by IPv6 over NFC, albeit without > the performance optimization of header compression. --> > > > 7) <!-- [rfced] We have rephrased the following text to make the > introduction of the abbreviation "RID" more uniform. Please let us know any objections. > > Original: > Following the guidance of [RFC7136], interface identifiers of all > unicast addresses for NFC-enabled devices are 64 bits long and > constructed by using the generation algorithm of random (but stable) > identifier (RID) [RFC7217]. > > Current: > Following the guidance of [RFC7136], IIDs of all > unicast addresses for NFC-enabled devices are 64 bits long and > constructed by using the generation algorithm of random > identifiers (RIDs) that are stable [RFC7217]. --> > > > 8) <!-- [rfced] Please consider whether the following suggested update is > correct. > > Original: > NFC supports mesh topologies, but most of all > applications would use a simple multi-hop network topology or > directly connected peer-to-peer network because NFC RF range is very > short. > > Suggested: > NFC supports mesh topologies, but most > applications would use a simple multi-hop network topology or > be directly connected a peer-to-peer network because the NFC RF > range is very short. > --> > > > 9) <!-- [rfced] Section 4.4: Is this a sequence of events (that is, they > happen in order) or do both occur when an NFC 6LN is directly connected to > a 6LBR? > > Original: > * When an NFC 6LoWPAN Node (6LN) is directly connected to an 6LBR, > the 6LN MUST register its address with the 6LBR by sending > Neighbor Solicitation (NS) with the Extended Address Registration > Option (EARO) [RFC8505], and Neighbor Advertisement (NA) is > started. > > Current: > When an NFC 6LN is directly connected to a 6LBR, > the 6LN MUST register its address with the 6LBR by sending > Neighbor Solicitation (NS) with the Extended Address Registration > Option (EARO) [RFC8505]; then Neighbor Advertisement (NA) is > started. --> > > > 10) <!-- [rfced] Should "LN" read as "6LN"? There is no usage of "LN" on > its own throughout the document. Or does this refer to LoWPAN? > > Original: > When two or more NFC LNs are connected to the 6LBR, two cases of > topologies can be formed...In the multi-hop topology, LNs which have two or > more links with neighbor nodes may act as routers. In star topology, any of > LNs can be a router. > > Perhaps: > When two or more NFC 6LNs are connected to the 6LBR, two cases of > topologies can be formed... In the multi-hop topology, 6LNs which have two or > more links with neighbor nodes may act as routers. In star topology, any of > 6LNs can be a router. --> > > > 11) <!-- [rfced] The IANA entry for LOWPAN_IPHC includes references to both > [RFC6282] and [RFC8025]. Should these both be listed in Table 1? > > See https://www.iana.org/assignments/_6lowpan-parameters > > Original (Figure 6) - note that lines have been removed so the text could > be included in the XML as comments:: > > | Pattern | Header Type | Reference | > | 01 1xxxxx | LOWPAN_IPHC | [RFC6282] | > > --> > > > 12) <!-- [rfced] We have updated the text in section 7. However, it is > unclear to us whether the bulleted text is quoted from [LLCP-1.4] because > we do not have access to the document. Please review and let us know if > reversions are needed to match what appears in the referenced > specification. > > Original: > Per the NFC Logical Link Control Protocol [LLCP-1.4]: > > * LLCP of NFC provides protection of user data to ensure > confidentiality of communications. The confidentiality mechanism > involves the encryption of user service data with a secret key > that has been established during link activation. > > * LLCP of NFC has two modes (i.e., ad-hoc mode and authenticated > mode) for secure data transfer. Ad-hoc secure data transfer can > be established between two communication parties without any prior > knowledge of the communication partner. Ad-hoc secure data > transfer can be vulnerable to Man-In-The-Middle (MITM) attacks. > Authenticated secure data transfer provides protection against > Man-In-The-Middle (MITM) attacks. In the initial bonding step, > the two communicating parties store a shared secret along with a > Bonding Identifier. > > * For all subsequent interactions, the communicating parties re-use > the shared secret and compute only the unique encryption key for > that session. Secure data transfer is based on the cryptographic > algorithms defined in the NFC Authentication Protocol [NAP-1.0]. > --> > > > 13) <!-- [rfced] We have updated the following references to more closely > align with the information provided at the URL. In particular, the dates > were updated to reflect the noted adoption dates. Please let us know if > any corrections are needed. > > Original: > [LLCP-1.4] NFC Forum, "NFC Logical Link Control Protocol, Version > 1.4", NFC Forum Technical Specification , January 2021, > <https://nfc-forum.org/build/specifications>. > > Current: > [LLCP-1.4] NFC Forum, "Logical Link Control Protocol Technical > Specification", Version 1.4, December 2022, > <https://nfc-forum.org/build/specifications>. > > > Original: > [NAP-1.0] NFC Forum, "NFC Authentication Protocol Candidate > Technical Specification, Version 1.0", NFC Forum Technical > Specification , December 2020, > <https://nfc-forum.org/build/specifications>. > > Current: > [NAP-1.0] NFC Forum, "NFC Authentication Protocol Technical > Specification", Verison 1.0, December 2022, > <https://nfc-forum.org/build/specifications>. > --> > > > 14) <!-- [rfced] We have a few questions regarding terminology in this > document. > > a) Throughout the text, the terms "IPv6 over NFC" and "IPv6-over-NFC" > appear to be used inconsistently. We have used the hyphenated form when the > "IPv6-over-NFC" modifies the noun that follows. Please review and let us > know if any updates are needed. > > b) We note that "IPv6-LLCP Binding" is used throughout the document. May we > replace "LLCP to IPv6 protocol binding" with "IPv6-LLCP Binding" for > consistency? > > Original: > The LLCP to IPv6 protocol > binding MUST transfer the Source Service Access Point (SSAP) and > Destination Service Access Point (DSAP) value to the IPv6 over NFC > adaptation layer. > > Perhaps: > IPv6-LLCP Binding MUST transfer the Source Service Access Point (SSAP) > and Destination Service Access Point (DSAP) value to the IPv6-over-NFC > adaptation layer. > > c) We note that "NFC Physical Layer" and "NFC Logical Link Layer" are > capitalized consistently throughout the document. Should "adaptation > layer" also be capitalized, for example, IPv6-over-NFC adaptation layer and > NFC adaptation layer? Is "adaptation layer" lowercased when it's part a > nickname for "Adaptation Layer for IPv6 over NFC"? > > --> > > > 15) <!-- [rfced] Please review the "Inclusive Language" portion of the > online Style Guide > <https://www.rfc-editor.org/styleguide/part2/#inclusive_language> and let > us know if any changes are needed. For example, please consider whether > "man-in-the-middle" should be updated. --> > > > Thank you. > > RFC Editor > > > > On Jun 12, 2023, at 8:23 PM, rfc-editor@rfc-editor.org wrote: > > *****IMPORTANT***** > > Updated 2023/06/12 > > RFC Author(s): > -------------- > > Instructions for Completing AUTH48 > > Your document has now entered AUTH48. 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