Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9284 <draft-ietf-dots-multihoming-13> for your review
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Subject: Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9284 <draft-ietf-dots-multihoming-13> for your review
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Hi, Please see inline. On Tue, 2 Aug 2022 at 05:19, <rfc-editor@rfc-editor.org> wrote: > Authors, > > While reviewing this document during AUTH48, please resolve (as necessary) > the following questions, which are also in the XML file. > > 1) <!-- [rfced] FYI, the title of the document has been updated as > follows. We > have removed the expansion of "DDoS" as it is included inside another > abbreviation, and it is considered well known on the abbreviations list > (https://www.rfc-editor.org/materials/abbrev.expansion.txt). > Please let us know if you prefer otherwise. > > Original: > Multi-homing Deployment Considerations for Distributed-Denial-of-Service > Open Threat Signaling (DOTS) > > Current: > Multihoming Deployment Considerations for DDoS Open Threat Signaling (DOTS) > --> > Okay. > > > 2) <!-- [rfced] Please insert any keywords (beyond those that appear in > the title) for use on https://www.rfc-editor.org/search. --> > > > 3) <!--[rfced] Will it be clear to readers what is multihomed in this > sentence? > > Original: > The goal is to provide some guidance for DOTS clients and > client-domain DOTS gateways when multihomed. > Yes, the term "multihomed" is used in several RFCs. > --> > > > 4) <!--[rfced] Please clarify "server(s) addresses" here; > the "(s)" seems unnecessary. Does either suggestion convey the > intended meaning? > > Original: > The DOTS client establishes one or more DOTS sessions by > connecting to the provided DOTS server(s) addresses (e.g., by using > [RFC8973]). > > Option A: > The DOTS client establishes one or more DOTS sessions by > connecting to the provided DOTS server addresses (e.g., by using > [RFC8973]). > > Option B: > The DOTS client establishes one or more DOTS sessions by > connecting to the provided addresses for the DOTS server or > servers (e.g., by using [RFC8973]). > --> > Option B looks good. > > > 5) <!--[rfced] Should Section 4.1's title also use a colon? > > Current: > Multihomed Residential Single CPE > > Perhaps: > Multihomed Residential: Single CPE > Yes. > > For comparison: > 4.2. Multihomed Enterprise: Single CPE, Multiple Upstream ISPs > --> > > > 6) <!--[rfced] In the following text, please clarify whether the "/" > in "IP addresses/prefixes" means "and" or "or", and please review > whether "the" or "a" may be used for "default gateway address" and > "DOTS server's name". > > Original: > * Each of these provisioning domains assigns IP addresses/prefixes > to the CPE and provides additional configuration information such > as a list of DNS servers, DNS suffixes associated with the > network, default gateway address, and DOTS server's name > [RFC8973]. > > Perhaps: > * Each of these provisioning domains assigns IP addresses or prefixes > to the CPE and provides additional configuration information such > as a list of DNS servers, DNS suffixes associated with the > network, the default gateway address, and the DOTS server's name > [RFC8973]. Proposed text looks good. > > > Throughout this document, please review the usage of "addresses/prefixes" > (16 instances) as well as similar "address/prefix" (2 instances) and > "prefixes/addresses" (1 instance) and let us know if any updates are > needed. > Perhaps "and", "or", or "and/or" is intended. > You can use "or". > --> > > > 7) <!--[rfced] Please clarify this sentence. It seems there's an > extraneous "from". > The "either ... or" phrase should contain two parallel items, e.g., > A) either "the DNS servers learned" or "the DNS servers associated" > B) either "learned from" or "associated with" > Please see below. > > Original: > The DOTS client MUST resolve the DOTS server's name provided by each > provisioning domain using either the DNS servers learned from the > respective provisioning domain or from the DNS servers associated > with the interface(s) for which a DOTS server was explicitly > configured (Section 4). > > Option A (removing "from"): > The DOTS client MUST resolve the DOTS server's name provided by each > provisioning domain using either the DNS servers learned from the > respective provisioning domain or the DNS servers associated > with the interface(s) for which a DOTS server was explicitly > configured (Section 4). > > Option B (avoiding repetition of "DNS servers"): > The DOTS client MUST resolve the DOTS server's name provided by each > provisioning domain using the DNS servers either learned from the > respective provisioning domain or associated > with the interface(s) for which a DOTS server was explicitly > configured (Section 4). Option B looks good. > > --> > > > 8) <!--[rfced] Regarding this text: > - Please clarify what "it" refers to in "it MUST check". > Does it refer to a client-domain DOTS gateway? > Yes. > - In the first sentence, will "the latter" be clear to the reader? > Does it refer to DOTS clients? > Yes. > > Original: > When PA addresses/prefixes are used, but no filter rules are provided > to DOTS clients, the latter MUST contact all client-domain DOTS > gateways simultaneously to send a DOTS message. Upon receipt of a > request by a client-domain DOTS gateway, it MUST check whether the > request is to be forwarded upstream (if the target IP prefix is > managed by the upstream server) or rejected. > > Perhaps: > When PA addresses/prefixes are used, but no filter rules are provided > to DOTS clients, the clients MUST contact all client-domain DOTS > You may want to replace "the clients" with "the DOTS clients" or "it". > gateways simultaneously to send a DOTS message. Upon receipt of this > request, a client-domain DOTS gateway MUST check whether the > request is to be forwarded upstream (if the target IP prefix is > managed by the upstream server) or rejected. > --> > Good catch, the proposed text looks good. > > > 9) <!--[rfced] FYI, RFC 8811, Section 4 is IANA Considerations, so we have > updated this to point to Section 5 (Security Considerations) instead. > > Original: > DOTS-related security considerations are discussed in Section 4 of > [RFC8811]. > > Current: > DOTS-related security considerations are discussed in Section 5 of > [RFC8811]. > --> > Thanks. > > > 10) <!--[rfced] Regarding [TS.24008], the original noted "Release 16". > Do you want to reference a specific version? No, I don't see the need to reference a specific version. Please change my affiliation to Nokia and remove the office address. Cheers, -Tiru > If so, did you intend > 16.3.0 in December 2019 (as shown under "Versions" at the provided > URL) or a different version? > > Original: > [TS.24008] 3GPP, "Mobile radio interface Layer 3 specification; Core > > network protocols; Stage 3 (Release 16)", December 2019, > <http://www.3gpp.org/DynaReport/24008.htm>. > > Current: > [TS.24008] 3GPP, "Mobile radio interface Layer 3 specification; Core > network protocols; Stage 3", 3GPP TS 24.008 16.3.0, > December 2019, > <https://www.3gpp.org/DynaReport/24008.htm>. > --> > > > Thank you. > > RFC Editor/st/ar > > > On Aug 1, 2022, rfc-editor@rfc-editor.org wrote: > > *****IMPORTANT***** > > Updated 2022/08/01 > > RFC Author(s): > -------------- > > Instructions for Completing AUTH48 > > Your document has now entered AUTH48. 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