Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9284 <draft-ietf-dots-multihoming-13> for your review
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Authors, While reviewing this document during AUTH48, please resolve (as necessary) the following questions, which are also in the XML file. 1) <!-- [rfced] FYI, the title of the document has been updated as follows. We have removed the expansion of "DDoS" as it is included inside another abbreviation, and it is considered well known on the abbreviations list (https://www.rfc-editor.org/materials/abbrev.expansion.txt). Please let us know if you prefer otherwise. Original: Multi-homing Deployment Considerations for Distributed-Denial-of-Service Open Threat Signaling (DOTS) Current: Multihoming Deployment Considerations for DDoS Open Threat Signaling (DOTS) --> 2) <!-- [rfced] Please insert any keywords (beyond those that appear in the title) for use on https://www.rfc-editor.org/search. --> 3) <!--[rfced] Will it be clear to readers what is multihomed in this sentence? Original: The goal is to provide some guidance for DOTS clients and client-domain DOTS gateways when multihomed. --> 4) <!--[rfced] Please clarify "server(s) addresses" here; the "(s)" seems unnecessary. Does either suggestion convey the intended meaning? Original: The DOTS client establishes one or more DOTS sessions by connecting to the provided DOTS server(s) addresses (e.g., by using [RFC8973]). Option A: The DOTS client establishes one or more DOTS sessions by connecting to the provided DOTS server addresses (e.g., by using [RFC8973]). Option B: The DOTS client establishes one or more DOTS sessions by connecting to the provided addresses for the DOTS server or servers (e.g., by using [RFC8973]). --> 5) <!--[rfced] Should Section 4.1's title also use a colon? Current: Multihomed Residential Single CPE Perhaps: Multihomed Residential: Single CPE For comparison: 4.2. Multihomed Enterprise: Single CPE, Multiple Upstream ISPs --> 6) <!--[rfced] In the following text, please clarify whether the "/" in "IP addresses/prefixes" means "and" or "or", and please review whether "the" or "a" may be used for "default gateway address" and "DOTS server's name". Original: * Each of these provisioning domains assigns IP addresses/prefixes to the CPE and provides additional configuration information such as a list of DNS servers, DNS suffixes associated with the network, default gateway address, and DOTS server's name [RFC8973]. Perhaps: * Each of these provisioning domains assigns IP addresses or prefixes to the CPE and provides additional configuration information such as a list of DNS servers, DNS suffixes associated with the network, the default gateway address, and the DOTS server's name [RFC8973]. Throughout this document, please review the usage of "addresses/prefixes" (16 instances) as well as similar "address/prefix" (2 instances) and "prefixes/addresses" (1 instance) and let us know if any updates are needed. Perhaps "and", "or", or "and/or" is intended. --> 7) <!--[rfced] Please clarify this sentence. It seems there's an extraneous "from". The "either ... or" phrase should contain two parallel items, e.g., A) either "the DNS servers learned" or "the DNS servers associated" B) either "learned from" or "associated with" Please see below. Original: The DOTS client MUST resolve the DOTS server's name provided by each provisioning domain using either the DNS servers learned from the respective provisioning domain or from the DNS servers associated with the interface(s) for which a DOTS server was explicitly configured (Section 4). Option A (removing "from"): The DOTS client MUST resolve the DOTS server's name provided by each provisioning domain using either the DNS servers learned from the respective provisioning domain or the DNS servers associated with the interface(s) for which a DOTS server was explicitly configured (Section 4). Option B (avoiding repetition of "DNS servers"): The DOTS client MUST resolve the DOTS server's name provided by each provisioning domain using the DNS servers either learned from the respective provisioning domain or associated with the interface(s) for which a DOTS server was explicitly configured (Section 4). --> 8) <!--[rfced] Regarding this text: - Please clarify what "it" refers to in "it MUST check". Does it refer to a client-domain DOTS gateway? - In the first sentence, will "the latter" be clear to the reader? Does it refer to DOTS clients? Original: When PA addresses/prefixes are used, but no filter rules are provided to DOTS clients, the latter MUST contact all client-domain DOTS gateways simultaneously to send a DOTS message. Upon receipt of a request by a client-domain DOTS gateway, it MUST check whether the request is to be forwarded upstream (if the target IP prefix is managed by the upstream server) or rejected. Perhaps: When PA addresses/prefixes are used, but no filter rules are provided to DOTS clients, the clients MUST contact all client-domain DOTS gateways simultaneously to send a DOTS message. Upon receipt of this request, a client-domain DOTS gateway MUST check whether the request is to be forwarded upstream (if the target IP prefix is managed by the upstream server) or rejected. --> 9) <!--[rfced] FYI, RFC 8811, Section 4 is IANA Considerations, so we have updated this to point to Section 5 (Security Considerations) instead. Original: DOTS-related security considerations are discussed in Section 4 of [RFC8811]. Current: DOTS-related security considerations are discussed in Section 5 of [RFC8811]. --> 10) <!--[rfced] Regarding [TS.24008], the original noted "Release 16". Do you want to reference a specific version? If so, did you intend 16.3.0 in December 2019 (as shown under "Versions" at the provided URL) or a different version? Original: [TS.24008] 3GPP, "Mobile radio interface Layer 3 specification; Core network protocols; Stage 3 (Release 16)", December 2019, <http://www.3gpp.org/DynaReport/24008.htm>. Current: [TS.24008] 3GPP, "Mobile radio interface Layer 3 specification; Core network protocols; Stage 3", 3GPP TS 24.008 16.3.0, December 2019, <https://www.3gpp.org/DynaReport/24008.htm>. --> Thank you. 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Thank you for your cooperation, RFC Editor -------------------------------------- RFC9284 (draft-ietf-dots-multihoming-13) Title : Multi-homing Deployment Considerations for Distributed-Denial-of-Service Open Threat Signaling (DOTS) Author(s) : M. Boucadair, T. Reddy.K, W. Pan WG Chair(s) : Valery Smyslov, Liang Xia Area Director(s) : Roman Danyliw, Paul Wouters
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