Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9273 <draft-irtf-nwcrg-nwc-ccn-reqs-09> for your review

[Cedric Westphal <[e-mail]>]

Hi,

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Subject: Re: AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9273 <draft-irtf-nwcrg-nwc-ccn-reqs-09> for your review

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CW: Is there anything actionable regarding this?

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CW: main keywords (ICN and network coding) are in the title. 

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CW: we don't anticipate to add new modifications in response to comments in the document, so the comments can be removed. 

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CW: yes, please change so that the reference are listed in the order that they appear. I'm not familiar with the tags. 

5) <!--[rfced] This reference is listed twice. The second one seems to be in error, so may it be removed? This would yield one update within the document as shown below.

Koetter03:
   [20]       Koetter, R. and M. Medard, "An Algebraic Approach to
              Network Coding", IEEE/ACM Trans. on Networking, vol. 11,
              no 5, Oct. 2003.

Koetter08:
   [38]       Koetter, R. and F. Kschischang, "An algebraic approach to
              network coding", IEEE Trans. Netw. vol.11, no.5, October
              2003.

In Section 1:

OLD: coherent NC and noncoherent NC [38] [39].
NEW: coherent NC and noncoherent NC [20] [39].
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CW: yes, good catch. Thanks for removing the duplicate.

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CW: we have tried to avoid non-inclusive language. Thanks!

Thank you.

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RFC9273 (draft-irtf-nwcrg-nwc-ccn-reqs-09)

Title            : Network Coding for Content-Centric Networking / Named Data Networking: Considerations and Challenges
Author(s)        : K. Matsuzono, H. Asaeda, C. Westphal