Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9327 <draft-ietf-ntp-mode-6-cmds-11> for your review
Brian Haberman <brian@innovationslab.net> Tue, 25 October 2022 21:45 UTC
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Subject: Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9327 <draft-ietf-ntp-mode-6-cmds-11> for your review
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Hi Megan, I approve. Thanks, Brian On 10/25/22 4:03 PM, Megan Ferguson wrote: > Hi Brian, > > Thank you for your response and guidance. We have updated our files as requested. Please review these changes carefully and let us know if further updates are necessary. > > The files have been posted here (please refresh): > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9327.txt > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9327.pdf > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9327.html > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9327.xml > > The relevant diff files have been posted here (please refresh): > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9327-diff.html (comprehensive diff) > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9327-rfcdiff.html (comprehensive rfcdiff) > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9327-auth48diff.html (last version to this one) > > The AUTH48 status page for this document is available here: > http://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9327 > > Thank you. > > RFC Editor/mf > > >> On Oct 22, 2022, at 3:26 PM, Brian Haberman <brian@innovationslab.net> wrote: >> >> I approve the publication of this draft... Please see inline responses. >> >> On 10/21/22 11:04 PM, rfc-editor@rfc-editor.org wrote: >>> Brian, >>> While reviewing this document during AUTH48, please resolve (as necessary) the following questions, which are also in the XML file. >>> 1) <!-- [rfced] Would updating the document title to include the abbreviation for Network Time Protocol Version 4 be helpful? >>> Original: >>> Control Messages Protocol for Use with Network Time Protocol Version 4 >>> Perhaps: >>> Control Messages Protocol for Use with Network Time Protocol Version >>> 4 (NTPv4) >>> --> >> >> NTPv4 does not get used at all in the body of the document, so I don't see a need to make this addition to the title. >> >>> 2) <!-- [rfced] Please insert any keywords (beyond those that appear in the >>> title) for use on https://www.rfc-editor.org/search. --> >> >> NTP, mode 6, mode 7 >> >>> 3) <!-- [rfced] We note that in-text citations were sometimes read as >>> part of the sentence and sometimes used as a silent reference. >>> As https://www.rfc-editor.org/styleguide/part2/ recommends these >>> be used consistently, we will update as seen in the example >>> below unless we hear objection. >>> Original: >>> RFC 1305 [RFC1305] described a set of control messages for use >>> within the Network Time Protocol (NTP) when a comprehensive network management >>> solution was not available. >>> Perhaps: >>> [RFC1305] described a set of control messages for use within the >>> Network Time Protocol (NTP) when a comprehensive network management solution >>> was not available. >>> --> >> >> No objection. >> >>> 4) <!-- [rfced] FYI - We've added a Terminology section and normative >>> reference entries to match the use of BCP 14 keywords throughout >>> the document. Please let us know of any objections. >>> --> >> >> No objection. >> >>> 5) <!--[rfced] We note that RFC 2460 has been obsoleted by RFC 8200. As >>> this document is "Historic", please let us know which course of >>> action is correct. Is the mention something that only exists in >>> RFC 2460? Or should the reader be pointed to the current >>> version? >>> a) Update mentions of RFC 2460 to instead point to RFC 8200. >>> b) Update the text to mention that RFC 2460 has been obsoleted by RFC 8200, such >>> as: >>> ..and 1280 octets for IPv6 (see [RFC2460], which has since been obsoleted by [RF >>> C8200]). >>> For either a) or b), we would add a corresponding reference entry for RFC 8200. >>> --> >> >> All references to RFC 2460 can be replaced by RFC 8200. >> >>> 6) <!-- [rfced] FYI: We've added titles to tables throughout the >>> document. Please let us know of any objections or changes that >>> need to be made. >>> --> >> >> No objection. >> >>> 7) <!-- [rfced] What is "one" referring to in this sentence? >>> Original: >>> As in the read status command, the association identifier is used to >>> identify which one, zero for the system clock and nonzero for a peer clock. >>> Perhaps: >>> As in the read status command, the association identifier is used to >>> identify the correct variable for each clock: zero for the system clock and nonzero for a peer clock. >>> --> >> >> I agree with the proposed re-write for clarity. >> >>> 8) <!--[rfced] Please review our update to use a list for the following text. >>> Original: >>> Internet addresses are represented as follows: IPv4 addresses are >>> written in the form [n.n.n.n], where n is in decimal notation and the >>> brackets are optional; IPv6 addresses are formulated based on the >>> guidelines defined in [RFC5952]. Timestamps, including reference, >>> originate, receive and transmit values, as well as the logical clock, >>> are represented in units of seconds and fractions, preferably in >>> hexadecimal notation. Delay, offset, dispersion and distance values >>> are represented in units of milliseconds and fractions, preferably in >>> decimal notation. All other values are represented as-is, preferably >>> in decimal notation. >>> Current: >>> Representations of note are as follows: >>> * IPv4 internet addresses are written in the form [n.n.n.n], where n >>> is in decimal notation and the brackets are optional >>> * IPv6 internet addresses are formulated based on the guidelines >>> defined in [RFC5952]. >>> * Timestamps (including reference, originate, receive, and transmit >>> values) and the logical clock are represented in units of seconds >>> and fractions, preferably in hexadecimal notation. >>> * Delay, offset, dispersion, and distance values are represented in >>> units of milliseconds and fractions, preferably in decimal >>> notation. >>> * All other values are represented as is, preferably in decimal >>> notation. >>> --> >> >> The bulleted list is fine. >> >>> 9) <!--[rfced] Please review the updates to the following text to ensure >>> we've retained your intended meaning. Perhaps further rephrasing >>> such as "...or is comprised of the seven characters" might be >>> easier to read? >>> Original: >>> If the command data is empty or the seven characters "ifstats", the >>> associated statistics, status and counters for each local address are >>> returned. If the command data is the characters "addr_restrictions" then the >>> set of IPv4 remote address restrictions followed by the set of IPv6 remote >>> address restrictions (access control lists) are returned. >>> Current: >>> If the command data is empty or is the seven characters "ifstats", the >>> associated statistics, status, and counters for each local address are >>> returned. If the command data is the characters "addr_restrictions", >>> then the set of IPv4 remote address restrictions followed by the set >>> of IPv6 remote address restrictions (access control lists) are >>> returned. >>> --> >> >> This update is fine. >> >>> 10) <!--[rfced] Please review our update to the list style in the Security Considerations section and let us know any objections.--> >> >> No objection. >> >>> 11) <!--[rfced] Would a clarification of this text be helpful to readers? >>> We see past draft versions with D. Mills and B. Haberman, but not >>> T. Plunkett. >>> Original: >>> Tim Plunkett created the original version of this document.--> >> >> The original acknowledgements section is correct. >> >>> 12) <!-- [rfced] We had the following questions regarding terminology that appeared throughout the document. >>> >>> a) Please review the way bit names and abbreviations are capped, >>> quoted, in parentheses, and the placement of the abbreviation (i.e., >>> should it be More Bit (M) or More (M) Bit)? >>> These are a few examples of inconsistencies/uses: >>> Response Bit (R) vs. response (R) bit vs. "R" bit vs R bit >>> E (error) bit vs. "E" bit >>> More Bit (M) vs. More Bit vs. more data (M) bit vs. more-data (M) bit >> >> The original text in the draft is correct. It is consistent with the original definitions described in RFC 1305. >> >>> b) Throughout the text, the following terminology appears to be used >>> inconsistently. Please review these occurrences and let us know if/how >>> they may be made consistent. >> >> The following clarifications (except for one) come directly from RFC 1305... >> >>> opcode vs. OpCode >> >> opcode >> >>> Association ID vs. association identifier >> >> Association ID >> >>> NTP mode 6 vs. NTP Mode 6 >> >> NTP mode 6 >> >>> NTP Mode 6 control messages vs. NTP mode 6 control messages vs. NTP Control Message vs. control messages (mode 6) >> >> NTP control messages... as this document talks about both mode 6 and mode 7 >> >>> System Status Word vs. system status word >> >> system status word >> >>> Read Clock Variables command vs. read clock variables command >> >> read clock variables command >> >>> Write Clock Variables command vs. write clock variables command >> >> write clock variables command >> >>> Remote Facility vs. remote facility >> >> Remote Facility >> >>> Request Code vs. request code >> >> request code >> >>> --> >>> 13) <!-- [rfced] Please review the "Inclusive Language" portion of the online Style Guide >>> <https://www.rfc-editor.org/styleguide/part2/#inclusive_language> >>> and let us know if any changes are needed. For example, please consider whether the following should be updated: sanity and whitespace. >> >> "sanity" can be changed to "logical" >> "whitespace" can be changed to "space characters" >> >>> In addition, please consider whether "traditional*" should be updated >>> for clarity. While the NIST website >>> <https://www.nist.gov/nist-research-library/nist-technical-series-publications-author-instructions#table1> >>> indicates that this term is potentially biased, it is also ambiguous. >>> "Tradition" is a subjective term, as it is not the same for everyone. >>> --> >> >> "Traditionally" can be dropped from the sentence. >> >> Regards, >> Brian >> >>> Thank you. >>> RFC Editor/mc/mf >>> *****IMPORTANT***** >>> Updated 2022/10/21 >>> RFC Author(s): >>> -------------- >>> Instructions for Completing AUTH48 >>> Your document has now entered AUTH48. 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