Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9327 <draft-ietf-ntp-mode-6-cmds-11> for your review
Brian Haberman <brian@innovationslab.net> Sat, 22 October 2022 19:26 UTC
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Subject: Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9327 <draft-ietf-ntp-mode-6-cmds-11> for your review
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I approve the publication of this draft... Please see inline responses. On 10/21/22 11:04 PM, rfc-editor@rfc-editor.org wrote: > Brian, > > While reviewing this document during AUTH48, please resolve (as necessary) the following questions, which are also in the XML file. > > 1) <!-- [rfced] Would updating the document title to include the abbreviation for Network Time Protocol Version 4 be helpful? > > Original: > Control Messages Protocol for Use with Network Time Protocol Version 4 > > Perhaps: > Control Messages Protocol for Use with Network Time Protocol Version > 4 (NTPv4) > --> > NTPv4 does not get used at all in the body of the document, so I don't see a need to make this addition to the title. > > 2) <!-- [rfced] Please insert any keywords (beyond those that appear in the > title) for use on https://www.rfc-editor.org/search. --> > NTP, mode 6, mode 7 > > 3) <!-- [rfced] We note that in-text citations were sometimes read as > part of the sentence and sometimes used as a silent reference. > As https://www.rfc-editor.org/styleguide/part2/ recommends these > be used consistently, we will update as seen in the example > below unless we hear objection. > > Original: > RFC 1305 [RFC1305] described a set of control messages for use > within the Network Time Protocol (NTP) when a comprehensive network management > solution was not available. > > Perhaps: > [RFC1305] described a set of control messages for use within the > Network Time Protocol (NTP) when a comprehensive network management solution > was not available. > --> > No objection. > > 4) <!-- [rfced] FYI - We've added a Terminology section and normative > reference entries to match the use of BCP 14 keywords throughout > the document. Please let us know of any objections. > --> > No objection. > > 5) <!--[rfced] We note that RFC 2460 has been obsoleted by RFC 8200. As > this document is "Historic", please let us know which course of > action is correct. Is the mention something that only exists in > RFC 2460? Or should the reader be pointed to the current > version? > > a) Update mentions of RFC 2460 to instead point to RFC 8200. > > b) Update the text to mention that RFC 2460 has been obsoleted by RFC 8200, such > as: > > ..and 1280 octets for IPv6 (see [RFC2460], which has since been obsoleted by [RF > C8200]). > > For either a) or b), we would add a corresponding reference entry for RFC 8200. > --> > All references to RFC 2460 can be replaced by RFC 8200. > > 6) <!-- [rfced] FYI: We've added titles to tables throughout the > document. Please let us know of any objections or changes that > need to be made. > --> > No objection. > > 7) <!-- [rfced] What is "one" referring to in this sentence? > > Original: > As in the read status command, the association identifier is used to > identify which one, zero for the system clock and nonzero for a peer clock. > > Perhaps: > As in the read status command, the association identifier is used to > identify the correct variable for each clock: zero for the system clock and nonzero for a peer clock. > --> > I agree with the proposed re-write for clarity. > > 8) <!--[rfced] Please review our update to use a list for the following text. > > Original: > > Internet addresses are represented as follows: IPv4 addresses are > written in the form [n.n.n.n], where n is in decimal notation and the > brackets are optional; IPv6 addresses are formulated based on the > guidelines defined in [RFC5952]. Timestamps, including reference, > originate, receive and transmit values, as well as the logical clock, > are represented in units of seconds and fractions, preferably in > hexadecimal notation. Delay, offset, dispersion and distance values > are represented in units of milliseconds and fractions, preferably in > decimal notation. All other values are represented as-is, preferably > in decimal notation. > > Current: > Representations of note are as follows: > > * IPv4 internet addresses are written in the form [n.n.n.n], where n > is in decimal notation and the brackets are optional > > * IPv6 internet addresses are formulated based on the guidelines > defined in [RFC5952]. > > * Timestamps (including reference, originate, receive, and transmit > values) and the logical clock are represented in units of seconds > and fractions, preferably in hexadecimal notation. > > * Delay, offset, dispersion, and distance values are represented in > units of milliseconds and fractions, preferably in decimal > notation. > > * All other values are represented as is, preferably in decimal > notation. > --> > The bulleted list is fine. > > 9) <!--[rfced] Please review the updates to the following text to ensure > we've retained your intended meaning. Perhaps further rephrasing > such as "...or is comprised of the seven characters" might be > easier to read? > > Original: > If the command data is empty or the seven characters "ifstats", the > associated statistics, status and counters for each local address are > returned. If the command data is the characters "addr_restrictions" then the > set of IPv4 remote address restrictions followed by the set of IPv6 remote > address restrictions (access control lists) are returned. > > Current: > If the command data is empty or is the seven characters "ifstats", the > associated statistics, status, and counters for each local address are > returned. If the command data is the characters "addr_restrictions", > then the set of IPv4 remote address restrictions followed by the set > of IPv6 remote address restrictions (access control lists) are > returned. > --> > This update is fine. > > 10) <!--[rfced] Please review our update to the list style in the Security Considerations section and let us know any objections.--> > No objection. > > 11) <!--[rfced] Would a clarification of this text be helpful to readers? > We see past draft versions with D. Mills and B. Haberman, but not > T. Plunkett. > > Original: > Tim Plunkett created the original version of this document.--> > The original acknowledgements section is correct. > > 12) <!-- [rfced] We had the following questions regarding terminology that appeared throughout the document. > > a) Please review the way bit names and abbreviations are capped, > quoted, in parentheses, and the placement of the abbreviation (i.e., > should it be More Bit (M) or More (M) Bit)? > > These are a few examples of inconsistencies/uses: > > Response Bit (R) vs. response (R) bit vs. "R" bit vs R bit > E (error) bit vs. "E" bit > More Bit (M) vs. More Bit vs. more data (M) bit vs. more-data (M) bit The original text in the draft is correct. It is consistent with the original definitions described in RFC 1305. > > b) Throughout the text, the following terminology appears to be used > inconsistently. Please review these occurrences and let us know if/how > they may be made consistent. > The following clarifications (except for one) come directly from RFC 1305... > opcode vs. OpCode opcode > Association ID vs. association identifier Association ID > NTP mode 6 vs. NTP Mode 6 NTP mode 6 > NTP Mode 6 control messages vs. NTP mode 6 control messages vs. NTP Control Message vs. control messages (mode 6) NTP control messages... as this document talks about both mode 6 and mode 7 > System Status Word vs. system status word system status word > Read Clock Variables command vs. read clock variables command read clock variables command > Write Clock Variables command vs. write clock variables command write clock variables command > Remote Facility vs. remote facility Remote Facility > Request Code vs. request code request code > > > --> > > > 13) <!-- [rfced] Please review the "Inclusive Language" portion of the online Style Guide > <https://www.rfc-editor.org/styleguide/part2/#inclusive_language> > and let us know if any changes are needed. For example, please consider whether the following should be updated: sanity and whitespace. > "sanity" can be changed to "logical" "whitespace" can be changed to "space characters" > In addition, please consider whether "traditional*" should be updated > for clarity. While the NIST website > <https://www.nist.gov/nist-research-library/nist-technical-series-publications-author-instructions#table1> > indicates that this term is potentially biased, it is also ambiguous. > "Tradition" is a subjective term, as it is not the same for everyone. > --> > "Traditionally" can be dropped from the sentence. Regards, Brian > > Thank you. > > RFC Editor/mc/mf > > *****IMPORTANT***** > > Updated 2022/10/21 > > RFC Author(s): > -------------- > > Instructions for Completing AUTH48 > > Your document has now entered AUTH48. 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