Re: [auth48] [AD] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9311 <draft-ietf-shmoo-hackathon-08> for your review

["Charles Eckel (eckelcu)" <[e-mail]>]

Hi Alanna,

I have reviewed the changes. They look good to me.

Thanks,
Charles

> On Sep 2, 2022, at 11:55 AM, Alanna Paloma <[e-mail]> wrote:
> 
> Hi Charles and *Lars, 
> 
> Thank you for your reply. We have updated the files as requested.
> 
> *Lars, as the AD, please review and confirm that the Implementation Status section should remain in this document.
>  https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9311-auth48diff.html 
> 
> The files have been posted here (please refresh):
>  https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9311.txt
>  https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9311.pdf
>  https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9311.html
>  https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc931.xml
> 
> The relevant diff files are posted here:
>  https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9311-diff.html (comprehensive diff)
>  https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9311-auth48diff.html (all AUTH48 changes)
> 
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> Thank you,
> RFC Editor/ap
> 
>> On Sep 1, 2022, at 2:15 PM, Charles Eckel (eckelcu) <eckelcu=[e-mail]> wrote:
>> 
>> Dear RFC Editor/ap/kc,
>> 
>> Thank you for your work on this document. I have attempted to address each of the questions inline.
>> 
>>> On Aug 31, 2022, at 4:23 PM, [e-mail] wrote:
>>> 
>>> Author,
>>> 
>>> While reviewing this document during AUTH48, please resolve (as necessary) the following questions, which are also in the XML file.
>>> 
>>> 1) <!--[rfced] Note that we have updated the short title, which appears in
>>> the running header in the PDF output, as follows.
>>> 
>>> Original:
>>> ietf-hackathon
>>> 
>>> Current:
>>> IETF Hackathon
>>> -->
>> 
>> Looks good.
>> 
>>> 
>>> 
>>> 2) <!-- [rfced] Please insert any keywords (beyond those that appear in the title) for use on https://www.rfc-editor.org/search. -->
>> 
>> No additional keywords.
>> 
>>> 
>>> 
>>> 3) <!--[rfced] May we shorten the following citation names for easier
>>> readability in the text and for consistency in the References
>>> section? 
>>> 
>>> [IETF-RUNNING-CODE-SPONSOR] —> [RUNNING-CODE-SPONSOR]
>>> [IETF-IRTF-IAB-PRIVACY-STATEMENT] —>  [PRIVACY-STATEMENT]
>>> 
>>> Perhaps:
>>> Hackathon sponsorship is available at different levels as part of
>>> being an IETF [RUNNING-CODE-SPONSOR].
>>> 
>>> The Hackathon complies with the IETF/IRTF/IAB Privacy Statement
>>> [PRIVACY-STATEMENT].
>>> -->
>> 
>> Works for me.
>> 
>>> 
>>> 
>>> 4) <!--[rfced] Please clarify how the expenses are covered. Do expenses come out of the communications and operations budget or are the expenses approved/supported by the Director of Communications and Operations?
>>> 
>>> Original:
>>> Expenses have been covered by the IETF LLC, Director of Communications and
>>> Operations.
>>> 
>>> Perhaps:
>>> A) Expenses have been approved by the IETF LLC, Director of Communications and
>>> Operations.
>>> 
>>> or 
>>> 
>>> B) Expenses have been covered by the IETF LLC, which oversees the communications 
>>> and operations budget.
>>> -->
>> 
>> Option B seems better to me.
>> 
>>> 
>>> 
>>> 5) <!-- [rfced] Per the "Inclusive Language" portion of the online Style
>>> Guide <https://www.rfc-editor.org/styleguide/part2/#inclusive_language>,
>>> we updated "whiteboard" to "dry erase board". Please let us know of any
>>> concerns.
>>> 
>>> Original:
>>> A whiteboard or shared notes tablet, e.g., [HEDGEDOC], at tables 
>>> facilitates sharing of information within the team. 
>>> 
>>> Current:
>>> A dry erase board or shared notes tablet, e.g., [HEDGEDOC], at tables 
>>> facilitates sharing of information within the team. 
>>> -->
>> 
>> Good idea. Thanks for catching that.
>> 
>>> 
>>> 
>>> 6) <!--[rfced] Per RFC 7942 ("Improving Awareness of Running Code: The
>>> Implementation Status Section"), may we remove the Implementation
>>> Status section? -->
>> 
>> It would prefer to keep it.
>> 
>>> 
>>> 
>>> 7) <!--[rfced] Regarding the references to email aliases, may these addresses simply appear within the body of the document (instead of in the References section) as follows? Also, please note that we checked with the Secretariat and apparently "[e-mail]" is an outdated email address; they suggested that we use "[e-mail]" instead.
>>> 
>>> Original:
>>> The [EMAIL-ALIAS] was created and is maintained by the Secretariat.
>>> 
>>> Perhaps:
>>> The email alias <[e-mail]> was created and is 
>>> maintained by the Secretariat.
>>> 
>>> Original:
>>> Best-effort support is available via email to [TICKET].
>>> 
>>> NEW:
>>> Best-effort support is available via email to <[e-mail]>.
>>> -->
>> 
>> Yes, that works for me.
>> 
>>> 
>>> 
>>> Thank you.
>>> 
>>> RFC Editor/ap/kc
>> 
>> 
>> Thank you!
>> Charles
>> 
>>> 
>>> On Aug 31, 2022, at 4:21 PM, [e-mail] wrote:
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>>> Updated 2022/08/31
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>>> --------------------------------------
>>> RFC9311 (draft-ietf-shmoo-hackathon-08)
>>> 
>>> Title            : Running an IETF Hackathon
>>> Author(s)        : C. Eckel
>>> WG Chair(s)      : Suresh Krishnan, Mallory Knodel
>>> 
>>> Area Director(s) : Lars Eggert
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