Re: [auth48] [C468] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9368 <draft-ietf-quic-version-negotiation-14> for your review

[Alanna Paloma <[e-mail]>]

Hi David,

Thank you for your reply. We have updated the files as requested, but note that some of the instances with commas and which/that are not grammatically correct. We suggest the comma usage from our previously sent files. Please let us know if further updates are necessary. 

Regarding the numbered sentence, we have updated “which” to “that”, but we recommend using “which” so that it is grammatically correct. Another option would be to replace “that” with “— note that this”. Please let us know your preference.

Current:
   This document specifies two means of performing version negotiation:
   1) "incompatible", which requires a round trip and is applicable to
   all versions, and 2) "compatible", that allows saving the round trip
   but only applies when the versions are compatible (see Section 2.2).

Perhaps A:
   This document specifies two means of performing version negotiation:
   1) "incompatible", which requires a round trip and is applicable to
   all versions, and 2) "compatible", which allows saving the round trip
   but only applies when the versions are compatible (see Section 2.2).

Perhaps B:
   This document specifies two means of performing version negotiation:
   1) "incompatible", which requires a round trip and is applicable to
   all versions, and 2) “compatible” — note that this allows saving the round trip
   but only applies when the versions are compatible (see Section 2.2).

The files have been posted here (please refresh):
 https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.txt
 https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.pdf
 https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.html
 https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.xml

The relevant diff files are posted here:
 https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-diff.html (comprehensive diff)
 https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-auth48diff.html (all AUTH48 changes)
 https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-lastdiff.html (htmlwdiff diff between last version and this)
 https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-lastrfcdiff.html (rfcdiff between last version and this)

Please see the AUTH48 status page for this document here:
https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9368

Thank you,
RFC Editor/ap

> On May 15, 2023, at 5:32 PM, David Schinazi <[e-mail]> wrote:
> 
> Thanks Alanna. The suggestion of numerals sounds fine, I've added the numbers 1) and 2) to our copy. We still have a few changes between our copies: could you tweak the commas and which/that to match ours please?
> 
> https://author-tools.ietf.org/iddiff?url2=https://quicwg.github.io/version-negotiation/auth48/draft-ietf-quic-version-negotiation.txt&url1=https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.txt
> 
> Thanks,
> David
> 
> On Mon, May 15, 2023 at 4:57 PM Alanna Paloma <[e-mail]> wrote:
> Hi David and Zahed*,
> 
> *Zahed - As the AD, please review and approve of the updated text and key words added in Sections 2.5, 4, and 8 in the diff file below:
>   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-lastdiff.html 
> 
> David - Thank you for your reply. We have updated the files per the diff file you provided.
> 
> Note that there is one exception that we did not update. In Section 2, “which” is used after “compatible” and “incompatible” so that the descriptions are parallel. Would you prefer to add numerals to the sentence for clarity as follows?
> 
> Perhaps:
>  This document specifies two means of performing version negotiation:
>   1) “incompatible”, which requires a round trip and is applicable to all
>   versions and 2) “compatible”, which allows saving the round trip but
>   only applies when the versions are compatible (see Section 2.2).
> 
>  The files have been posted here (please refresh):
>   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.txt
>   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.pdf
>   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.html
>   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.xml
> 
>  The relevant diff files are posted here:
>   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-diff.html (comprehensive diff)
>   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-auth48diff.html (all AUTH48 changes)
>   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-lastdiff.html (htmlwdiff diff between last version and this)
>   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-lastrfcdiff.html (rfcdiff between last version and this)
> 
> Please see the AUTH48 status page for this document here:
> https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9368
> 
> Thank you,
> RFC Editor/ap
> 
> > On May 11, 2023, at 3:50 PM, David Schinazi <[e-mail]> wrote:
> > Hi Alanna,
> > 
> > Eric and I spent some time reviewing the document and we'd like to make some minor changes. Here's a diff from your version to what we'd prefer:
> > https://author-tools.ietf.org/iddiff?url2=https://quicwg.github.io/version-negotiation/auth48/draft-ietf-quic-version-negotiation.txt&url1=https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.txt
> > 
> > Would you be able to make those changes please?
> > 
> > Thanks,
> > David
> > 
> > On Thu, May 11, 2023 at 9:00 AM Alanna Paloma <[e-mail]> wrote:
> > Hi Eric,
> > 
> > This is a reminder that we await your review and approval of this document prior moving it forward in the publication process.
> > 
> > The files are here:
> > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.txt
> > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.pdf
> > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.html
> > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.xml
> > 
> > The relevant diff files are posted here:
> > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-diff.html (comprehensive diff)
> > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-auth48diff.html (all AUTH48 changes)
> > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-lastdiff.html (htmlwdiff diff between last version and this)
> > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-lastrfcdiff.html (rfcdiff between last version and this)
> > 
> > This page shows the AUTH48 status of your document:
> > https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9368
> > 
> > Best regards,
> > RFC Editor/ap
> > 
> > > On May 4, 2023, at 8:40 AM, Alanna Paloma <[e-mail]> wrote:
> > > 
> > > Hi Eric,
> > > 
> > > Just a reminder that we await your review and approval prior to moving this document forward in the publication process. 
> > > 
> > > The files are here:
> > > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.txt
> > > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.pdf
> > > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.html
> > > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.xml
> > > 
> > > The relevant diff files are posted here:
> > > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-diff.html (comprehensive diff)
> > > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-auth48diff.html (all AUTH48 changes)
> > > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-lastdiff.html (htmlwdiff diff between last version and this)
> > > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-lastrfcdiff.html (rfcdiff between last version and this)
> > > 
> > > This page shows the AUTH48 status of your document:
> > > https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9368
> > > 
> > > Best regards,
> > > RFC Editor/ap
> > > 
> > >> On Apr 26, 2023, at 4:31 PM, Eric Rescorla <[e-mail]> wrote:
> > >> 
> > >> Yee. I have now finished subcerts and am moving onto this. I should have completed an initial review this week.
> > >> 
> > >> On Fri, Apr 14, 2023 at 11:05 AM Alanna Paloma <[e-mail]> wrote:
> > >> Hi Eric,
> > >> 
> > >> Just a reminder that we await word from you regarding this document's readiness for publication as an RFC.
> > >> 
> > >> The files are here:
> > >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.txt
> > >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.pdf
> > >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.html
> > >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.xml
> > >> 
> > >> The relevant diff files are posted here:
> > >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-diff.html (comprehensive diff)
> > >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-auth48diff.html (all AUTH48 changes)
> > >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-lastdiff.html (htmlwdiff diff between last version and this)
> > >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-lastrfcdiff.html (rfcdiff between last version and this)
> > >> 
> > >> This page shows the AUTH48 status of your document:
> > >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9368
> > >> 
> > >> Best regards,
> > >> RFC Editor/ap
> > >> 
> > >>> On Apr 7, 2023, at 12:39 PM, Alanna Paloma <[e-mail]> wrote:
> > >>> 
> > >>> Hi Eric,
> > >>> 
> > >>> This is friendly reminder that we await your review and approval of the updated files. 
> > >>> 
> > >>> The files have been posted here (please refresh):
> > >>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.txt
> > >>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.pdf
> > >>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.html
> > >>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.xml
> > >>> 
> > >>> The relevant diff files are posted here:
> > >>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-diff.html (comprehensive diff)
> > >>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-auth48diff.html (all AUTH48 changes)
> > >>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-lastdiff.html (htmlwdiff diff between last version and this)
> > >>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-lastrfcdiff.html (rfcdiff between last version and this)
> > >>> 
> > >>> This page shows the AUTH48 status of your document:
> > >>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9368
> > >>> 
> > >>> Thank you,
> > >>> RFC Editor/ap
> > >>> 
> > >>>> On Mar 21, 2023, at 9:58 AM, Alanna Paloma <[e-mail]> wrote:
> > >>>> 
> > >>>> Hi Eric,
> > >>>> 
> > >>>> Thank you for letting us know. We’ve noted this delay on the AUTH48 status page:
> > >>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9368
> > >>>> 
> > >>>> We’ll check in the week after IETF 116 if we don’t hear back from you first.
> > >>>> 
> > >>>> Best regards,
> > >>>> RFC Editor/ap
> > >>>> 
> > >>>>> On Mar 21, 2023, at 9:15 AM, Eric Rescorla <[e-mail]> wrote:
> > >>>>> 
> > >>>>> Thanks. At this point I am preparing for IETF and will likely not get to this till after Yokohama.
> > >>>>> 
> > >>>>> On Tue, Mar 21, 2023 at 9:14 AM Alanna Paloma <[e-mail]> wrote:
> > >>>>> Hi Eric,
> > >>>>> 
> > >>>>> This is another friendly reminder that we await your review and approval of the updated files before continuing with the publication process. 
> > >>>>> 
> > >>>>> The files have been posted here (please refresh):
> > >>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.txt
> > >>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.pdf
> > >>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.html
> > >>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.xml
> > >>>>> 
> > >>>>> The relevant diff files are posted here:
> > >>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-diff.html (comprehensive diff)
> > >>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-auth48diff.html (all AUTH48 changes)
> > >>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-lastdiff.html (htmlwdiff diff between last version and this)
> > >>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-lastrfcdiff.html (rfcdiff between last version and this)
> > >>>>> 
> > >>>>> This page shows the AUTH48 status of your document:
> > >>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9368
> > >>>>> 
> > >>>>> Thank you,
> > >>>>> RFC Editor/ap
> > >>>>> 
> > >>>>>> On Mar 14, 2023, at 11:11 AM, Alanna Paloma <[e-mail]> wrote:
> > >>>>>> 
> > >>>>>> Hi Eric,
> > >>>>>> 
> > >>>>>> This is a friendly reminder that we await your review and approval of the updated files before continuing with the publication process.
> > >>>>>> 
> > >>>>>> The files have been posted here (please refresh):
> > >>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.txt
> > >>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.pdf
> > >>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.html
> > >>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.xml
> > >>>>>> 
> > >>>>>> The relevant diff files are posted here:
> > >>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-diff.html (comprehensive diff)
> > >>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-auth48diff.html (all AUTH48 changes)
> > >>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-lastdiff.html (htmlwdiff diff between last version and this)
> > >>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-lastrfcdiff.html (rfcdiff between last version and this)
> > >>>>>> 
> > >>>>>> This page shows the AUTH48 status of your document:
> > >>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9368
> > >>>>>> 
> > >>>>>> Thank you,
> > >>>>>> RFC Editor/ap
> > >>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>> On Mar 7, 2023, at 7:58 PM, Eric Rescorla <[e-mail]> wrote:
> > >>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>> Thank you. I will try to look at it next week.
> > >>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>> On Tue, Mar 7, 2023 at 6:29 PM Alanna Paloma <[e-mail]> wrote:
> > >>>>>>> Hi David, 
> > >>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>> Thank you for your approval; it has been noted on the AUTH48 status page:
> > >>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9368
> > >>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>> We will await Eric’s approval before moving forward with the publication process.
> > >>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>> Thank you,
> > >>>>>>> RFC Editor/ap
> > >>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>> On Mar 7, 2023, at 4:12 PM, David Schinazi <[e-mail]> wrote:
> > >>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>> Thank you so much Alanna. I approve publication of the document.
> > >>>>>>>> David
> > >>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>> On Tue, Mar 7, 2023 at 3:01 PM Alanna Paloma <[e-mail]> wrote:
> > >>>>>>>> Hi David,
> > >>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>> We have updated the document as requested and posted the revised files here (please refresh):
> > >>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.txt
> > >>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.pdf
> > >>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.html
> > >>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.xml
> > >>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>> The relevant diff files are posted here:
> > >>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-diff.html (comprehensive diff)
> > >>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-auth48diff.html (all AUTH48 changes)
> > >>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-lastdiff.html (htmlwdiff diff between last version and this)
> > >>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-lastrfcdiff.html (rfcdiff between last version and this)
> > >>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>> Please review and let us know if any additional updates are needed or if you approve the RFC for publication.
> > >>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>> This page shows the AUTH48 status of your document:
> > >>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9368
> > >>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>> Thank you,
> > >>>>>>>> RFC Editor/ap
> > >>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>> On Mar 6, 2023, at 2:49 PM, David Schinazi <[e-mail]> wrote:
> > >>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>> Thank you Alanna!
> > >>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>> I just did my final full readthrough and found one last issue. In Section 2.3 (Compatible Version Negotiation), a change to the fifth paragraph unintentionally changes the meaning. Here is a crisper phrasing:
> > >>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>> CURRENT:
> > >>>>>>>>> For instance, if the Negotiated Version requires that the 5-tuple remain stable for the entire handshake (as QUIC version 1 does), then both endpoints need to validate the 5-tuple of all Handshake packets, including the converted first flight.
> > >>>>>>>>> FIXED:
> > >>>>>>>>> For instance, if the Negotiated Version requires that the 5-tuple remain stable for the entire handshake (as QUIC version 1 does), then both endpoints need to validate the 5-tuple of all packets received during the handshake, including the converted first flight.
> > >>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>> Thank you,
> > >>>>>>>>> David
> > >>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>> On Mon, Mar 6, 2023 at 12:21 PM Alanna Paloma <[e-mail]> wrote:
> > >>>>>>>>> Hi David,
> > >>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>> We have fixed that nit. The update files are here (please refresh):
> > >>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.txt
> > >>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.pdf
> > >>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.html
> > >>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.xml
> > >>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>> The relevant diff files are posted here:
> > >>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-diff.html (comprehensive diff)
> > >>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-auth48diff.html (all AUTH48 changes)
> > >>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-lastdiff.html (htmlwdiff diff between last version and this)
> > >>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-lastrfcdiff.html (rfcdiff between last version and this)
> > >>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>> This page shows the AUTH48 status of your document:
> > >>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9368
> > >>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>> Thank you,
> > >>>>>>>>> RFC Editor/ap
> > >>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>> On Mar 6, 2023, at 11:28 AM, David Schinazi <[e-mail]> wrote:
> > >>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>> Hi Alanna,
> > >>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>> Thanks for the updates. I've found a missing parenthesis. In Section 3 (Version Negotiation), the second paragraph needs a parenthesis before the final colon:
> > >>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>> CURRENT:
> > >>>>>>>>>> The contents of Version Information are shown below (using the notation from Section 1.3 of [QUIC]:
> > >>>>>>>>>> FIXED:
> > >>>>>>>>>> The contents of Version Information are shown below (using the notation from Section 1.3 of [QUIC]):
> > >>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>> Thanks,
> > >>>>>>>>>> David
> > >>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>> On Mon, Mar 6, 2023 at 8:36 AM Alanna Paloma <[e-mail]> wrote:
> > >>>>>>>>>> Hi Zahed,
> > >>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>> Thank you for your approval. We have noted it on the AUTH48 status page:
> > >>>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9368
> > >>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>> We will await approvals from Davis and Eric prior to moving this document forward in the publication process. 
> > >>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>> Thank you,
> > >>>>>>>>>> RFC Editor/ap
> > >>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>> On Mar 4, 2023, at 1:20 PM, Zaheduzzaman Sarker <[e-mail]> wrote:
> > >>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>> Approved. 
> > >>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>> Thanks all for working on this publication. 
> > >>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>> //Zahed
> > >>>>>>>>>>> From: Alanna Paloma <[e-mail]>
> > >>>>>>>>>>> Sent: Saturday, March 4, 2023 2:17:04 AM
> > >>>>>>>>>>> To: David Schinazi <[e-mail]>; Zaheduzzaman Sarker <[e-mail]>
> > >>>>>>>>>>> Cc: RFC Errata System <[e-mail]>; Eric Rescorla <[e-mail]>; [e-mail] <[e-mail]>; [e-mail] <[e-mail]>; [e-mail] <[e-mail]>; [e-mail] <[e-mail]>
> > >>>>>>>>>>> Subject: Re: [AD] [C468] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9368 <draft-ietf-quic-version-negotiation-14> for your review
> > >>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>> Hi David and Zahed (AD)*,
> > >>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>> *Zahed - Please review and approve of the added text in Section 2 and the updated text in Section 5 in the diff file below.
> > >>>>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-lastdiff.html 
> > >>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>> David - Thank you for your reply and for contacting IANA to update the registry. We have updated the files as you requested.
> > >>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>> The files have been posted here (please refresh):
> > >>>>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.txt
> > >>>>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.pdf
> > >>>>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.html
> > >>>>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.xml
> > >>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>> The relevant diff files are posted here:
> > >>>>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-diff.html (comprehensive diff)
> > >>>>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-auth48diff.html (all AUTH48 changes)
> > >>>>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-lastdiff.html (htmlwdiff diff between last version and this)
> > >>>>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-lastrfcdiff.html (rfcdiff between last version and this)
> > >>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>> This page shows the AUTH48 status of your document:
> > >>>>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9368
> > >>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>> Best regards,
> > >>>>>>>>>>> RFC Editor/ap
> > >>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>> On Mar 2, 2023, at 6:15 PM, David Schinazi <[e-mail]> wrote:
> > >>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>> Thank you Alanna!
> > >>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>> I contacted IANA about the capitalization and they've updated the registry to say "Error negotiating version” instead of “Error Negotiating Version” in order to match other entries in that registry.
> > >>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>> I did a pass on the document and found some changes I'd like to make. Here is a diff between our version and yours (we're on the left and you're the right)
> > >>>>>>>>>>>> https://author-tools.ietf.org/iddiff?url1=https://quicwg.github.io/version-negotiation/auth48/draft-ietf-quic-version-negotiation.txt&url2=https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.txt
> > >>>>>>>>>>>> Can you tweak your copy to match the one on the left please?
> > >>>>>>>>>>>> (you can ignore the differences in the reference links at the end, that's a tooling issue)
> > >>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>> Thanks,
> > >>>>>>>>>>>> David
> > >>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>> On Wed, Mar 1, 2023 at 3:45 PM Alanna Paloma <[e-mail]> wrote:
> > >>>>>>>>>>>> Hi David, 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>> Thank you for your reply. 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>> We have made “Chosen Version” lowercase in the Abstract and have capitalized “Original Version” and “Negotiated Version” outside of the Abstract and Introduction. 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>> Additionally, we have capitalized “Error Negotiating Version” in Section 10.2 to match the IANA registry.
> > >>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>> The files have been posted here (please refresh):
> > >>>>>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.txt
> > >>>>>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.pdf
> > >>>>>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.html
> > >>>>>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.xml
> > >>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>> The relevant diff files are posted here:
> > >>>>>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-diff.html (comprehensive diff)
> > >>>>>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-auth48diff.html (all AUTH48 changes)
> > >>>>>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-lastdiff.html (htmlwdiff diff between last version and this)
> > >>>>>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-lastrfcdiff.html (rfcdiff between last version and this)
> > >>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>> We will await approvals from each party listed on the AUTH48 status page below prior to moving this document forward in the publication process.
> > >>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>> For the AUTH48 status of this document, please see:
> > >>>>>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9368
> > >>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>> Best regards,
> > >>>>>>>>>>>> RFC Editor/ap
> > >>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>> On Mar 1, 2023, at 11:22 AM, David Schinazi <[e-mail]> wrote:
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>> Thanks Alanna.
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>> Since we capitalized "Chosen Version", can we also capitalize "Original Version" and "Negotiated Version" please? On that note please do not capitalize any of these in the Abstract or Introduction, since the terms aren't yet defined at that point and they're used in a more vague fashion at that point.
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>> Don't worry about requesting changes from IANA, they've already fixed the typo (RFC Editor is CC'ed on that thread).
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>> Thanks,
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>> David
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>> On Tue, Feb 28, 2023 at 12:56 PM Alanna Paloma <[e-mail]> wrote:
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>> Hi David,
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>> Thank you for your reply. We have updated as requested. 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>> Note that, once we have received all approvals, we will ask IANA to update the "QUIC Transport Error Codes” registry to have “Error negotiating version” (instead of “Error Negotiating Version”).
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>> The files have been posted here (please refresh):
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.xml
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.txt
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.html
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.pdf
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>> The relevant diff files have been posted here:
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-diff.html (comprehensive diff)
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368-auth48diff.html (AUTH48 changes)
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>> Please review the document carefully and contact us with any further updates you may have.  Note that we do not make changes once a document is published as an RFC.
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>> We will await approvals from each party listed on the AUTH48 status page below prior to moving this document forward in the publication process.
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>> For the AUTH48 status of this document, please see:
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9368
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>> Thank you,
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>> RFC Editor/ap
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> On Feb 24, 2023, at 10:40 AM, David Schinazi <[e-mail]> wrote:
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> Hi,
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> Thank you for your work on this document! Responses to your questions are inline.
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> David
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> On Thu, Feb 23, 2023 at 4:42 PM <[e-mail]> wrote:
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> Authors,
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> While reviewing this document during AUTH48, please resolve (as necessary) the following questions, which are also in the XML file.
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> 1) <!--[rfced] FYI: Section 10.2. We have updated the "Description" text
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> below to match the text in the IANA "QUIC Transport Error Codes"
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> registry (i.e., updated "Error negotiating version" to "Error
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> negotiation version").
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> Original:
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> Value:  0x11
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> Code:  VERSION_NEGOTIATION_ERROR
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> Description:  Error negotiating version
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> Status:  permanent
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> Specification:  This document
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> Current:
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> Value:  0x11
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> Code:  VERSION_NEGOTIATION_ERROR
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> Description:  Error negotiation version
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> Status:  permanent
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> Specification:  RFC 9368
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> -->
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> The change from "Error negotiating version" to "Error negotiation version" was a typo made by IANA. I've emailed them about it to have them fix the registry and CCed you. Please revert the change to the document as the correct description is "Error negotiating version".
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> 2) <!--[rfced] Throughout the text, the following terminology appears to
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> be used inconsistently. Please review these occurrences and let
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> us know if/how they may be made consistent.
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> - Chosen Version vs. chosen version (when not "Chosen Version field")
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> Let's use "Chosen Version" to match "Partially Deployed Versions" and "Fully Deployed Versions" (see below).
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> - Retry vs. retry (when not "Retry packet")
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> RFC 9000 (which defines Retry) seems to always capitalize Retry, so let's do that here too.
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> In addition, may we capitalize these terms as follows:
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> "Handshake packet" (instead of "handshake packet")
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>>   [Note: this change will match use in the companion document and 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>>    will be consistent with the capitalization of the other packet 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>>    names.]
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> "Partially Deployed Versions" (instead of "partially-deployed versions")
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>>   [Note: this change will match how "Fully Deployed Versions" appears 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>>    in the text.]
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> Sounds good to me.
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> -->
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> 3) <!-- [rfced] Please review the "Inclusive Language" portion of the online 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> Style Guide <https://www.rfc-editor.org/styleguide/part2/#inclusive_language> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> and let us know if any changes are needed. 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> Note that our script did not flag any words in particular, but this should still 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> be reviewed as a best practice.
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> I'm not aware of any further needed changes due to inclusive language.
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> -->
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> Thank you.
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> RFC Editor/ap/kc
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> On Feb 23, 2023, at 4:40 PM, [e-mail] wrote:
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> 
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> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.html
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.pdf
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.txt
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> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> XMLv3 file that is a best effort to capture v3-related format updates 
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> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9368.form.xml
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> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> RFC Editor
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> --------------------------------------
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> RFC9368 (draft-ietf-quic-version-negotiation-14)
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> 
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> Title            : Compatible Version Negotiation for QUIC
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> Author(s)        : D. Schinazi, E. Rescorla
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> WG Chair(s)      : Matt Joras, Lucas Pardue
> > >>>>>>>>>>>>>> 
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