Re: [bess] Genart early review of draft-ietf-bess-bgp-multicast-controller-11
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From: "Jeffrey (Zhaohui) Zhang" <zzhang@juniper.net>
To: Meral Shirazipour <meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com>, "gen-art@ietf.org" <gen-art@ietf.org>
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Subject: Re: [bess] Genart early review of draft-ietf-bess-bgp-multicast-controller-11
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Hi Meral, Thanks for your review and comments. I have fixed the issues in my source .xml. I will soon post the revision along with other potential changes. Jeffrey Juniper Business Use Only -----Original Message----- From: Meral Shirazipour via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org> Sent: Tuesday, November 7, 2023 2:32 AM To: gen-art@ietf.org Cc: bess@ietf.org; draft-ietf-bess-bgp-multicast-controller.all@ietf.org Subject: Genart early review of draft-ietf-bess-bgp-multicast-controller-11 [External Email. Be cautious of content] Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour Review result: Ready with Nits I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments. For more information, please see the FAQ at <https://urldefense.com/v3/__https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq__;!!NEt6yMaO-gk!EvVCsHRw42Cy8L30QC7du_b4oqkDoCt0R4exwMv6eI39TkopdOinKZOVwca4RPQ7bMFP7RdMOxLKMjM$ >. Document: draft-ietf-bess-bgp-multicast-controller-11 Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour Review Date: 2023-11-06 IETF LC End Date: 2023-11-10 IESG Telechat date: NA Summary: This draft is almost ready to be published as Standard RFC, no other comments than those on the list. Major issues: Minor issues: Nits/editorial comments: -[Page 21], Section 4.2, "recevied on"-->"received on" (twice) -[Page 21], Section 4.3, "an Extented"-->"an Extended"
- [bess] Genart early review of draft-ietf-bess-bgp… Meral Shirazipour via Datatracker
- Re: [bess] Genart early review of draft-ietf-bess… Jeffrey (Zhaohui) Zhang