[bmwg] Initial comments on "draft-manral-bmwg-power-usage-02"

[Bill Cerveny <[e-mail]>]

Below are my initial impressions regarding
"draft-manral-bmwg-power-usage-02", as requested at the last meeting. I
focused primarily on I-D design and content; I did not focus/comment on
grammatical/typographical issues. 

There is a lot of interesting content that could be referenced by
someone wishing to do power measurements on network devices. There is a
lot of background on challenges and factors which can impact power
measurement.

Although the introduction said there would be procedures and metrics
presented in the document, I didn't see what I would consider procedures
in the document. I expected to see something that resembled a discussion
of test setup, objectives and perhaps steps for performing measurements.

>From a strict document design perspective, some of the text in the
introduction probably doesn't belong in the introduction, although it is
interesting and useful material. In particular, the paragraph beginning
"The first step to obtain a network wide view is ..." probably does not
need to be in the introduction, although it does appear the paragraph
could be part of a procedure further in the document.

As you update the document, consider splitting the paragraph "Various
techniques have been defined ...", such that there is a new paragraph
that begins with the sentence "This document defines the ...". The
sentence "This document defines the ..." seems key to describing the
document and I discourage "hiding" it in the middle of a paragraph.

Section 6, "benchmark details", seems a bit shorter than I would have
expected for a benchmarking document. 

In conclusion, I think that the draft is interesting and has potential.
The most important thing is that the draft needs to have procedures
added or the introduction should not state that there are procedures in
the document.  

Regards,

Bill Cerveny