Re: [bmwg] I-D Action: draft-ietf-bmwg-ipflow-meth-06.txt

["Jan Novak (janovak)" <[e-mail]>]

Hi,
Ok, great - I removed those when doing
ID Nits to get the correct line lengths
without formatting pages again :-) ...

Jan

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and the strong envy them.
                                 Dr. Johnson



-----Original Message-----
From: Paul Aitken (paitken) 
Sent: 22 January 2012 17:36
To: Jan Novak (janovak); Al Morton
Cc: [e-mail]
Subject: Re: I-D Action: draft-ietf-bmwg-ipflow-meth-06.txt

Jan,

Thanks for the revised draft.

I have three minor editorial comments arising from the additional edits 
you made.
These could potentially be handled in the AUTH48 review. See below.


Al,

I'm happy to approve this draft. Thanks to Jan for all his hard work and

patience.


P.



In 4.3.6, please re-add the deleted "a":

   "The MPLS forwarding performance document [RFC5695] specifies a
number"
                                                                 ^


In 4.5, where you change the text to:

     "situations without packet, flow or export sampling",

Please use a serial (Oxford) comma to avoid ambiguity: "situations 
without packet, flow, or export sampling",

See http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Serial_comma#Ambiguity



Immediately above section 5.2, please re-add the deleted "the":

     "if the implementation follows the [IPFIX-CONFIG] document"
                                    ^^^




On 22/01/12 12:53, Jan Novak (janovak) wrote:
> Hi,
> I have just posted a new version addressing
> the comments from the latest review.
>
> Jan
>
> The climate of Edinburgh is such that the weak succumb young ....
> and the strong envy them.
>                                   Dr. Johnson