Re: [Bpf] Lars Eggert's No Objection on charter-ietf-bpf-00-03: (with COMMENT)

[Erik Kline <[e-mail]>]

On Thu, May 25, 2023 at 1:58 AM Lars Eggert via Datatracker
<[e-mail]> wrote:
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> Lars Eggert has entered the following ballot position for
> charter-ietf-bpf-00-03: No Objection
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> COMMENT:
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> # GEN AD review of charter-ietf-bpf-00-03
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> CC @larseggert
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> ## Comments
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> ### "BPF", paragraph 4
> ```
>   The working group shall not adopt new work until these
>   documents have progressed to working group last call.
> ```
> Why WG LC and not IESG approval as usual?

Seemed more expedient, I suppose, but: changed to IESG approval.

> ### Inclusive language
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> Found terminology that should be reviewed for inclusivity; see
> https://www.rfc-editor.org/part2/#inclusive_language for background and more
> guidance:
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>  * Term `native`; alternatives might be `built-in`, `fundamental`, `ingrained`,
>    `intrinsic`, `original`

None of these terms seem to improve readability.

> ## Nits
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> ### Typos
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> #### "BPF", paragraph 4
> ```
> - The bpf working group is initially tasked with documenting the existing
> -     ^^^
> + The BPF working group is initially tasked with documenting the existing
> +     ^^^
> ```
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> #### "BPF", paragraph 4
> ```
> - documents have progressed to working group last call.
> -                 ^^^^ ^^
> + documents have completed working group last call.
> +                +++ ^ ^
> ```
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> #### "BPF", paragraph 15
> ```
> - The bpf working group shall actively engage the eBPF Foundation
> -     ^^^
> + The BPF working group shall actively engage the eBPF Foundation
> +     ^^^
> ```
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> #### "BPF", paragraph 16
> ```
> - eBPF that are useful to the wider internet community and not operating
> -                                   ^
> - or otherwise platform specific.
> -                      ^
> + eBPF that are useful to the wider Internet community and not operating-system
> +                                   ^                                   +++++++
> + or otherwise platform-specific.
> +                      ^
> ```

Done.

> ## Notes
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