[Can] Lars Eggert's No Objection on charter-ietf-can-00-05: (with COMMENT)

Lars Eggert via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org> Tue, 28 February 2023 13:11 UTC

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Subject: [Can] Lars Eggert's No Objection on charter-ietf-can-00-05: (with COMMENT)

Lars Eggert has entered the following ballot position for
charter-ietf-can-00-05: No Objection

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# GEN AD review of charter-ietf-can-00-05

CC @larseggert

## Comments

### Paragraph 0
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  Computing-Aware Networking (can)
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Are we renaming this WG?

### Paragraph 20
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  Milestones:
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Would be good to agree on standards levels for these milestones

## Nits

All comments below are about very minor potential issues that you may choose to
address in some way - or ignore - as you see fit. Some were flagged by
automated tools (via https://github.com/larseggert/ietf-reviewtool), so there
will likely be some false positives. There is no need to let me know what you
did with these suggestions.

### Typos

#### Paragraph 2
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- optimize how a network edge node steers traffic based on these metrics,
-                                                                       -
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#### Paragraph 2
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- as appropriate to the service.
+ to the service.
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#### Paragraph 3
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- and transport of traffic from network edge to service instance. It also
-       ^ ^^^^^
+ and steering of traffic from network edge to service instance. It also
+     + ++ ^ ^
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## Notes

This review is in the ["IETF Comments" Markdown format][ICMF], You can use the
[`ietf-comments` tool][ICT] to automatically convert this review into
individual GitHub issues. Review generated by the [`ietf-reviewtool`][IRT].

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[ICT]: https://github.com/mnot/ietf-comments
[IRT]: https://github.com/larseggert/ietf-reviewtool

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