Chair review of draft-ietf-ccamp-inter-domain-rsvp-te-04.txt

["BRUNGARD, DEBORAH A, ATTLABS" <[e-mail]>]

Hi,
 
Here's my review of this I-D to help the authors prepare it for WG last
call. In my opinion, the draft is almost ready except for a few minor
items and editorials. I encourage the WG to also post any items at this
time, so as to allow the authors to efficiently update. If the authors
can submit a new version addressing the comments, we can take the I-D
forward.
 
Thanks,
Deborah
 
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Boilerplate
Need the new boilerplate
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Nits: may want to check, a couple of nits on weird spacings and line
lengths
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Section 1
Update for recent work, e.g. [INTER-DOMAIN-FRAMEWORK] is RFC4726,
RFC4726 applies for MPLS-TE and GMPLS, requirements for GMPLS are in
draft-otani-ccamp-interas-gmpls-te-05.txt.
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Section 2
text has "supported by one of three options"
May want to also mention 4726's hybrid support, probably a small note is
all that's needed, e.g. "(or hybrid)". Also, it would be useful to
mention something on consideration for 4726's backward compatibility,
either here or in a later section.
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Section 3
item 2 incomplete sentence, a suggestion:
s/adhered to./adhered./
also in item 2
s/message an error code/message with error code/
item 3
s/in the Section 3/in Section 3/
item 4
s/option is supplied/option is specified/
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Section 3.2
s/information that report/information that reports/
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Section 5.1.2
s/(filed link)/(failed link)/
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Section 5.1.3
s/domian/domain/
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Section 6
s/preferable/more preferred/
s/in order search/in order to search/
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Section 7
s/:-/:/
the text says "disallow or ignore hops", I don't think its "ignore"?
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[LOOSE-REOPT] is now [RFC4736], and Informational, did you want to
reference as a Normative Reference?
Check and update others.
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Section 11
JP's email address is up-to-date?