Re: [CCAMP] Robert Wilton's Yes on draft-ietf-ccamp-l1csm-yang-25: (with COMMENT)

[Zhenghaomian <[e-mail]>]

Hi Robert, 

Thank you for the comments, see inline:)

Best wishes,
Haomian

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Hi,

Thanks for publishing this document and YANG module.  It looks good to me, with
just one minor comment:

(1) p 2, sec 1.  Introduction

   The primary focus of this document is to describe L1CSM YANG model
   required for the instantiation of point-to-point L1 connectivity
   services, to provide Layer 1 connectivity between two or more
   customer sites where the customer has some control over the
   establishment and type of the connectivity.  The L1CSM specified in
   this document supports the point-to-point connectivity services
   defined in [RFC4847].

I'm struggling to parse the first sentence in paragraph above.  Perhaps the
following is clearer?

   The primary focus of this document is to describe the L1CSM YANG
   model that is used for the instantiation of point-to-point L1
   connectivity services, which provide Layer 1 connectivity between
   two or more customer sites where the customer has some control
   over the establishment and type of the connectivity.

[Haomian] I am okay with the wording, of the first sentence. For the second sentence see the next. 

It also wasn't really clear to me how the YANG model relates to the 3 different
abstract services models that you described.  Is it possible for the
relationship to be a bit more clearly explained please.

[Haomian] The original motivation is to indicate the support of all the 3 types L1 connections in RFC4847. The YANG model itself are generic and does not differentiate the types/mode. So for the second sentence, would the following proposal work? 

OLD: 
The L1CSM specified in this document supports the point-to-point connectivity services defined in [RFC4847].

NEW:
The L1CSM specified in this document provides generic support on service models defined in [RFC4847].

Regards,
Rob