Re: [CDNi] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-cdni-delegation-acme-03

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Hi,

Thanks for the review. I've noted your comments and will fix those nits in the next release.

Regards,
Frederic


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Objet : Genart last call review of draft-ietf-cdni-delegation-acme-03

Reviewer: Lucas Pardue
Review result: Ready

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Document: draft-ietf-cdni-delegation-acme-??
Reviewer: Lucas Pardue
Review Date: 2023-10-24
IETF LC End Date: 2023-10-18
IESG Telechat date: 2023-10-26

Summary:

This draft is ready for publication as a Standard Track RFC.

It defines a new object for CDNI to aid delegation of credentials. The draft is succint and clear.

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments:

Section 1

A document overview for such a short document seems a little superfluos, especially since section 1.1, 4 and 5 are standard section types.

Section 2

It appears that you provide an example of the new ACMEDelegationMethod object without acknowledging so in the prose. For someone unfamiliar with CDNI, its not clear what is already defined and what is new. Perhaps consider mentioning the ACMEDelegationMethod object, with a forward reference to the object definition.

Section 3

Figure 1 - the use of SVG is a welcome touch. However, it uses the terms "CP"
and "CA" and those aren't spelled out. I understand these might be imported terms but the document helpfully spells out dCDN and uCDN; it would be nice to do it for CP and CA too

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