Re: [clue] WGLC for draft-ietf-clue-rtp-mapping-07 ends 4 June
Paul Kyzivat <pkyzivat@alum.mit.edu> Fri, 03 June 2016 16:39 UTC
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Subject: Re: [clue] WGLC for draft-ietf-clue-rtp-mapping-07 ends 4 June
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On 5/21/16 4:20 PM, Daniel Burnett wrote: > This message announces the start of a 2 week WGLC for > draft-ietf-clue-rtp-mapping to review the updated draft. The last call > will end at midnight on Saturday, 4 June 2016. > > PLEASE REVIEW NOW. Its been a long time since I read this document all the way through, so I just did so. Note that I am far from an RTP expert, so my qualifications for reviewing this document are limited. The following covers mostly stuff that doesn't require too much understanding of RTP. All of the following seem to be to be "quick fix" things. Aside from these I think the document is ready to go. * Section 4: The 2nd to last paragraph begins with "isAlternately". Clearly the "is" needs to be removed. * Section 4.1: The sentence "[I-D.ietf-mmusic-sdp-bundle-negotiation] how to associate a received RTP stream with the m-line describing it." doesn't parse. It is missing a word. I think "specifies" should be inserted prior to "how to associate". Then, in "The assumption in the work is that...", it isn't clear what "the work" refers to. Is it CLUE, or BUNDLE? I think it means CLUE. So perhaps change to "The assumption in CLUE is that...". I'll also note that "[I-D.ietf-mmusic-sdp-bundle-negotiation]" is rather unwieldy to read. It would be helpful to change the references to something more concise, such as [BUNDLE]. (xml2rfc supports this.) The following one-sentence paragraph: SDP Source attribute [RFC5576] mechanisms to describe specific attributes of RTP sources based on their SSRC. isn't a complete sentence. I don't have a particular fix to suggest. Then the sentence: The recommended support of the simulcast case is to use [I-D.ietf-mmusic-sdp-simulcast] needs a period at the end. * Section 4.2: The intro to this section: This section lists, more briefly, the requirements a media architecture for Clue telepresence needs to achieve, summarizing the discussion of previous sections. doesn't seem appropriate now that the work done. Also, I don't think it really summarizes discussion in prior sections. Perhaps something like the following would be better: "This section lists the CLUE media requirements that guided the development of this RTP mapping document." * Section 4.5: The recommendation is that CLUE endpoints using SSRC multiplexing MUST support [I-D.ietf-mmusic-sdp-bundle-negotiation] and use the SDP mid attribute for mapping. I read this as being a bit stronger than I think is intended. I think the intent is that all CLUE endpoints support BUNDLE (for interoperability), but that they need not offer it. And they only need to use mid when they are using BUNDLE. If they are not using BUNDLE then use of mid is optional. * Section 5: The statement "The solutions described in this document are believed to meet these requirements" seems a bit weak in a completed document. Any doubts as to whether the requirements have been met should have been raised and resolved now. So can we omit this? Should all the requirements be listed in this section, with an explanation of how each is met? * Section 9: Shouldn't there be two things registered here? Both the RTP header extension and the RTCP SDES item. * Nits: There are a few outdated references. Thanks, Paul
- [clue] WGLC for draft-ietf-clue-rtp-mapping-07 en… Daniel Burnett
- Re: [clue] WGLC for draft-ietf-clue-rtp-mapping-0… Christian Groves
- Re: [clue] WGLC for draft-ietf-clue-rtp-mapping-0… Duckworth, Mark
- Re: [clue] WGLC for draft-ietf-clue-rtp-mapping-0… Paul Kyzivat
- Re: [clue] WGLC for draft-ietf-clue-rtp-mapping-0… Colin Perkins
- Re: [clue] WGLC for draft-ietf-clue-rtp-mapping-0… Roni Even
- Re: [clue] WGLC for draft-ietf-clue-rtp-mapping-0… Paul Kyzivat