[core] AD review of draft-ietf-core-senml-versions-02

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 Thanks for the work on this document. Two very minor comments below, to take or leave as you see fit. Please handle these comments together with the Last Call comments.

Francesca

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                __ 52                      fc
   version  =  \          present(fc) ⋅ 2
               /__ fc = 0

FP: Creative way to express a sumation in text. Maybe a sentence about the fact that sigma is represented this way in the text might be good. Also, the terminology section states that exponentiation is expressed with superscript notation X^(Y), but that is not used here.

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Since the Secondary Units is defined in RFC 8798, it would make sense in my opinion to add that RFC to the Specification column. In practice, it would make sense to me to add to the specification column not only the document where the feature code number is defined, but also the specification where the feature indicated is defined.