Re: [Detnet] comments on draft-ietf-detnet-oam-framework-06
Greg Mirsky <gregimirsky@gmail.com> Thu, 06 October 2022 20:57 UTC
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From: Greg Mirsky <gregimirsky@gmail.com>
Date: Thu, 06 Oct 2022 13:57:24 -0700
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Subject: Re: [Detnet] comments on draft-ietf-detnet-oam-framework-06
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Lou, many thanks for your comments, suggestions, and guidance. The new version has been uploaded. Regards, Greg On Thu, Oct 6, 2022 at 12:56 PM Lou Berger <lberger@labn.net> wrote: > Greg, > > This version looks ready! > > Thank you > > Lou > On 10/4/2022 11:59 AM, Greg Mirsky wrote: > > Hi Lou, > I've switched the reference as you suggested (also removed the unnecessary > I've introduced). I've updated the text to reference the DetNet Control > Plane with "controller" as an example. > Many thanks for your patience and help. > > Attached are the diff and the working version of the draft. > > Regards, > Greg > > On Mon, Oct 3, 2022 at 1:17 PM Lou Berger <lberger@labn.net> wrote: > >> Greg, >> >> I suggest you instead reference RFC8655, the Deterministic Networking >> Architecture. It uses consistent capitalization for the "DetNet Controller >> Plane" term. >> >> I think you still have a few more instances of " centralized/central" >> controller to clarify. >> >> Thanks! >> >> Lou >> On 10/3/2022 4:08 PM, Greg Mirsky wrote: >> >> Hi Lou, >> apologies for missing the normative verbs and necessary updates to >> "DetNet controller plane" terminology. I've added the reference to >> draft-ietf-detnet-controller-plane-framework >> <https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/html/draft-ietf-detnet-controller-plane-framework-02> as >> Informational. A minor question about the capitalization of "DetNet >> controller plane". It seems like the draft uses >> capitalization interchangeably. I've used only lower case in the OAM draft. >> Please let me know if that is acceptable. >> >> Attached, please find the diff and the new working version of the draft. >> >> Regards, >> Greg >> >> On Fri, Sep 30, 2022 at 5:17 AM Lou Berger <lberger@labn.net> wrote: >> >>> Hi Greg, >>> >>> see below. I think the version you sent doesn't address everything >>> discussed below. >>> >>> Also - this is important - please update the draft with a current email >>> address for Georgios as his current address bounces. If you don't have one, >>> he must be moved to contributor. >>> On 9/28/2022 12:47 PM, Greg Mirsky wrote: >>> >>> Hi Lou, >>> thank you for your quick response and helpful suggestions to improve the >>> document. I've applied them all. As usual, I've attached the diff to >>> highlight all the updates and the working version of the draft. >>> RE: the number of authors on the first page. I agree with the response >>> you've proposed. I hope that IESG will thoughtfully consider this case. >>> >>> Regards, >>> Greg >>> >>> On Wed, Sep 28, 2022 at 4:52 AM Lou Berger <lberger@labn.net> wrote: >>> >>>> Hi Greg, >>>> >>>> Thanks for the response/update -- please see below. >>>> On 9/27/2022 5:52 PM, Greg Mirsky wrote: >>>> >>>> Hi Lou, >>>> thank you for the review, comments, and helpful suggestions. Please >>>> find my notes and responses inlined below under the GIM>> tag. Attached is >>>> the working version of the draft and the diff highlighting all updates. >>>> >>>> Regards, >>>> Greg >>>> >>>> On Fri, Sep 23, 2022 at 11:13 AM Lou Berger <lberger@labn.net> wrote: >>>> >>>>> Hi, >>>>> >>>>> In preparing my shepherd write up, I noticed a few minor/editorial >>>>> points that should be addressed before submission for publication to >>>>> the >>>>> IESG. >>>>> >>>>> - Number of authors: >>>>> The IESG requires justification for more than 5 authors listed on the >>>>> font page. This document has 6. Is anyone willing to move to >>>>> contributor? If not, can you provide a justification for more than 5 >>>>> authors >>>>> >>>> GIM>> I believe that all authors, in the course of developing this >>>> document, provided essential contributions. >>>> >>>> >>>> The question that needs to be answered in the Shepherd write up is as >>>> follows: >>>> >>>> >>>> 13. ... If the total number of authors and editors on the front page >>>> is greater than five, please provide a justification. >>>> >>>> Do you want me to just say? >>>> >>>> The authors believe all listed have provided essential >>>> contributions in the course of developing this document. >>>> >>>> Keep in mind the IESG pushes back hard on more than 5 authors. If the >>>> authors have a stronger justification, can you (authors) provide it. >>>> >>> I will try, but I expect that we will receive strong push back on this. >>> >>> >>> >>>>> - Inclusion of conformance boilerplate (Section 1.3) and conformance >>>>> language. >>>>> >>>>> Generally informational documents do not include the conformance >>>>> boilerplate or related language. For example, there is none in the >>>>> DetNet framework, RFC8939. On the other hand RFC 4377, OAM >>>>> Requirements >>>>> for MPLS Networks, does. >>>>> >>>>> Is there really a need for such in this document? If you do, the scope >>>>> of the requirement needs to be clear. (E.g, the requirements are on >>>>> future solutions "DetNet OAM solutions MUST..." or "solutions >>>>> providing >>>>> DetNet OAM MUST..."). Or perhaps just a statement to this effect at >>>>> the >>>>> end of section 1.3 or start of section 6. >>>>> >>>> GIM>> I propose appending Section 1.3 with the following: >>>> The requirements language in Section 6 >>>> applies to future implementations of DetNet OAM. >>>> >>>> How about >>>> >>>> The requirements language is used in Section 6 and applies to future >>>> implementations of DetNet OAM. >>>> >>> I still see requirements terms in sections other than 6 in the version >>> you sent out, e.g., >>> >>> 3. Operation >>> >>> OAM features will enable DetNet with robust operation both for >>> forwarding and routing purposes. >>> >>> It is worth noting that the test and data packets MUST follow the >>> same path, i.e., the connectivity verification has to be conducted >>> in-band without impacting the data traffic. Test packets MUST share >>> fate with the monitored data traffic without introducing congestion >>> in normal network conditions. >>> >>> >>>>> Section 3-5 I really don't see the need for conformance language in >>>>> this >>>>> section. >>>>> >>>> GIM>> Upon reviewing the last paragraph, propose to remove it >>>> altogether: >>>> OLD TEXT: >>>> DetNet OAM mechanisms SHOULD allow a fault detection in real time. >>>> They MAY, when possible, predict faults based on current network >>>> conditions. They MAY also identify and report the cause of the >>>> actual/predicted network failure. >>>> >>>> >>>>> >>>>> - Section 3.4, s/NOT RECOMMENDED/expected >>>>> >>>> GIM>> We've discussed this and propose the following update: >>>> OLD TEXT: >>>> DetNet is not expected to use multiple paths or links, i.e., Equal- >>>> Cost Multipath (ECMP) [RFC8939]. As the result, OAM in ECMP >>>> environment is outside the scope of this document. >>>> NEW TEXT >>>> DetNet is not expected to use Equal-Cost Multipath (ECMP) [RFC8939]. >>>> As the result, DetNet OAM in ECMP environment is outside the scope >>>> of this >>>> document. >>>> >>>> >>>>> - Section 5.2 >>>>> Can you rephrase/clarify the following sentence. I frankly have no >>>>> idea >>>>> what is meant by it: >>>>> >>>>> We need to provide mechanisms to patch the network >>>>> configuration. >>>>> >>>> GIM>> Thank you for pointing out this sentence to us. It is not really >>>> related to OAM but seems more in place in a discussion of the management >>>> plane. Hence, propose removing the sentence. >>>> >>>>> >>>>> That's it! >>>>> >>>> The above all looks good -- thanks! >>>> >>>> GIM>> In the course of addressing your comments, we've come up with >>>> several more editorial updates. Please let us know if these are helpful: >>>> In Section 4: >>>> OLD TEXT >>>> * per path to detect misbehaving path when multiple paths are >>>> applied. >>>> NEW TEXT >>>> * per path to detect misbehaving path(s) when multiple paths are >>>> used for service protection. >>>> >>>> In Section 5, prepend the following new text to the first paragraph: >>>> NEW TEXT: >>>> Service protection (provided by the DetNet service sub-layer) is >>>> designed >>>> to cope with simple network failures, and it mitigates the immediate >>>> reaction >>>> of the DetNet controller to network events. >>>> >>>> What about the case where a controller is not used? Do you perhaps mean >>>> "DetNet Controller Plane"? >>>> >>> Note this is a general comment: The document mentions controller in many >>> places. To be consistent with the DetNet Architecture the document should >>> allow for any 'Controller Plane' solution. This should be easily fixed, >>> starting in section 2. >>> >>> Thank you, >>> >>> Lou >>> >>> Lou >>>> >>>> >>>> >>>>> Thank you, >>>>> Lou >>>>> >>>>
- [Detnet] comments on draft-ietf-detnet-oam-framew… Lou Berger
- Re: [Detnet] comments on draft-ietf-detnet-oam-fr… Greg Mirsky
- Re: [Detnet] comments on draft-ietf-detnet-oam-fr… Lou Berger
- Re: [Detnet] comments on draft-ietf-detnet-oam-fr… Greg Mirsky
- Re: [Detnet] comments on draft-ietf-detnet-oam-fr… Lou Berger
- Re: [Detnet] comments on draft-ietf-detnet-oam-fr… Greg Mirsky
- Re: [Detnet] comments on draft-ietf-detnet-oam-fr… Lou Berger
- Re: [Detnet] comments on draft-ietf-detnet-oam-fr… Greg Mirsky
- Re: [Detnet] comments on draft-ietf-detnet-oam-fr… Lou Berger
- Re: [Detnet] comments on draft-ietf-detnet-oam-fr… Greg Mirsky